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Leisure time spend on different activities by people of Someland

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The table illustrastes that people to of different age groups spent their leisure time on six different activities. Analyzing the data. Teens and people in 70s Spent most of the time on television. which is slightly greater than others. Elder people were uninterested in group exercise as no one spent time in this field. Teenagers and people in their twenties Spend an average 500 hours on Socializing and 350 homs of that time with the group. of more than 4 people. Apart from that, only 50 hours of time spend on individual. exercise by people in their 50s. 40s people spend 25 hours. Overall, watching television was the most preferable activity an which people of Someland Spend the time rather than others
The table
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Analyzing the data. Teens and
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in 70s Spent most of the
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on television.
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were uninterested
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an average 500 hours on Socializing and 350
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exercise
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in their 50s. 40s
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people
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25 hours.

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Someland
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IELTS academic Leisure time spend on different activities by people of Someland

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
121 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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