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n your opinion, do you think private schools provide an unfair advantage to students who can afford private education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

n your opinion, do you think private schools provide an unfair advantage to students who can afford private education. 2RonJ
The education plays a vital role in the student life as well as education train the pupile to survive in the emerging world. The topic of the private school serve an unfair facilities to learners who belongs to affulent background can afford private education. these topic is quite debatable with agreement and disagreement. On the one hand, based on my education experience I agree with the sentence that the schools provide a lot of merits to the pupile who can be able to pay thier education. The reason behind is the cast system and the student of the well know star with low grades. Most of the schools have cast system in which the student who belongs to minority category and that student has well family background with less grades can get admit in top schools with scholraships and free of cost library access, books and traveling cost. Similarly, the student of the well know person for instance star or politicians can achieve the admit with schoraships. On the other hand, I disagree with the sentence because during the admission process for most of the well known privtate school, the addmission commitiee evaluate the profile of the student for example the higher grade of the students, the family income and their extra curriculum activities. In short they evaluate the profile of the children holistically and based on that they take the decision about the school services. In conclusion, most of the time student gets advantages based on their grades and impecunious background.
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plays a vital role in the
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student
life as
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well
as
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education
train the
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pupile
to survive in the emerging world. The topic of the private
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school
serve an unfair
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facilities
to learners who
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belongs
to
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affulent
background can afford private
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education
.
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these topic
is quite debatable with agreement and disagreement.

On the one hand, based on my
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education
experience I
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agree
with the sentence that the
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schools
provide
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a lot of
merits to the
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pupile
who can be able to pay
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thier
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education
. The reason behind is the cast system and the
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student
of the
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well know
star with low
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grades
. Most of the
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schools
have cast system in which the
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student
who belongs to minority category and that
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student
has
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well
family background with
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less
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grades
can
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get
admit in top
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schools
with
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scholraships
and free of cost library access, books and traveling cost.
Similarly
, the
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student
of the
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well know
person
for instance
star or politicians can achieve
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the admit
with
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schoraships
.

On the other hand
, I disagree with the sentence
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because
during the admission process for most of the
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well
known
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privtate
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school
, the
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addmission
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commitiee
evaluate the profile of the
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student
for example
the higher
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grade
of the
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students
, the family income and their extra curriculum activities. In
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short they
evaluate the profile of the children
holistically
and based on that they take the decision about the
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school
services.

In conclusion
, most of the time
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student
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gets
advantages based on their
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grades
and impecunious background.
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