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aph gives the information of the comparison the amount number between males and females graduated in the university in Canada since 1992 to 2007.

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The given line graph gives the information of the comparison the amount number between males and females graduated in the university in Canada since 1992 to 2007. Overall, it can be seen that females have the high number graduated more than males in several time. In 1992, Canada has females who graduated around 99, 000 and continued increase gradually to 2000. However, it starts grow sharply in 2001 and keep jumping with the highest number 149, 000 of females in 2006. Another significant feature is that, compare with males, males have lower number of people who are graduated which has 70, 000 in 1992 and stay constant in several year. But after the year 2002, number of male graduated has go up substantially and has total number of males graduated 98, 000 in 2006. However, it is also interesting to note that in Canada, females have the higher total number of people who graduated in the university compare with males that has less than 51, 000 people in that period of time.
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in several time. In 1992, Canada has
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who graduated around 99, 000 and continued increase
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to 2000.
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jumping with the highest
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149, 000 of
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in 2006.

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,
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have lower
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graduated 98, 000 in 2006.

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have the higher total
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in the university compare with
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IELTS academic aph gives the information of the comparison the amount number between males and females graduated in the university in Canada since 1992 to 2007.

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