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bar graph illustrates the utilization of power by ten various states in 2014.

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he given bar graph illustrates the utilization of power by ten various states in 2014. Overall, it is explicitly observed that the china was the most significant country who utilize the electric-circuit which found on rank 1 whereas, Korea, Rep was the least significant due to less use of electronic device. Getting back to the details that the people of china took more electricity in their daily routine, which was 5322 (billion kWh) and US was making 4099 (billion kWh) of service on the contrary among of them they were use merely 3866 (billion kWh) of energy. After that, 4099 (billion kWh) of power was manufactured by Russia authority, even though they were saved hardly (19 billion kWh). Moving further, the rest of the information is that japan had 9362(billion kWh) of heat on the contrary Japaneses were 836. 7(billion kWh) spending on their needs. However, the other states were saved some of the amount of energy from their production and Germany was the one of country where it was extra consumption of heat more than production.

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given
 bar graph illustrates the utilization of power by ten various states in 2014.

Overall
, it is explicitly
 observed that the china was the most significant country who utilize the electric-circuit which found on rank 1 whereas, Korea, Rep was the least significant due to less This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 of electronic device.

Getting back to the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
 that the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 of china took more electricity in their daily routine, which was 5322 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
(billion
 kWh) and US was making 4099 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
(billion
 kWh) of service on the contrary
 among of them they were This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
merely
 3866 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
(billion
 kWh) of energy. After that, 4099 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
(billion
 kWh) of power was manufactured
 by Russia authority, even though
 they were saved
 hardly (19 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billion
 kWh).

Moving further
, the rest of the information is that japan had You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
9362(billion
 kWh) of heat on the contrary
 Japaneses were 836. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
7(billion
 kWh) spending on their needs. However
, the other states were saved
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?some
some of the
 amount of energy from their production and Germany was the one of country where it was extra consumption of heat more than production. 