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When I was a kid, my minds was still immature, and I didn't realize it, but I made a lot of dumb mistakes that, looking back, I find amusing.

When I was a kid, my minds was still immature, and I didn't realize it, but I made a lot of dumb mistakes that, looking back, I find amusing. BwxgV
When I was a kid, my minds was still immature, and I didn't realize it, but I made a lot of dumb mistakes that, looking back, I find amusing. I don't remember it completely, but when I was five years old, I watched my mother cleaning the home; at the time, I regularly emulated adult acts. I don't remember much, but my mother must have been busy with something at the time, so she left the house, which accidentally led to the unlucky incident I'm about to tell. I grabbed the broom that was hanging on a hook not far from the ground, but about an arm's length from my head at the time. I had to go on tiptoe all the way to get to the broom handle. It had been raining that day, so the floor where I was standing was extremely wet, putting me in an unexpected predicament. I slipped and fell after getting the broom; if I had just fallen, there would be nothing to say, but as I fell, my foot was on the broom head, causing the broom to rise up. The broomstick smacked me in the face. It was a really really painful bump, you know. It hurt so much that I still have a stinging sensation in my cheekbones when I think about it. I would have cried a lot if I were there at the time, but now I just find it humorous. It was also a funny incident that happened to me as a child.
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I made
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dumb mistakes that, looking back, I find amusing. I don't remember it completely,
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when I was five years
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, I
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watched
my mother cleaning the home; at the
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, I
regularly
emulated adult acts. I don't remember much,
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but
my mother
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must
have been busy with something at the
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,
so
she
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left
the
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house
, which
accidentally
led to the unlucky incident I'm about to
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I
grabbed the
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broom
that was hanging on a hook not far from the ground,
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but
about an arm's length from my head at the
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time
.
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I
had to go on tiptoe all the way to
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get
to the
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broom
handle. It had been raining that day,
so
the floor where I was standing was
extremely
wet, putting me in an unexpected predicament. I slipped and fell after getting the
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broom
; if I had
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just
fallen, there would be nothing to say,
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but
as I fell, my foot was on the
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broom
head, causing the
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broom
to rise up. The broomstick smacked me in the face. It was a
really
really
painful bump,
you know
. It hurt
so
much that I
still
have a stinging sensation in my cheekbones when I
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think
about it. I would have cried a lot if I were there at the
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time
,
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now
I
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find it humorous. It was
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a
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incident that happened to me as a child.
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IELTS speaking When I was a kid, my minds was still immature, and I didn't realize it, but I made a lot of dumb mistakes that, looking back, I find amusing.

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