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improvemnt transpory in my city

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My name is Abdullah Fahad Alblawi. My student number is 4320746. Today I'm, going to talk about transport in my city. there are many options for transport in my hometown like bus, train, taxi, airplane. cars are one of the most popular kinds of transport in my town and that's most people in my city own their vehicles, so It’s common in every house to have at least one car and that’s the commonly used means of transportation here. Finally, even with all the good transportation we have, the transportation system needs to be developed, and I think there are a lot of ideas that can help with that like Starting on a new metro project like the one currently being built in Riyadh. Also building a new bus network at the same time. which will lead to a reduction and improvement in the quality of the number of car trips that are made in the city
My name is Abdullah Fahad
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Alblawi
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options for transport in my hometown like bus, train, taxi, airplane.
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to have at least one car and that’s the
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means of transportation here.
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transportation we have, the transportation system needs to
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with that like Starting on a new metro project like the one
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in Riyadh.
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building a new bus network at the same time.
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will lead to a reduction and

improvement in the quality of the number of car trips that
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IELTS academic improvemnt transpory in my city

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