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Given are pie charts illustrating the average proportions of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugar in American meals.

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Given are pie charts illustrating the average proportions of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugar in American meals. It is evident from the information supplied that dinner is rich in fat and sodium, while snacks have the highest amount of sugar. Moreover, breakfast has the lowest levels of all three mentioned nutrients. As shown by the figures, people in the USA consume 43% sodium, 37% fat, and 23% added sugar once eating dinner. Lunch in the second place has the most significant sodium and fat proportion with 29% and 26%, respectively. Sugar, meanwhile, take up 19% in lunch, whereas snacks have the most portion of sugar with 42%. The snacks contain 21% fat, followed by the lowest amount of sodium at 14%. Also noteworthy is the fact that the proportion of fat and sugar is the same in breakfast at 16%, while it has only intake 14% sodium, making it to the most healthy meal.
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are pie charts illustrating the average proportions of sodium, saturated
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fats
, and
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added
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sugar
in American meals.

It is evident from the information supplied that dinner is rich in
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fat
and sodium, while snacks have the highest amount of
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sugar
.
Moreover
, breakfast has the lowest levels of all three mentioned nutrients.

As shown by the figures,
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people
in the USA consume 43% sodium, 37%
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fat
, and 23%
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added
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sugar
once eating dinner. Lunch in the second place has the most significant sodium and
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fat
proportion with 29% and 26%,
respectively
.
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Sugar
, meanwhile, take up 19% in lunch, whereas snacks have the most portion of
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sugar
with 42%. The snacks contain 21%
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fat
, followed by the lowest amount of sodium at 14%.

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Also
noteworthy is the fact that the proportion of
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fat
and
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sugar
is the same in breakfast at 16%, while it has
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only
intake 14% sodium, making it to the most healthy meal.
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IELTS academic Given are pie charts illustrating the average proportions of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugar in American meals.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
155 words
6.5
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