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hobbies of adults in the years 1985 and 1995.

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Given are two graphs which demonstrate and compares the hobbies of adults in the years 1985 and 1995. Taking a glance first graph (1985), we observe that prominently consists of five different parts. Thirsty two percent of adults chose to dedicate their time to watch TV in their time of leisure. Aforementioned activity sits comfortably at top of chart and was favored by most of the adult population in said year. Next up in line is eating out, with it being favored by twenty three percent of people. Followed up closely by chatting and hanging out with friends, which was the go-to for 21 percent of adults. Finally, talking with members of family allocated the second least space in chart to itself with it being only the choice made by 18 percent of people. The remaining 6 percent of adult population decide on different other activities. Onto the second chart (1995), we immediately notice the effect of emergence of computer games, nearly catching up to favored task in past decade (watching TV) with being the choice of 27 percent of adults. Watching TV, however, remains at top by allocating 30 percent of adult population leisure time to itself. We notice a striking decline in desire to spend free time with family with being reduced to be only favored by 7 percent of adults.
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Onto the second chart (1995), we immediately notice the effect of emergence of computer games,
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IELTS academic hobbies of adults in the years 1985 and 1995.

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6.5
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