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Welcome to my presentation. First of all, let me introduce myself. I am Jenny Tok Ming Fern from DAT5B. My matric number is 04DAT19F1042. Today I am presenting and describing the graph as shown. This is a line graph. As presented the x-axis which is horizontal stands for the periods while the y-axis which is vertical stands for the level of acidity. The graphs also illustrate three different sweet items such as the red line is for fruit sugar, the green line is for cane sugar, and last but not least the blue is for honey. The line graph presents the acidity level of the mouth after consuming three various sweet items namely fruit sugar, cane sugar, and honey over forty minutes. The given graph shows that high acid levels are measured by the low pH level in our mouth, and the lower the pH level, it is more likely to decay the tooth. At the moment of eating three sweets, acid levels are extremely low and equal at 7 pH then begins to fall after ingesting sweet foods. When we eat sweet item such as cane sugar, the acidity level of the mouth increased sharply in five minutes and reached 3. 5 pH level then remain at a risky level which is below pH level 5. 5 for more than 25 minutes. During this phase, tooth decay is most likely to happen. Consuming fruit sugar drops the pH level nearly to 4 in five minutes. After that, the level of acidity of the mouth reached a normal level in 15 minutes. Therefore, teeth remained at the dangerous level for about 15 minutes. Lastly, when we eat honey, the acidity level of the mouth increased dramatically in five minutes, the pH level falls from 7 to below 5 then remains unchanged for about 5 minutes. After that, the pH level increased moderately and reached the normal level but the teeth remain under risk level for about 10 minutes. In short, all three sweet items have a chance to cause tooth decay. However, among the three, honey is less likely to cause dental problems as it loses its acidity faster compared to fruit sugar and cane sugar. It is also obvious that cane sugar has the highest acidity and its acid content above safety level is maintained for the longest period in the mouth. Therefore, it should be prevented. That all from me. Thank you for listening.
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. As presented the x-axis which is horizontal stands for the periods while the y-axis which is vertical stands for the
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is for
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, the green
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is for
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The
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presents the acidity
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,
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, and honey over forty minutes.
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that high acid
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in our
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, it is more likely to decay the tooth.

At the moment of eating three sweets, acid
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, the acidity
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increased
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then remain at a risky
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which is below pH
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5. 5 for more than 25 minutes. During this phase, tooth decay is most likely to happen. Consuming
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drops the pH
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nearly
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of acidity of the
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reached a normal
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in 15 minutes.
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increased
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falls from 7 to below 5 then remains unchanged for about 5 minutes. After that, the pH
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increased
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In short, all three
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have a chance to cause tooth decay.
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and
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has the highest acidity and its acid content above safety
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