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Describe map in two different periods in 2007 and 2010

Describe map in two different periods in 2007 and 2010 KyEV1
The two maps below depict the structure of pathways surrounding the cidt hospital at different times in 2007 and 201. It is obvious from the maps that in 2007 there were only three buildings whereas in 2010 there was one additional construction and relocation of some facilities. In 2007 the city hospital was centre surrounding by Ring road and there was the hospital road at the south of it. At the east of hospital road is a car park and apart from every building is a bus stop at the east of city hospital. subsequently, in 2010, the car park was separated into two zone, one for staff at the same spot and others for a public car park across the ring road by east side of city hospital. There were two roundabout added both in hospital road and the last one they relocated bus stop to south west of city hospital connected with hospital road.
The two maps below depict the structure of pathways surrounding the
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cidt
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hospital
at
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different
times in 2007 and 201. It is obvious from the maps that in 2007 there were
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only
three buildings whereas in 2010 there was one additional construction and relocation of
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some
facilities.

In 2007 the city
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hospital
was
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centre
surrounding by Ring
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road
and there was the
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hospital
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road
at the south of it. At the east of
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hospital
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road
is a car park and apart from every building is a bus
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stop
at the east of city hospital.

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subsequently
, in 2010, the car park
was separated
into two
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zone
, one for staff at the same spot
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and others
for a public car park across the ring
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road
by east side of city
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hospital
. There were two roundabout
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added
both in
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hospital
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road
and the last one they relocated bus
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stop
to
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south west
of city
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hospital
connected with
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hospital
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road
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IELTS academic Describe map in two different periods in 2007 and 2010

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6.0
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