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Imagine that you are going to visit a new city which one of the following ways do you think is the best way to know the city in a short time Visit historic sites Go to shops and markets Enjoy the restaurant and spend time in caf

Imagine that you are going to visit a new city which one of the following ways do you think is the best way to know the city in a short time Visit historic sites Go to shops and markets Enjoy the restaurant and spend time in caf e58o7
Travels are usually restricted in the span. Due to this fact, knowing a new city requires a well-organized plan. Many people believe that markets, restaurants, or coffee shops can represent a city, while I am of the opinion that there are few choices, if any, more beneficial for one who desires to know about a new place than visiting historical sites. I substantiate my belief by providing some supporting reasons that are elucidated below. The first reason corroborating my view is that although shops and markets can show the visitor the costume of trades, people's communication, and merchandise that people in that specific city are interested in, it can be distracting as when one goes to the shop, it is somehow impossible to resist the temptation to buy goods that are fascinating. While watching and searching for what pleases one, he or she would lose track of time. Consequently, distracted as one might be encountering new items, they often forget about their aim, which was knowing the place. In contrast to the lack of attention that might be caused by markets, historical places are all about the city, and there is nothing to draw one's attention. Additionally, tour guides are available in historic sites and delightedly explain everything one might ask about the city. Thus, all the questions would be answered in no time. The second reason is that notwithstanding enjoyable, the restaurants and cafes do not necessarily provide any information about the city. There are many places one can dine that do not serve the unique food, drink, or dessert which that city is famous for. Also, the people to whom one can speak might not know the city well. Take the youth as an example who are usually gather around each other in these places. A young person barely has enough knowledge about the city in which he or she lives to convey to a visitor. Without a shadow of a doubt, historic sites, however, are the cultural identity of the city. It is mutually exclusive to be exposed to cultural places and not receive information about the city. This is the reason that historical sites stand for the city. In historical places, there are many signs and maps in addition to tour guides that explain whatever one wants to know about the city. In conclusion, the best decision to know the city is to go sightseeing. Not only visiting historical places keep a person concentrated on his or her goal, but they also gain invaluable information about the city.
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believe that markets, restaurants, or coffee shops can represent a city, while I am of the opinion that there are few choices, if any, more beneficial for one who desires to
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know
about a new
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place
than visiting
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historical
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sites
. I substantiate my belief by providing
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supporting
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reasons
that
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below.

The
first
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reason
corroborating my view is that although shops and markets can
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show
the visitor the costume of trades,
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people
's communication, and merchandise that
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people
in that specific city
are interested
in, it can be distracting as when one goes to the shop, it is somehow impossible to resist the temptation to
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buy
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goods
that are fascinating. While watching and searching for what
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pleases
one, he or she would lose
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track
of time.
Consequently
, distracted as one
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might
be encountering new items, they
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often
forget about their aim, which
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was knowing
the
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place
.
In contrast
to the lack of attention that
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might
be caused
by markets,
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historical
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places
are all about the city, and there is nothing to draw one's attention.
Additionally
, tour guides are available in historic
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sites
and
delightedly
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explain
everything one
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might
ask about the city.
Thus
, all the questions would
be answered
in no time.

The second
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reason
is that notwithstanding enjoyable, the restaurants and
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cafes
do not
necessarily
provide any information about the city. There are
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one can dine that do not serve the unique food, drink, or dessert which that city is
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for.
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, the
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to whom one can speak
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not
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know
the city well. Take the youth as an example who are
usually
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gather
around each other in these
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places
. A young person
barely
has
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enough
knowledge about the city in which he or she
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lives
to convey to a visitor. Without a shadow of a doubt, historic
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sites
,
however
, are the cultural identity of the city. It is
mutually
exclusive to
be exposed
to cultural
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places
and not receive information about the city. This is the
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reason
that
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historical
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sites
stand for the city. In
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historical
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places
, there are
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many
signs and maps
in addition
to tour guides that
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explain
whatever one wants to
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know
about the city.

In conclusion
, the best decision to
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know
the city is to go sightseeing. Not
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only
visiting
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historical
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places
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keep
a person concentrated on
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his or her
goal,
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but
they
also
gain invaluable information about the city.
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IELTS academic Imagine that you are going to visit a new city which one of the following ways do you think is the best way to know the city in a short time Visit historic sites Go to shops and markets Enjoy the restaurant and spend time in caf

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