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Describe a person you know who is beautiful or handsome. v.1

Describe a person you know who is beautiful or handsome. v. 1
Describe a person you know who is beautiful or handsome. You should say: who is he/she how you know him/her what you know about him/her and explain why you think he/she is beautiful or handsome. Model Answer 1: Irene, a friend of my elder sister, is both beautiful and handsome whom I know for a long. Her full name is Irene Chemo and she works in a multinational company as a senior executive. She is 5 feet 9, has a slender body and a great complexion. On top of that, she has a great fashion sense and her intelligence and amiable personality make her even more handsome. As I heard from my sister, Irene once won an award for the extraordinary performance in a fashion design competition. In my opinion, she is a rare combination of beauty, intelligence, fashion sense, sense of humour and kindness. Irene is my sister's school friend and I know her from my early childhood. She often comes to our house and I have been to her house on several occasions. She lives with her parents and three other siblings. She is 26 and last year she finished her  graduation. Now she is working full full-time in a large company and planning to establish a small coffee shop near her house. She has asked my sister to be her business partner. Irene is undoubtedly a beautiful person - both in appearance and in thoughts. She has got the kind of look that can be described as unique and elegant. I guess she could have easily become a renowned model in our country. Her sense of fashion is quite fabulous and most importantly, her higher IQ makes her stand out of the crowd. Furthermore, she is kind and helpful and her amiable and affectionate behaviours make her even more likeable. Her innocent look and the distinctive fashion sense are worth noticing. For all these reasons, I like her very much and have picked her for this cue card topic. I belive the definition of the term 'smart' or 'handsome' is not that straightforward and someone's intelligence is equally important to become handsome as much as his or her physical appearance is. From this regards, Irene is smart, good looking and handsome.   Sample Answer 2: Thank you for allowing me to discuss the topic. Since my birth, I have met a good number of people but none of them is as beautiful as my mum is. She is the most beautiful lady I have ever seen in my life. And I am really happy to have the chance of introducing her to you. My mum, Rini Mutsoku is a striking lady. She loves her family much and been caring the family for a long time. She is well-educated and has completed her MA in social science. She is smart, intelligent and owns a pretty look with her dashing eyes. She is in her middle age now and used to be a teacher in a local school here in Japan. She left the job a couple of years ago and turned into a full-fledged homemaker. She has a distinctive style of cooking and she can cook different sorts of traditional foods. In fact, she has got a training on cooking. I am a young lady and have completed my graduation from the University of Tokyo. Rini Mutsoku is my mum and I have a very intimate bonding with her since after my birth. Though I am not the only daughter to her, she loves me much being the youngest one. But she tries to take care properly for each of the members. She arranges for everything to run the household. My dad is also happy with her efforts and often tries to help her in domestic chores. Being a fresh graduate, it is not possible for me to help her in all such activities as I am busy with searching jobs and interviews across the city. Besides, my other siblings are also busy with their respective activities. Hence, it is my mum who is to take care of everything at the home. The early life of my parents was not so good. In fact, they had to struggle a lot to come in the current position. Life was challenging for them, especially for my mum. Her parents did not want her to get married to my dad for some reasons. At that time, dad was not too much wealthy but he had potentials. After lots of struggles and challenges, both of them got married and started their life together. She continued caring for the home and teaching simultaneously. When my elder two brothers were born, she had to struggle more for taking care of her boys. She also had to suffer for me in my childhood. But now all the sufferings are gone. My mum is beautiful in many aspects. Firstly, she has a beautiful mind filled with kindness. She loves to help others. Her beauty lies in her mind. Of course, she has a fair skin but it does not reflect her inner beauty. I have had close contacts with her for numerous times and discovered her inner self. She is a lovely lady of around 40 and loves to socialise. Almost everyone loves her for her benevolent nature. Besides, she is extremely caring for us. When I was a kid, she used to teach me different course with outstanding examples. And now I realise that how adorable she is. She has managed everything, made the family relations stronger, smartly handled all the distressful moments and more other issues. So, I think she is a beautiful lady in all terms.
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a person you
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know
who is
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beautiful
or
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handsome
. You should say: who is he/she how you
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know
him/her what you
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know
about him/her and
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explain
why you
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think
he/she is
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beautiful
or
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handsome
. Model Answer 1:

Irene, a friend of my elder sister, is both
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beautiful
and
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handsome
whom I
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know
for a long. Her full name is Irene
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Chemo and
she works in a multinational
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company
as a senior executive. She is
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5 feet
9, has a slender body and a great complexion.
On top of that
, she has a great
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fashion
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sense
and her intelligence and amiable personality
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make
her even more
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handsome
. As I heard from my sister, Irene once won an award for the extraordinary performance in a
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fashion
design competition. In my opinion, she is a rare combination of beauty, intelligence,
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fashion
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sense
,
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sense
of
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humour
and kindness.

Irene is my sister's school friend and I
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know
her from my early childhood. She
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often
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comes
to our
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house
and I have been to her
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house
on several occasions. She
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lives
with her parents and three
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other
siblings.
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She
is 26 and last year she finished her
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graduation.
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Now
she is working full full-time in a large
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company
and planning to establish a
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small
coffee shop near her
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house
. She has asked my sister to be her business partner.

Irene is
undoubtedly
a
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beautiful
person
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-
both in appearance and in thoughts. She has
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got
the kind of look that can be
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described
as unique and elegant.
I guess
she could have
easily
become a renowned model in our country. Her
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sense
of
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fashion
is quite fabulous and most
importantly
, her higher IQ
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makes
her stand out of the crowd.
Furthermore
, she is kind and helpful and her amiable and affectionate
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behaviours
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make
her even more likeable. Her innocent look and the distinctive
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fashion
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sense
are worth noticing. For all these reasons, I like her
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very
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much
and have picked her for this cue card topic.

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I belive
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equally
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important
to become
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handsome
as
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much
as
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his or her
physical appearance is. From
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this
regards, Irene is smart,
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good looking
and
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handsome
.
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Sample Answer 2:

Thank you for allowing me to discuss the topic. Since my birth, I have met a
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good
number of
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people
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but
none of them is as
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beautiful
as my
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mum
is. She is the most
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beautiful
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lady
I have ever
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seen
in my
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life
. And I am
really
happy to have the chance of introducing her to you.

My
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mum
,
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Rini
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Mutsoku
is a striking
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lady
. She
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loves
her family
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much
and been caring the family for a long time. She is
well
-educated and has completed her MA in social science.
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She
is smart, intelligent and
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owns
a pretty look with her dashing eyes.
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She
is in her middle age
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now
and
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used
to be a teacher in a local school here in Japan.
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She
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left
the job a couple of years ago and turned into a full-fledged homemaker.
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She
has a distinctive style of
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cooking and
she can cook
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different
sorts of traditional foods. In fact, she has
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got
a training on cooking.

I am a young
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lady
and have completed my graduation from the University of Tokyo.
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Rini
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Mutsoku
is my
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mum
and I have a
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very
intimate bonding with her since after my birth. Though I am not the
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only
daughter to her, she
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loves
me
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much
being the youngest one.
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But
she tries to take care
properly
for each of the members. She arranges for everything to run the household. My dad is
also
happy with her efforts and
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often
tries to
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help
her in domestic chores. Being a fresh graduate, it is not possible for me to
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help
her in all such activities as I am busy with searching jobs and interviews across the city.
Besides
, my
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other
siblings are
also
busy with their respective activities.
Hence
, it is my
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mum
who is to take care of everything at the home.

The early
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life
of my parents was not
so
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good
. In fact, they had to struggle a lot to
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come
in the
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current
position.
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Life
was challenging for them,
especially
for my
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mum
. Her parents did not want her to
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get
married to my dad for
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some
reasons. At that time, dad was not too
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much
wealthy
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but
he had potentials. After lots of struggles and challenges, both of them
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got
married and
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started
their
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life
together. She continued caring for the home and teaching
simultaneously
. When my elder two brothers
were born
, she had to struggle more for taking care of her boys. She
also
had to suffer for me in my childhood.
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But
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now
all the sufferings
are gone
.

My
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mum
is
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beautiful
in
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many
aspects.
Firstly
, she has a
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beautiful
mind filled with kindness. She
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loves
to
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help
others. Her beauty lies in her mind.
Of course
, she has a
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fair
skin
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but
it does not reflect her inner beauty. I have had close contacts with her for numerous times and discovered her inner self. She is a lovely
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lady
of around 40 and
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loves
to
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socialise
. Almost everyone
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loves
her for her benevolent nature.
Besides
, she is
extremely
caring for us. When I was a kid, she
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used
to teach me
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different
course with outstanding examples. And
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now
I
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realise
that how adorable she is. She has managed everything, made the family relations stronger,
smartly
handled all the distressful moments and more
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other
issues.
So
, I
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think
she is a
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beautiful
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lady
in all terms.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a person you know who is beautiful or handsome. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
10 paragraphs
943 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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