Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

 Fertility Rate (births per woman) in Gulf Countries, 1990-2000

Fertility Rate (births per woman) in Gulf Countries, 1990-2000 PEO2X
The bar chart compares the average natality rate for per woman from six different countries over the ten-year period. It is clear that the birth rates in 1990 and in 2000 have a similar increasing trend. Furthermore, the data in 1990 made up a higher proportion than in 2000. During both years, the average fertility rate of Oman and S. Arabia accounted for by far the highest numbers. The figure in Oman reached a peak of 7 before sharply falling to above 6 in the following ten years. Meanwhile, although the number of birthrates per million women in S. Arabia in 1990 is lower than in Oman, which was under 7, there was the same growth in both rates to 5, 5. On the other hand, by 1990, the natality rate in Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar, and UAE was on an average between 3 and 4. There was a decline in these figures to 2-3 by the year 2000.
The bar chart compares the average
Possible spelling mistake found.
natality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
for per woman from six
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
countries over the ten-year period.

It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the birth
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
in 1990 and in 2000 have a similar increasing trend.
Furthermore
, the data in 1990 made up a higher proportion than in 2000.

During both years, the average fertility
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of Oman and S. Arabia accounted for by far the highest numbers. The figure in Oman reached a peak of 7
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
sharply
falling to above 6 in the following ten years. Meanwhile, although the number of birthrates per million women in S. Arabia in 1990 is lower than in Oman, which was under 7, there was the same growth in both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
to 5, 5.
On the other hand
, by 1990, the
Possible spelling mistake found.
natality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
in Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar, and UAE was on an average between 3 and 4. There was a decline in these figures to 2-3 by the year 2000.

IELTS academic Fertility Rate (births per woman) in Gulf Countries, 1990-2000

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • the digaram below illustrates life cycle of a frog
    The diagram shows the natural process life cycle of a frog from the embryo stage, through seven developmental phases from tadpole to fully grown amphibian. Initially, the fertilised eggs grow into embryos from which very small tadpoles emerge and shelter under plants in the water or pond. The tadpo...
  • Describe the Pie charts about Nigerians and Germans.
    The preferences of people in Germany and Nigeria for choosing their first news sources to access were illustrated in the pie graphs above. Generally, Germans like newspapers most while TVs attract the interest of more Nigerians more than other types. Moreover, the least-preferred source of news in G...
  • Number of females getting higher education from 1980 to 2015
    This given chart illustrates the number of females getting higher education in UK, USA, Australia, South Korea and France in a time period of 1980 to 2015. The number of females are calculated in percentage. Overall, it can be observed that number of women was higher in 2015 as compared to 1980 wher...
  • The following shows the main sources of rubbish collected during public clean up
    The pie chart and the table represent information about the type of garbage collected from three different places through a clean-up drive in a city. The units are represented in percentages in piecharts and kilograms in table. Overall, cigarette butts accounted for 40% of collected rubbish and fig...
  • number of females getting education
    This given chart illustrates the number of females getting higher education in UK, USA, Australia, South Korea and France in a time period of 1980 to 2015. The number of females is calculated in percentage. Overall, it can be observed that number of women was higher in 2015 as compared to 1980 wher...
  • This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay on the topic of a map of the town of Lynnfield from the real IELTS exam.
    These maps show the developments which took place in Lynnfield. It can be seen that this area has been developed between 1936 and 2007. Regarding the surrounded area of the city, a river was located on the northeastern side of the city, which has been replaced by a residential area in 2007. Further...





Get more results for topic:
  •  Fertility Rate (births per woman) in Gulf Countries, 1990-2000