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Given maps illustrate the changes in route to reach the city hospital during year 2007 and 2010. The original map was road access was pretty simple and had only staff car parking and bus stop near the hospital. Significant changes have been made in time span of 3 years. Firstly, by year 2010 city road and hospital road combine with a roundabout. Moreover, a roundabout has constructed on the entrance of the hospital. These two circles are making a way to bus stop in direction southwest. In between city road and hospital road there was a car parking for both staff and public. Now it became a car parking for staff only. However the public car parking is made right beside the hospital in direction northeast. Moreover, by year 2010 exactly opposite to staff car parking a roundabout is constructed. Overall, the way to reach the hospital made easy by year 2010 in compare to year 2007

Given maps illustrate the changes in route to reach the city hospital during year 2007 and 2010. The original map was road access was pretty simple and had only staff car parking and bus stop near the hospital. Significant changes have been made in time span of 3 years. Firstly, by year 2010 city road and hospital road combine with a roundabout. Moreover, a roundabout has constructed on the entrance of the hospital. These two circles are making a way to bus stop in direction southwest. In between city road and hospital road there was a car parking for both staff and public. Now it became a car parking for staff only. However the public car parking is made right beside the hospital in direction northeast. Moreover, by year 2010 exactly opposite to staff car parking a roundabout is constructed. Overall, the way to reach the hospital made easy by year 2010 in compare to year 2007 jR5bX
Given maps illustrate the changes in route to reach the city hospital during year 2007 and 2010. The original map was road access was pretty simple and had only staff car parking and bus stop near the hospital. Significant changes have been made in time span of 3 years. Firstly, by year 2010 city road and hospital road combine with a roundabout. Moreover, a roundabout has constructed on the entrance of the hospital. These two circles are making a way to bus stop in direction southwest. In between city road and hospital road there was a car parking for both staff and public. Now it became a car parking for staff only. However the public car parking is made right beside the hospital in direction northeast. Moreover, by year 2010 exactly opposite to staff car parking a roundabout is constructed. Overall, the way to reach the hospital made easy by year 2010 in compare to year 2007
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in route to reach the city
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hospital
during
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2007 and 2010.

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access was pretty simple and had
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staff
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stop
near the hospital.

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have
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in time span of 3 years.
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2010 city
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road
and
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hospital
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road
combine with a roundabout.
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, a roundabout has constructed on the entrance of the
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hospital
. These two circles are making a way to bus
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stop
in direction southwest.

In between city
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and
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hospital
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road
there was a
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car
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parking
for both
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staff
and public.
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it became a
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the public
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car
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is made
right beside the
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hospital
in direction northeast.

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, by
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year
2010 exactly opposite to
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staff
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car
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a roundabout
is constructed
.

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, the way to reach the
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hospital
made easy by
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2010 in compare to
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2007

IELTS academic Given maps illustrate the changes in route to reach the city hospital during year 2007 and 2010. The original map was road access was pretty simple and had only staff car parking and bus stop near the hospital. Significant changes have been made in time span of 3 years. Firstly, by year 2010 city road and hospital road combine with a roundabout. Moreover, a roundabout has constructed on the entrance of the hospital. These two circles are making a way to bus stop in direction southwest. In between city road and hospital road there was a car parking for both staff and public. Now it became a car parking for staff only. However the public car parking is made right beside the hospital in direction northeast. Moreover, by year 2010 exactly opposite to staff car parking a roundabout is constructed. Overall, the way to reach the hospital made easy by year 2010 in compare to year 2007

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  • Given maps illustrate the changes in route to reach the city hospital during year 2007 and 2010. The original map was road access was pretty simple and had only staff car parking and bus stop near the hospital. Significant changes have been made in time span of 3 years. Firstly, by year 2010 city road and hospital road combine with a roundabout. Moreover, a roundabout has constructed on the entrance of the hospital. These two circles are making a way to bus stop in direction southwest. In between city road and hospital road there was a car parking for both staff and public. Now it became a car parking for staff only. However the public car parking is made right beside the hospital in direction northeast. Moreover, by year 2010 exactly opposite to staff car parking a roundabout is constructed. Overall, the way to reach the hospital made easy by year 2010 in compare to year 2007