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Describe a tourist site (not from your city) you have been to. v.1

Describe a tourist site (not from your city) you have been to. v. 1
Describe a tourist site (not from your city) you have been to. You should say: where it was when you went there who you went with and what you did and explain how you felt about this site. Sample Answer 1: Thank you a lot for this nice candidate task card topic. I would now talk about a tourists site which is not located in my city and where I have been to with my wife. Last year I went to Kuala Lumpur Bird Park in Malaysia with my wife and this was an excellent tourist site. As the name of the park suggests, Kuala Lumpur Bird Park is located in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia. It was probably the early November, last year when I had been there. I visited this park with my wife and her excitement was quite fabulous. She is very fond of birds and being in a park which was entirely dedicated to different bird species was a breathtaking experience for her. I have never been to such a place before and I thoroughly enjoyed the hours I spent there. The total park area must have been more than 20 acres and I guess there were more than 200 different bird species and more than 3000 birds in total. I heard from a tour guide that more than two hundred thousand visitors visit this park each year. This is probably a popular tourist spot in Kuala Lumpur city as the 'Google Search Engine' brought this place in search results every time I searched for popular tourist spots in Kuala Lumpur. I was very excited to be there. The time we spent in Malaysia was marvellous and the park made it even more enchanting. In our country, we have many zoological gardens and parks but not a single one which is totally dedicated to the birds. It was an exceptional and enthralling experience for me to watch so many birds in a single park. I was very much amazed by the beautiful flora and fauna that have made the park a worth visiting tourist spot. This was indeed a great place to observe the activities of birds in their natural habitat. We went to the park by a tourist bus and noticed that some of the tourists were going there for the second time and a few of them were researchers and research scientists. The peacocks of various species were so beautiful that most of the tourists took their pictures. This park was a great place to be and I took many photos on my camera and tried to save the memory.   Sample Answer 2: My last trip to Australia was outstanding. I had visited some of the most notable tourist spots in the country, and Sydney Harbour Bridge is one of them. In fact, I liked the Bridge the most. This is one of the most splendid structures I have ever seen. The bridge is located in Sydney Harbour. It is responsible for carrying different types of vehicles including rails, cars and even bicycles. Besides, the bridge also has a provision for the pedestrians. This is a magnificent bridge located near the Sydney Opera House and also named as Coathanger. The naming is done for its design that resembles an arch. Vehicular movement is done between the North Shore and the central business district of Sydney. The bridge provides a striking view of the Sydney Harbour. The entire structure is made of steel and one of the tallest one on the earth. The maximum height of the bridge is about 134 meters. I am a businessman in Japan. I have a business of electronic goods. I need to move in different countries to make deals with my suppliers and clients. As part of my business trip, I went to Australia in November last. It was really an outstanding trip. I made some new deals with the existing clients in Australia. Besides, there were some issues about product quality. I discussed the matters with the producers and they assured me to take steps on providing the best quality products. Further, they did not have any return policy for me. I also placed the issue which meeting with them. They assured me to think about the return policy. Often it happens that some of the products become defective in different terms. Some get damaged while packing and some others have manufacturing defects. So, it becomes hard for me to sell the products to the end-level users. Overall, it was a successful business trip for me. Since it was about business deals, I took my general manager with me to accompany. He is also a smart and intelligent individual and owns years of experience in dealing with such critical issues. Both of us made the meetings with the suppliers. Once the meeting was over, we made short trips inside the city. As part of such a trip, I went to see the Sydney Harbour Bridge. Adjacent to the Sydney Opera House, the Bridge comes with two railway lines and eight lanes for vehicular movement. In fact, the Bridge is now a famous tourist attraction in Australia for the outsiders. This is an impressive steel structure and was made in 1932. I felt a deep sense of joy after seeing this large steel-made bridge. Walking on the Bridge was a splendid experience for me. When I ascended the top of the Bridge, the views appeared completely different than it was from the ground level. It was in the evening when I ascended on the top and found that the entire harbour, and the city was shining with bright lights. The natural view was also stunning, especially the sunset scene. This was really a memorable experience for me.
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Describe
a
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tourist
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site
(not from your city) you have been to. You should say: where it was when you
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went
there who you
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went
with and what you did and
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explain
how you felt about this
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site
. Sample Answer 1:

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now
talk about a
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tourists
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site
which is not
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located
in my city and where I have been to with my wife.

Last
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year
I
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went
to Kuala Lumpur
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Bird
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Park
in Malaysia with my wife and this was an excellent
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tourist
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site
. As the name of the
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park
suggests, Kuala Lumpur
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Bird
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Park
is
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located
in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia. It was
probably
the early November, last
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year
when I had been there. I visited this
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park
with my wife and her excitement was quite fabulous. She is
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very
fond of
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birds
and being in a
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park
which was
entirely
dedicated to
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different
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bird
species was a breathtaking
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experience
for her. I have never been to such a
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place
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before
and I
thoroughly
enjoyed the hours I spent there.

The total
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park
area
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must
have been more than 20 acres and
I guess
there were more than 200
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different
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bird
species and more than 3000
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birds
in total. I heard from a tour guide that more than two hundred thousand visitors visit this
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park
each
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year
. This is
probably
a popular
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tourist
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spot
in Kuala Lumpur city as the 'Google Search Engine' brought this
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place
in search results every time I searched for popular
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tourist
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spots
in Kuala Lumpur.

I was
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very
excited to be there. The time we spent in Malaysia was
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marvellous
and the
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park
made it even more enchanting. In our country, we have
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many
zoological gardens and
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parks
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but
not a single one which is
totally
dedicated to the
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birds
. It was an exceptional and enthralling
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experience
for me to
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watch
so
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many
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birds
in a single park.

I was
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very
much amazed by the
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beautiful
flora and fauna that have made the
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park
a worth visiting
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tourist
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spot
. This was
indeed
a great
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place
to observe the activities of
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birds
in their natural habitat. We
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went
to the
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park
by a
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tourist
bus and noticed that
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some of the
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tourists
were going there for the second time and a few of them were researchers and research scientists. The peacocks of various species were
so
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beautiful
that most of the
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tourists
took their pictures. This
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park
was a great
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place
to be and I took
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many
photos on my camera and tried to save the memory.
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Sample Answer 2:

My last
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trip
to Australia was outstanding. I had visited
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some
of the most notable
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tourist
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spots
in the country, and Sydney
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Harbour
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Bridge
is one of them. In fact, I liked the
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Bridge
the most. This is one of the most splendid structures I have ever
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seen
.

The
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bridge
is
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located
in Sydney
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Harbour
. It is responsible for carrying
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different
types of vehicles including rails, cars and even bicycles.
Besides
, the
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bridge
also
has a provision for the pedestrians. This is a magnificent
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bridge
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located
near the Sydney Opera
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House
and
also
named as
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Coathanger
. The naming
is done
for its design that resembles an arch. Vehicular movement
is done
between the North Shore and the central
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business
district of Sydney. The
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bridge
provides a striking view of the Sydney
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Harbour
. The entire structure
is made
of steel and one of the tallest one on the earth.
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The
maximum height of the
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bridge
is about 134 meters.

I am a businessman in Japan. I have a
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business
of electronic
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goods
.
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I
need to
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move
in
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different
countries to
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make
deals with my suppliers and clients. As part of my
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business
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trip
, I
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went
to Australia in November last. It was
really
an outstanding
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trip
. I made
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some
new deals with the existing clients in Australia.
Besides
, there were
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some
issues about
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product
quality. I discussed the matters with the
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producers and
they assured me to take steps on providing the best quality
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products
.
Further
, they did not have any return policy for me. I
also
placed the issue which meeting with them. They assured me to
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think
about the return policy.
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Often
it happens that
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some of the
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products
become defective in
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different
terms.
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Some
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get
damaged while packing and
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some
others have manufacturing defects.
So
, it becomes
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hard
for me to sell the
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products
to the
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end
-level users.
Overall
, it was a successful
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business
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trip
for me.

Since it was about
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business
deals, I took my general manager with me to accompany. He is
also
a smart and intelligent individual and
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owns
years of
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experience
in dealing with such critical issues. Both of us made the meetings with the suppliers. Once the meeting was over, we made short
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trips
inside the city. As part of such a
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trip
, I
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went
to
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see
the Sydney
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Harbour
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Bridge
. Adjacent to the Sydney Opera
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House
, the
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Bridge
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comes
with two railway lines and eight lanes for vehicular movement. In fact, the
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Bridge
is
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now
a
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famous
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tourist
attraction in Australia for the outsiders. This is an impressive steel structure and
was made
in 1932.

I felt a deep sense of joy after seeing this large steel-made
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bridge
. Walking on the
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Bridge
was a splendid
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experience
for me. When I ascended the top of the
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Bridge
, the views appeared completely
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different
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than
it was from the ground level. It was in the evening when I ascended on the top and found that the entire
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harbour
, and the city was shining with bright lights. The natural view was
also
stunning,
especially
the sunset scene. This was
really
a memorable
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experience
for me.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
96Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a tourist site (not from your city) you have been to. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
11 paragraphs
957 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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