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The given bar chart depicts the expenses made on six consumer goods in the given year of 2012 .

The given bar chart depicts the expenses made on six consumer goods in the given year of 2012. KyXak
Overall, it is clearly seen that the expenditure made an all consumer goods gradually increased in the given period. Firstly, Britain expenses made on all consumer goods was increased than other countries, it was gradually increased. Secondly, Austria spend on books and toys consumer goods was similar with 157 thousand pounds and on console games, outdoor game accesories, cosmetics goods spend approximately 150 thousand pounds. Austria spend 165 thousand pounds on camera goods. In 2012. Spain expenditure on lonsole games, outdoor games, cosmetic and books was less than 155 thousand pounds as well as on toys and cameras approximately 158 thousand pounds. Then, Belgiums spend on all consumer goods with fluctuations and most of the expenses on outdoor game accesories with 150 thousand pounds.
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that the expenditure made an all
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gradually
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Firstly
, Britain expenses made on all
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was increased
than other countries, it was
gradually
increased.
Secondly
, Austria
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spend
on books and toys
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consumer
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goods
was similar with 157 thousand pounds and on console
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games
, outdoor game
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accesories
, cosmetics
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goods
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approximately 150 thousand pounds. Austria
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spend
165 thousand pounds on camera
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goods
. In 2012.
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Spain expenditure
on
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lonsole
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games
, outdoor
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games
, cosmetic and books was less than 155 thousand pounds
as well
as on toys and cameras approximately 158 thousand pounds. Then,
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Belgiums
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on all
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with fluctuations and most of the expenses on outdoor game
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with 150 thousand pounds.
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