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Olympics games since 1924 to 2012

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The chart and graph show information about men and woman who have participated in the Olympics games since 1924 to 2012. At the beginning, 1924, the rate of men against women was higher, 3000 participants was men and less 500 was women. In 1952, the rate of men was still higher and adding almost 1500 more men participants that year with a total 4500 men, the women participant getting a approximal 500. The Olympics from 1984 to 2012 got more increase and mainly was cause women participants.
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and woman who have participated in the Olympics games since 1924 to 2012.

At the beginning, 1924, the rate of
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against women was higher, 3000
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and less 500 was women.

In 1952, the rate of
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that year with a total 4500
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, the women
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The Olympics from 1984 to 2012
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IELTS academic Olympics games since 1924 to 2012

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