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Household Expenditures in three countries

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The given bar chart represents the total household spending across four major areas in the three countries in the year 2013: the UK, Australia and Japan. Overall, housing and healthcare for the most part belong to high areas of expenditure. On the other hand, food and transportation for all countries seem to be in the space of moderate spending, which doe not exceed 20%. To begin with, the UK, Australia, and Japan seem to spend almost similar expenditure in terms of housing accounted for 20% - among them the highest being Japan with figures reaching 26%. Followed by, the UK which sums up to 25%. Lastly, Australia spends the least among the three with just over 20%. Following that, healthcare seems to be in fluctuation between the three countries. Australia leads the spending in healthcare by 23% which is a slight climb in contrast to its housing expenditure. On the other hand, Japan spending is marginal in comparison to Australia which stands at 22%. However, UK healthcare fell sharply to its counterparts. Coming to, Food and Transportation. All three countries, seem to expend less than 25% in both areas- the average household in the UK spends just under 20% in food which is significantly higher than Australia and Japan. On the contrary, Australia and Japan expend funds on food with figures slightly lesser than each other accounting for 13% and 16% respectively. Ultimately, transport seems to be on a fluctuation between the three countries. The transportation spending, in the UK, sums up similar to its Food Expenditure which stands at 18%. whereas, Australia seems to spend considerably lesser than UK, in terms of transport. Finally, Japan tops the Transportation list by expending the most money when it comes to Transport at 22%.
The
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given
bar chart represents the total household
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spending
across four major areas in the three
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countries
in the year 2013: the UK, Australia and Japan.

Overall
, housing and healthcare
for the most part
belong to high areas of
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expenditure
.
On the other hand
,
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food
and
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transportation
for all
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countries
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seem
to be in the space of moderate
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spending
, which doe not exceed 20%.

To
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begin
with, the UK, Australia, and
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Japan
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seem
to
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spend
almost similar
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expenditure
in terms of housing accounted for 20%
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among them the highest being
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Japan
with figures reaching 26%. Followed by, the UK which sums up to 25%.
Lastly
, Australia
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spends
the least among the three with
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just
over 20%.

Following that, healthcare
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seems
to be in fluctuation between the three
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countries
. Australia leads the
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spending
in healthcare by 23% which is a slight climb
in contrast
to its housing
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expenditure
.
On the other hand
,
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Japan
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spending
is marginal
in comparison
to Australia which stands at 22%.
However
, UK healthcare fell
sharply
to its counterparts.

Coming to,
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Food
and
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Transportation
. All three
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countries
,
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seem
to expend less than 25% in both areas- the average household in the UK
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spends
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just
under 20% in
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food
which is
significantly
higher than Australia and
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Japan
.
On the contrary
, Australia and
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Japan
expend funds on
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food
with figures
slightly
lesser than each other accounting for 13% and 16%
respectively
.

Ultimately
, transport
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seems
to be on a fluctuation between the three
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countries
. The
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transportation
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spending
, in the UK, sums up similar to its
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Food
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Expenditure
which stands at 18%.
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whereas
, Australia
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seems
to
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spend
considerably
lesser than UK, in terms of transport.
Finally
,
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Japan
tops the
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Transportation
list by expending the most money when it
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comes
to Transport at 22%.
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