Search
Tools
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

it is often held that electronical devices cause the society and humans to be less active like smartphones

it is often held that electronical devices cause the society and humans to be less active like smartphones 2bNwX

many people believe that advanced technologies have played a pivotal role in their daily life and in fact especially in 21st century it brings us lots of advantages because of different reasons. firstly we can order something to eat by telephone or by computer without moving from house. secondly mobile phones have made communication faster and cheaper, thus it can help us to talk easily with people who are living in any part on the earth. It is also possible to say, as mobiles are becoming more smarter day by day, people can share their special memories and know about news of the world, through social networks. Furthermore the use of smartphones for entertaining activities such as Facebook chatting, taking pictures, playing games, listening songs and so on. On the other hand there are some demerits as well of excessive phone usage which make people less social as they develop more virtual relationships but lacks in real relationships. People spend a lot of time withtheir mobile phones rather than spending time with their friends and family members. undoubtedly this can leads isolation. For example earlier people used to gather at the dining table and spend some quality time with their acquaintances and their households. But nowadays everyone is so busy using their phones while sitting on the dining table and interact less with each other. Eventually owing to this reason humans are becoming socially isolated and inactive. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that this trend is negatively affecting people's relations.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterMany
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 believe that advanced technologies have played a pivotal role in their daily life and in fact especially
 in 21st century it brings us lots of advantages This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 reasons. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFirstly
firstly
 we can order something to eat by telephone or by computer without moving from This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterSecondly
secondly
 mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 have made communication faster and cheaper, thus
 it can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 us to talk easily
 with You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 who are living in any part on the earth. It is also
 possible to say, as mobiles are becoming Use only "smarter" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.smarter
more smarter
 day by day, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 can share their special memories and know about news of the world, through social networks. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Furthermore,
Furthermore
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 of smartphones for entertaining activities such as Facebook chatting, taking pictures, playing games, listening songs and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 on. On the other hand
 there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 demerits as well
 of excessive You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
 usage which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 less social as they develop more virtual relationships This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 lacks in real relationships. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 spend This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
 time Possible spelling mistake found.with their
withtheir
 mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
rather
 than spending time with their friends and family members. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterUndoubtedly
undoubtedly
 this can The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "lead"lead
leads
 isolation. For example
 earlier You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to gather at the dining table and spend This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 quality time with their acquaintances and their households. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 nowadays everyone is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 busy using their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 while sitting on the dining table and interact less with each other. Eventually
 owing to this reason humans are becoming socially
 isolated and inactive. In conclusion
, for the reasons mentioned above, I strongly
 believe that this trend is negatively
 affecting This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
's relations. 