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maps depict how a certain studying establishment has changed over the course of years starting in 2010.

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The provided maps depict how a certain studying establishment has changed over the course of years starting in 2010. Overall, it can be seen that this campus underwent a significant transformation with several novel functions which were added in order to serve the teaching, studying and living purpose more conveniently. In 2010, this school consisted three student bedrooms, a living room, a bathroom and a kitchen, besides, it also possessed a huge external garden which is located at the south and a small outdoor corner of garden at the north-west. After a few years, this campus had completely transformed, mostly regarding the number of students bedrooms. The blank of the north-western garden was utilized to construct a bedroom and the living room was also demolished for a replacement of another sleeping place. Social function was intergrated to use in a combination with cooking and eating at the kitchen. The hallway was shortened to give way to a new room which is called “En-suite room”. Last but not least, a wide space of garden which is exactly situated at the south was no longer exist, instead of that was a erecting of a car parking so as to serve the guests
The provided maps depict how a certain studying establishment has
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changed
over the course of years starting in 2010.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that this campus underwent a significant transformation with several novel functions which were
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added
in order to serve the teaching, studying and living purpose more
conveniently
.

In 2010, this school consisted three student bedrooms, a living
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room
, a bathroom and a kitchen,
besides
, it
also
possessed a huge external
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garden
which
is located
at the south and a
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small
outdoor corner of
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garden
at the north-west.

After a few years, this campus had completely transformed,
mostly
regarding the number of students bedrooms. The blank of the north-western
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garden
was utilized
to construct a bedroom and the living
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room
was
also
demolished for a replacement of another sleeping place. Social function was
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intergrated
to
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use
in a combination with cooking and eating
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at the kitchen
. The hallway
was shortened
to give way to a new
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room
which
is called
“En-suite
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room”
. Last
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but
not least, a wide space of
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garden
which is exactly situated at the south was no longer exist,
instead
of that was
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a
erecting of a car parking
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so as to
serve the
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guests
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IELTS academic maps depict how a certain studying establishment has changed over the course of years starting in 2010.

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4 paragraphs
199 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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