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A glance at the bar chart provided reveals the proportion of students using (thêm different types of) tobacco (thêm products) in high school and middle school. It is evident from the information that students in senior school had a much higher tobacco consumption compared to middle school ones. Any use was the most common type among both high school and middle school students with 35% and 13% respectively. The second most favoured product was Cigarettes, around 27% for senior schoolers. This figure was three times greater than that of middle schoolers. Further down the list was Cigars with roughly 7

A glance at the bar chart provided reveals the proportion of students using (thêm different types of) tobacco (thêm products) in high school and middle school. It is evident from the information that students in senior school had a much higher tobacco consumption compared to middle school ones. Any use was the most common type among both high school and middle school students with 35% and 13% respectively. The second most favoured product was Cigarettes, around 27% for senior schoolers. This figure was three times greater than that of middle schoolers. Further down the list was Cigars with roughly 7 56EXm
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IELTS academic A glance at the bar chart provided reveals the proportion of students using (thêm different types of) tobacco (thêm products) in high school and middle school. It is evident from the information that students in senior school had a much higher tobacco consumption compared to middle school ones. Any use was the most common type among both high school and middle school students with 35% and 13% respectively. The second most favoured product was Cigarettes, around 27% for senior schoolers. This figure was three times greater than that of middle schoolers. Further down the list was Cigars with roughly 7

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