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he charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The pie charts compare the change in tourism between Australia and Germany between 1960 and 2010. Overall, it is clear that the largest percentage of tourist had been changed in Australia from the people who came from Europe to Asia. While those people who came from Europe have been a maintain resource of tourism in Germany. In 1960, tourists coming from Europe contributed the largest percentage in Australia and Germany, at 53% and 45% respectively. The following country where visitors came from is English-men in Australia and American in Germany with the same proportion at 25%. And the least tourist is those people who live in Asia, at 10% in both countries. In 2010, Asian became the largest tourist resources in Australia, whereas Europan still occupied a significant share of tourist in Germany. Europan visitors decreased over 40% in Australia between 1960 and 2010, while only 5% dropped in Germany.
The pie charts compare the
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in tourism between Australia and Germany between 1960 and 2010.

Overall
, it is
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that the largest percentage of
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tourist
had been
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changed
in Australia from the
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people
who came from Europe to Asia.
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While
those
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people
who came from Europe have been
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resource of tourism in Germany.

In 1960,
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tourists
coming from Europe contributed the largest percentage in Australia and Germany, at 53% and 45%
respectively
. The following country where visitors came from is English-
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men
in Australia and American in Germany with the same proportion at 25%. And the least
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tourist
is those
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people
who
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live
in Asia, at 10% in both countries.

In 2010, Asian became the largest
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tourist
resources in Australia, whereas
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Europan
still
occupied a significant share of
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tourist
in Germany.
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Europan
visitors decreased over 40% in Australia between 1960 and 2010, while
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only
5% dropped in Germany.
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