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The pie chart depicts the figure for people who employed in different kinds of work such as manufacturing, sales and services between town A and B over a period of 50 years. Overall, the percentage of employees in manufacturing increased, while those who worked at sales sector witnessed a slight decrease in both two towns. Also, services in town A seemed lesser appealing people to work from 1960 to 2010, but it did not happen in town B. In 1960, 41% of people in town A working at sales followed by the services and manufacturing sectors, which stood at 30% each. Similarly, the sales sector was also the first-priority for workers in town B accounted for 70%, which by far higher than the proportion of those working at manufacturing and services sectors, which was 10% and 20% respectively. Over the next of 50 years, the data from the chart showed much variation. In town A, manufacturing sector had a tendency to climb up by 35% and became the most popular job which people employed in 2010, while sales-related jobs were chosen by over half of people in town B in the same year. Additionally, there was a decline by half in the number of employees in services in town A, whereas a moderate rise was seen in town B (22%) between 1960 and 2010.
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A and B over a period of 50 years.
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manufacturing
increased, while those who worked at
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sales
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sector
witnessed a slight decrease in both two
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sales
followed by the
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manufacturing
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, which stood at 30% each.
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-priority for workers in
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B accounted for 70%, which by far higher than the proportion of those working at
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services
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, which was 10% and 20%
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much variation. In
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A,
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manufacturing
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had a tendency to climb up by 35% and became the most popular job which
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people
employed in 2010, while sales-related jobs
were chosen
by over half of
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