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Consumption of three spreads was shown in the line graph from the year 1981 to 2007.

Consumption of three spreads was shown in the line graph from the year 1981 to 2007. kY5pW
The line graph consists of the year on the x-axis and on y- axis grams are represented. There are three spreads in total which illustrated in the graph namely Margarine, Lowfat& reduced spreads and Butter which are differentiated with colours on the graph. The consumption of Margarine was previewed from 1981 at that time it was a slight decrease in the intake but it maintained fluctuation throughout these years. There is no gradual increase or decrease in this spread. It almost stayed same but fluctuating little high or low and in the year 1996 there is a drastic decrease in the intake of the spread. Lowfat and Reduced spreads are the second most statistic that has been represented in the graph. Until 1996 there is no data present on this item. From this year the data has been tracked and there is an increase in consumption of this spreads ascendingly. From then it is decreasing but maintaining its graph. Final spread is butter this was the most consumed product from all the three. In the year 1981, it was started at 140 grams and then increased to 160 grams in the span of 5 years and then started its downfall until 2007. There is no raise again. It constantly dropping its consumption all these years. In the year 2007 it was tracked only 50 grams of butter. At that moment this was the second large consumption according to the analytics.
The line
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consists of the
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year
on the x-axis and on y- axis
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grams
are represented
. There are three
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spreads
in total which illustrated in the
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graph
namely
Margarine,
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Lowfat&
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reduced
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spreads
and Butter which
are differentiated
with
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colours
on the
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graph
. The
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consumption
of Margarine
was previewed
from 1981 at that time it was a slight decrease in the intake
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but
it maintained fluctuation throughout these years. There is no gradual increase or decrease in this
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spread
. It almost stayed same
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but
fluctuating
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little
high or low and in the
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year
1996 there is a drastic decrease in the intake of the
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spread
.
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Lowfat
and
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Reduced
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spreads
are the second most statistic that has
been represented
in the
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graph
.
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1996 there is no data present on this item. From this
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year
the data has been
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tracked
and there is an increase in
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consumption
of
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this
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spreads
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ascendingly
. From
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then it
is decreasing
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but
maintaining its
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graph
. Final
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spread
is butter this was the most consumed product from all the three. In the
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year
1981, it was
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started
at 140
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grams
and then increased to 160
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grams
in the span of 5 years and then
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started
its downfall until 2007. There is no raise again. It
constantly
dropping its
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consumption
all these years. In the
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year
2007 it was
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tracked
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only
50
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grams
of butter. At that moment this was the second large
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consumption
according to the analytics.
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IELTS academic Consumption of three spreads was shown in the line graph from the year 1981 to 2007.

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