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Describe something you did in your life that was a success. v.1

Describe something you did in your life that was a success. v. 1
Describe something you did in your life that was a success. You should say: what you did when you did it what difficulties you faced and how you felt when you were successful. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you're going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Sample Answer: After my migration to the Saudi Arabia, it was really difficult for me to cope with the changes. Everything was expensive and I could not bear the extreme living costs. So, I planned to start a business in small scale and gradually I became a successful businessman here. I started a small food shop which sold only the traditional Asian foods and now the business has become a large one. The shop has become popular in the city of Dhahran. The city is also famous as the majority of the oil industry administration have settled in here. The smart cue card questions remind of the past days. And I will answer them in brief here. I migrated to Saudi Arabia in 2011 from Malaysia. In fact, my family inspired me to migrate to the land to establish my family business there but I turned into a failure to do so. Then, I decided to do something on my own. Accordingly, I made a plan and sought support from my family. They did not agree with me and asked me to seek options to establish the family business again. Finally, I denied their proposal and started my own business. Initially, I had experienced some difficulties. The most important issue was the lack of fund to run the business. I also needed expert hands to cook foods, particularly the Asian foods. Selecting a suitable location in the city was another remarkable matter. But, I have crossed all the barriers and established the business as a profitable one. I forgot all the past sufferings when I became successful. And the people who left me for my own business started returning to me. I enjoyed the matter but did not laugh at them. Besides, I have expanded the business in another city as well. I am happy now. More Ideas to talk about this Cue Card/ Candidate Task Card topic: Topic: Describe something you did in your life that was a success. 1. Before having a positive mindset, I could not get success in anything. So, I changed my point of view. I tried to look everything in a general perspective. I changed my mindset a few days ago after attending a counselling session. But I had to face numerous difficulties. In the beginning, I could not accept the changes. Everything is fine with me now and I am happy by changing my outlook. 2. I was physically less fit and got admitted to a health club here in Barcelona to regain my health. I got included on the health club list around six months ago. It was hard for me to maintain the hard and fast rules of health. I had to give up smoking, take nutritious foods and obviously had to exercise. Now I am feeling better and enjoying a good health indeed. 3. Intervening in family issues was not my cup of tea but I had to interfere with some matters. The issues appeared in the beginning of this year and I entered my nose to get the right solution. I had to experience enmity form my siblings and even my parents were against me in some aspects. But finally, I was able to hold everyone’s attention and everyone followed my suggestions. The problem was solved. I was too happy. 4. Getting on the right track for me was difficult in a populous city like Shanghai. But I was determined and established my own business here. I established the café following my native style about one year ago. In the beginning, I had many competitors. Beating them with the quality of foods and price was a challenge for me. But I am successful now and my perseverance brought me the success. I am really glad. 5. Climbing was hard for me unless I reached the top of a hill here in Greece. I climbed on the top in last month. It was a real adventure. I had serious troubles in the first phase. I broke my leg and also got injured by falling down several times. Luckily, I did not fall from a great height. But all the sufferings were gone when I reached the top of the large hill. It appeared that I won the world. 6. Saving money is difficult if you have uncountable sources to spend. So, I made a plan to save some money every month. I made the plan about one year ago. And now I am amazed at the result. But I had to experience some issues. Cutting down costs is highly difficult and I also compromised with numerous matters. But all of my compromises resulted in the success. I have a smart amount of money in my bank account and I am planning to invest in any suitable sector. Your preparation for the cue card topic - "Describe something you did in your life that was a success. " would help you to talk about the following topics as well: 1. Describe a success in your life. 2. Describe something you did and felt great about it. 3. Describe a time when you own a competition. 4. Describe a time when you were praised for something you did well.
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something
you did in your
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life
that was a
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success
. You should say: what you did when you did it what difficulties you faced and how you felt when you were
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successful
. [You will
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talk about the
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for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you're going to say. You can
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notes to
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Sample Answer:

After my migration to the Saudi Arabia, it was
really
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difficult
for me to cope with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
. Everything was expensive and I could not bear the extreme living costs.
So
, I planned to
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start
a
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business
in
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small
scale and
gradually
I became a
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successful
businessman here. I
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started
a
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small
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food
shop which sold
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only
the traditional Asian
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foods
and
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now
the
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business
has become a large one. The shop has become popular in the city of
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Dhahran
. The city is
also
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famous
as the majority of the oil industry administration have settled in here.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
smart cue card questions remind of the past days. And I will answer them
in brief
here.

I migrated to Saudi Arabia in 2011 from Malaysia. In fact, my
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family
inspired me to migrate to the land to establish my
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family
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business
there
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but
I turned into a failure to do
so
. Then, I decided to do
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something
on my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
.
Accordingly
, I made a plan and sought support from my
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family
. They did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with me and asked me to seek options to establish the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
again.
Finally
, I denied their proposal and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
business.

Initially
, I had experienced
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some
difficulties. The most
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important
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issue
was the lack of fund to run the
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business
. I
also
needed expert hands to cook
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foods
,
particularly
the Asian
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foods
. Selecting a suitable location in the city was another remarkable
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matter
.
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But
, I have crossed all the barriers and established the
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business
as a profitable one.

I forgot all the past sufferings when I became
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successful
. And the
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people
who
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left
me for my
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own
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business
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started
returning to me. I enjoyed the
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matter
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but
did not laugh at them.
Besides
, I have expanded the
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business
in another city as
well
. I am happy
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now
. More
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Ideas
to talk about this Cue Card/ Candidate Task Card
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topic
:
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Topic
:
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Describe
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something
you did in your
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life
that was a
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success
. 1.
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Before
having a
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positive
mindset, I could not
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get
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success
in anything.
So
, I
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changed
my point of view. I tried to look everything
The usual preposition for "perspective" is "from" not "in." "from a general perspective".
in a general perspective
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
my mindset a few days ago after attending a counselling session.
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But
I had to face numerous difficulties. In the beginning, I could not accept the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
. Everything is fine with me
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
now and
I am happy by changing my outlook.

2. I was
physically
less fit and
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got
admitted to a
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health
club here in Barcelona to regain my
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health
. I
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got
included on the
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health
club list around six months ago. It was
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hard
for me to maintain the
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hard
and
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fast
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rules
of
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health
. I had to give up smoking, take nutritious
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foods
and
obviously
had to exercise.
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Now
I am feeling better and enjoying a
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good
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health
indeed
.

3. Intervening in
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family
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issues
was not my cup of tea
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but
I had to interfere with
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some
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matters
. The
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issues
appeared in the beginning of this year and I entered my nose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the
right
solution. I had to experience enmity form my siblings and even my parents were against me in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
aspects.
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But
finally
, I was able to hold everyone’s attention and everyone followed my suggestions. The problem
was solved
. I was too happy.

4. Getting on the
right
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track
for me was
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difficult
in a populous city like Shanghai.
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But
I
was determined
and established my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
here. I established the café following my native style about one year ago. In the beginning, I had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
competitors. Beating them with the quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
and price was a challenge for me.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
I am
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successful
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now
and my perseverance brought me the
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success
. I am
really
glad.

5. Climbing was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for me unless I reached the top of a hill here in Greece. I climbed on the top in last month. It was a real adventure. I had serious troubles in the
first
phase. I broke my leg and
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
injured by falling down several times. Luckily, I did not fall from a great height.
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But
all the sufferings
were gone
when I reached the top of the large hill. It appeared that I won the world.

6. Saving money is
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difficult
if you have uncountable sources to spend.
So
, I made a plan to save
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
money every month. I made the plan about one year ago. And
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now
I
am amazed
at the result.
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But
I had to experience
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some
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issues
. Cutting down costs is
highly
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difficult
and I
also
compromised with numerous
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matters
.
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But
all of my compromises resulted in the
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success
. I have a smart amount of money in my bank
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account and
I am planning to invest in any suitable sector. Your preparation for the cue card
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topic
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-
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"
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Describe
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something
you did in your
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life
that was a
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success
.
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"
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would
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help
you to talk about the following
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topics
as
well
:

1.
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Describe
a
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success
in your
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life. 2
.
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Describe
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something
you did and felt great about it.

3.
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Describe
a time when you
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own
a competition.

4.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a time when you
were praised
for
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something
you did
well
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
76Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe something you did in your life that was a success. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
14 paragraphs
937 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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