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Nowadays, the majority of food companies generate products that contain high content of sugar as a result, excessive consumption of sugary foods and drinks might lead people to suffer from various health issues. In my opinion, I agree to alleviate the market price of these commodities.

Nowadays, the majority of food companies generate products that contain high content of sugar as a result, excessive consumption of sugary foods and drinks might lead people to suffer from various health issues. In my opinion, I agree to alleviate the market price of these commodities. DoXEW
Nowadays, the majority of food companies generate products that contain high content of sugar as a result, excessive consumption of sugary foods and drinks might lead people to suffer from various health issues. In my opinion, I agree to alleviate the market price of these commodities. Many people tend to consume sugary products because they are cheap and also saving time. In a fast-changing world, employees and students are very busy with their work so they do not have enough time to prepare home-cooked food. In the UK, for example, many fast-food restaurants offer free refills of soda as a result people usually have two or even three soda meals per day. If the restaurants require significant tax revenues about 20% of these foods and drinks and do not supply refill soda, customers probably wouldn’t go there frequently. This regulation might be an extremely effective solution for being obese among low-income people since many of them are high consumers of cheap sugar-sweetened foods In addition, the government should encourage their citizen to have a healthy and balanced diet instead of eating junk food and processed clearance. Moreover, the authorities might organize some public health campaigns to educate people about the detrimental of products that contain high levels of sugar. In VietNam, for instance, thanks to TV commercials and current affairs, inhabitants know about the effect of these foods on people’s health so that the popularity of coca-cola is limited. In conclusion, increasing the price of sugar products and people's awareness is an effective way to estimate the over-consumption of sugar items. It is recommended to restrict the consumption of sugary products.
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