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It is also claimed that women have achieved greater freedom and have access to the same opportunities as men. The pia chart below show some employment patterns in a developed country.

It is also claimed that women have achieved greater freedom and have access to the same opportunities as men. The pia chart below show some employment patterns in a developed country. 0ljNq
The pia chart illustrate information about proportion of males and females pursuit in six categories divided into manual and non-manual profession. In generally greater percentage of women work in non-manual occupation than manual occupation and reverse is true for men. In the non-manual occupations anda a greater percentage of working women than man are found in clerical-typ positions there is a smaller percentage of women than men employed in managerial and profession positions. The percentage of men employed in other non-manual occupation is slightly larger than the percentage of women in these occupations. In manual employment, the biggest difference between the two sexes is in the employment of the workforce and females just 4, 5%. Furthermore, the percentage of women working as general labourers is small, only 11%. There is not greate deal of different between the percentage of men doing other forms of manual work (28%) and women in other manual work (32%).
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IELTS academic It is also claimed that women have achieved greater freedom and have access to the same opportunities as men. The pia chart below show some employment patterns in a developed country.

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