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Talk about a person you know who fluently speaks a foreign language. v.1

Talk about a person you know who fluently speaks a foreign language. v. 1
Talk about a person you know who fluently speaks a foreign language. You should say: who this person is when and where you met this person what you like /dislike about it And explain how that person learned this language. Sample Answer 1: My Aunt Margarita, who works as a journalist, can speak German very fluently. Margarita is my maternal aunt and she is 29. She is married to a businessman and is the mother of a two years old son. I know her my whole life. She is only 3 years senior to me and we are very close. She even stayed at our house during her university days. She often helped me with my studies and I liked her due to her ambient nature and remarkable spirit. Since we were at the same university, we often met at the university campus and had our lunch together at a canteen. After Margarita finished her graduation, she went to Munich to complete her post graduation in journalism. She stayed there for more than 4 years and worked for a daily newspaper as a part-time reporter. I guess this is the time when she learned the German language. As far as I know, she even tried to learn German when she decided to go to Garmany. She is a quick learner and she must have learned the language during her stay in Germany. She still works as an online journalist for an online magazine that offers their news in 5 languages including German. I believe that learning a second language is always beneficial. It expands our understanding of the country  where this is spoken, about their people, their culture, ways of life and many other aspects. Scientific research also proves that people who can speak multiple languages have a better understanding of foreign cultures and have less prejudice about their own culture. This in a way broadens our mind and ways of thinking. I like it very much that my aunt can speak the German very fluently. She is an aspiring journalist and I am sure her talent, dedication and skill in foreign languages will help her ride on the top of her career ladder. Personally, I believe that skills in a foreign language enhance our career prospect and make us wiser and inquisitive about learning.   Sample Answer 2: Learning is language in a matured age is really difficult. But Mr Christopher David is an extraordinary man who has learnt French and can fluently speak the language. He is an Australian and teaches English at my college here in Delhi. Mr David is a genius with some other extraordinary qualities. He loves to sing and composes music as well. But he is mostly successful as a teacher. He can teach English in a skilled manner which I have never seen before. He is well aware of the pronunciations and regularly takes tests of his students. He is over 6’ and has a smart look. Mr David likes to be formal always and even he is formal at his home as well. Further, he is very kind in nature and always ready to support any of his students. Consequently, he has gained the reputation as a very good teacher in the college. I got admitted in this college last year and I have a mandatory course on the English language. Mr David was the English teacher for the college and he has been playing the role for a couple of years. it appeared weird to me when I saw him first in the college. Later, I came to know about his identity as a teacher and wanted to attend his class. Fortunately, he was assigned for taking our English class in the first week after admission. I got familiar with him in the class and came to know about him. He described all of his life events in the first class. He also mentioned that he was able to speak fluently in some other languages other than English while the French language was one of them. I like him very much and really he is adorable. Firstly, he never uses any other language in the class other than English. So, it is a great benefit for me that I could hear English round the class hours. As a result, I have developed an improved hearing of English and can pronounce many words with the exact pronunciation. Besides, Mr David makes the lessons easier. He breaks the lesson into different parts and explains them. He uses plenty of examples to make us understand the lessons and topics. This is a great way to teach and effective as well. Often I had to visit him at his home (he lives nearby to my residence) and found that he is really a cordial individual as he is in the college hours. While having a conversation in the class, he was discussing the use of different language. Gradually, it appeared that how many languages do his students knew. Then he revealed that he knows five languages and French is one of them. He described that he had to learn the langue while he was in France for his career. He wanted to be a painter and thus went to France in the beginning of his career. But unluckily he failed to shine as a professional painter. Then he left the country. He struggled there for over three years before leaving the passion to be a painter. So, he had to learn the language to communicate with the surroundings. So, now he is affluent speaker of French. But later, he took teaching as his profession and career and been engaged in teaching for seven years last.
Talk about a
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person
you
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know
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who
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fluently
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speaks
a
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foreign
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language
. You should say:
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who
this
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person
is when and where you met this
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person
what you like /dislike about it And
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explain
how that
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person
learned this
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language
. Sample Answer 1:

My Aunt Margarita,
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who
works as a journalist, can
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speak
German
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very
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fluently
. Margarita is my maternal aunt and she is 29. She
is married
to a businessman and is the mother of a two years
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old
son.

I
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know
her my whole life. She is
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only
3 years senior to
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me and
we are
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very
close. She even stayed at our
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house
during her university days.
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She
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often
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helped
me with my studies and I liked her due to her ambient nature and remarkable spirit. Since we were at the same university, we
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often
met at the university campus and had our lunch together at a canteen.

After Margarita finished her graduation, she went to Munich to complete her post graduation in journalism. She stayed there for more than 4 years and worked for a daily newspaper as a part-time reporter.
I guess
this is the time when she learned the German
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language
. As far as I
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know
, she even tried to learn German when she decided to go to
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Garmany
. She is a quick
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learner and
she
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must
have learned the
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language
during her stay in Germany. She
still
works as an online journalist for an online magazine that offers their news in 5
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languages
including German.

I believe that learning a second
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language
is always beneficial. It expands our understanding of the country
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where this
is spoken
, about their
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people
, their culture,
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ways
of life and
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many
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other
aspects. Scientific research
also
proves that
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people
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who
can
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speak
multiple
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languages
have a better understanding of
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foreign
cultures and have less prejudice about their
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own
culture. This in a
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way
broadens our mind and
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ways
of thinking. I like it
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very
much that my aunt can
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speak
the German
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very
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fluently
. She is an aspiring
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journalist and
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skill
in
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foreign
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languages
will
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help
her ride on the top of her
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career
ladder.
Personally
, I believe that
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skills
in a
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foreign
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language
enhance our
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career
prospect and
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make
us wiser and inquisitive about learning.
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Sample Answer 2:

Learning is
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language
in a matured age is
really
difficult.
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But
Mr Christopher David is an extraordinary
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man
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who
has
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learnt
French and can
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fluently
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speak
the
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language
. He is an Australian and teaches English at my college here in Delhi.

Mr David is a genius with
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some
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other
extraordinary qualities. He
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loves
to sing and composes music as
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well
.
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But
he is
mostly
successful as a
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teacher
. He can teach English
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in a skilled manner
which I have never
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seen
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before
. He is
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well
aware of the pronunciations and
regularly
takes
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tests
of his students.
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He
is over 6’ and has a smart look. Mr David likes to be formal always and even he is formal at his home as
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well
.
Further
, he is
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very
kind in nature and always ready to support any of his students.
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, he has gained the reputation as a
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very
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good
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teacher
in the college.

I
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got
admitted in this college last
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year
and I have a mandatory course on the English
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language
. Mr David was the English
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teacher
for the
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college and
he has been playing the role for a couple of years.
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it
appeared weird to me when I
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saw
him
first
in the college. Later, I came to
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know
about his identity as a
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teacher
and wanted to attend his
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class
.
Fortunately
, he
was assigned
for taking our English
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class
in the
first
week after admission. I
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got
familiar with him in the
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class
and came to
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know
about him. He
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described
all of his life
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events
in the
first
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class
. He
also
mentioned that he was able to
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speak
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fluently
in
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some
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other
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languages
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other
than English while the French
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language
was one of them.

I like him
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very
much and
really
he is adorable.
Firstly
, he never
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uses
any
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other
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language
in the
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class
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other
than English.
So
, it is a great benefit for me that I could hear English round the
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class
hours.
As a result
, I have developed an
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improved
hearing of English and can pronounce
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many
words with the exact pronunciation.
Besides
, Mr David
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makes
the lessons easier. He breaks the lesson into
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different
parts and
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explains
them. He
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uses
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plenty
of examples to
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make
us understand the lessons and topics. This is a great
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way
to teach and effective as
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well
.
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Often
I had to visit him at his home (he
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lives
nearby to my residence) and found that he is
really
a cordial individual as he is in the college hours.

While having a conversation in the
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class
, he was discussing the
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use
of
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different
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language
.
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, it appeared that how
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many
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languages
do his students knew. Then he revealed that he
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knows
five
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languages
and French is one of them. He
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described
that he had to learn the
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langue
while he was in France for his
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career
. He wanted to be a painter and
thus
went to France in the beginning of his
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career
.
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But
unluckily
he failed to shine as a professional painter. Then he
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left
the country. He struggled there for over three years
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before
leaving the passion to be a painter.
So
, he had to learn the
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language
to communicate with the surroundings.
So
,
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now
he
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is affluent
speaker of French.
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But
later, he took teaching as his profession and
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career
and
been engaged
in teaching for seven years last.
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76Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS speaking Talk about a person you know who fluently speaks a foreign language. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
10 paragraphs
950 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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