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Pay to charity in 1990 and 2010

Pay to charity in 1990 and 2010 EdjLD
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of age range of British people that they give money to philanthropy in 1990 and 2010. First, it is apparent that people who age 36-50 in 1990 was paid to donation in the highest number. Next, 3 age range that it share the relative number of 31%, 32% and 35% was 26-35 years, more than 65 and 51-65 years, respectively. And the lowest number in 1990 was 18-25 years. In the other hand, the people age 51-65 in 2010 was given cash to fund the most and followed by 35% of 36-50 years and more than 65 years. Last but not least, people age 26-35 years gave money to charity around 24%. Last, age range that they had a very few number in 2010 is 18-25 years. Overall, in the first three of age range, in 1990 were clearly higher than in 2010. But in the last 2 age range, in 2010 had a higher number.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
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of British
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that they give money to philanthropy in 1990 and 2010.

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who
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36-50 in 1990
was paid
to donation in the highest
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Next
, 3
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that it share the relative
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of 31%, 32% and 35% was 26-35 years, more than 65 and 51-65 years,
respectively
. And the lowest
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in 1990 was 18-25 years.

In the other hand, the
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51-65 in 2010 was
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cash to fund the most and followed by 35% of 36-50 years and more than 65 years. Last
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not least,
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26-35 years gave money to charity around 24%. Last,
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that they had a
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few
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in 2010 is 18-25 years.

Overall
, in the
first
three of
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, in 1990 were
clearly
higher than in 2010.
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in the last 2
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, in 2010 had a higher
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.

IELTS academic Pay to charity in 1990 and 2010

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6.0
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