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It is said that adult rated food is key to Deteroited health. How far do you agree or disagree

It is said that adult rated food is key to Deteroited health. How far pK3L0
Everyone knows that health is wealth. The majority believes that adult rated food is very hazardous to health. I agree with above stated notion in my impending textual. To commence with, it has ample of reasons how adult rated food is hazardous health. First and foremost, this type of food are harmful for health as it cause obesity among individuals. Moreover, due to the hectic schedule people do not have enough time to get healthy or homemade food. Individuals give more preference to adult rated food in nowadays. As a result, people are becoming more lethargic as compared to past. For example-40% of people suffering from health diseases by consuming these types of food. Probing ahead, food adult ration is very serious problem which is facing by all over the world. It may cause stomach upset and various health issues. As it contains low quality of products and other harmful ingredients which is not suitable for health as well as body. Therefore, due to this harmful germs may attack in the stomach. As a result, there is no proper development of cognitive skills as well as physical skills. For example-it may lead damage to other body organs like lungs as well as kidneys To conclude, although adult rated food is very harmful to health seems to be an effective way. So everyone should take healthy food to keep fit and fine. So live the life by staying healthy. Eat healthy, stay healthy.
Everyone knows that
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health
is wealth. The majority believes that adult
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rated
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food
is
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very
hazardous to
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health
. I
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agree
with above stated notion in my impending textual.

To commence with, it has ample of reasons how adult
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rated
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food
is hazardous
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health
.
First
and foremost, this type of
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food
are
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harmful
for
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health
as it cause obesity among individuals.
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people
do not have
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enough
time to
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get
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healthy
or homemade
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food
. Individuals give more preference to adult
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rated
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food
nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: "nowadays".
in nowadays
.
As a result
,
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people
are becoming more lethargic as compared to past.
For example
-40% of
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people
suffering from
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health
diseases by consuming these types of food.

Probing ahead,
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food
adult ration is
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very
serious problem which is facing by all over the world. It may cause stomach upset and various
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health
issues. As it contains low quality of products and other
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harmful
ingredients which is not suitable for
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health
as well
as body.
Therefore
, due to this
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harmful
germs may attack in the stomach.
As a result
, there is no proper development of cognitive
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skills
as well
as physical
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skills
.
For example
-it may lead damage to other body organs like lungs
as well
as kidneys

To conclude
, although adult
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rated
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food
is
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very
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harmful
to
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health
seems to be an effective way.
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everyone should take
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healthy
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food
to
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keep
fit and fine.
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So
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live
the life by staying
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healthy
. Eat
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healthy
, stay
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healthy
.
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IELTS academic It is said that adult rated food is key to Deteroited health. How far

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