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Describe a person you know who collects something. v.1

Describe a person you know who collects something. v. 1
Describe a person you know who collects something. You should say: what he/she collects how he/she stores/saves the collection how long he/she has been collecting and explain why he/she enjoys collecting that thing. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: Different people like to collect different things for different reasons. While some people like to collect things to preserve memories, some others like to collect them just for the fun of it. However, my friend, Ronin Gomez, likes to collect things in order to “appreciate their beauty”, even if it sounds a bit unusual. If my memory serves me well, Ronin has been collecting “watches” from his childhood for about last 15 years or so, and during this period, I have seldom seen him talking about any subject without any “footnotes” on his watch collection! But, I must say that my friend is really passionate about collecting different kinds of really beautiful and stylish watches from different eras and different countries even if it means travelling from one corner of the country to another with time permitting, of course. Besides, I should also mention that Ronin’s parents have been really supportive, financially or otherwise, of his “passion” for collecting watches without which, I don’t think that Ronin would be able to carry on with his “hobby”. It’s not that Ronin just likes to collect those watches randomly and leave them here and there, but he likes to organize and store them inside a beautiful, glass-made “showcase” in the safest part of his home, away from “light” and public access, with serial numbers and other necessary information placed next to them, so that if they are ever stolen or lost, he can easily file a police report on them. And, then, of course, Ronin also makes sure that his beautiful collections are “polished” with distinguished and expensive “liquid cleaning materials” on a regular basis in order to preserve their shiny and unique looks. Anyway, my friend enjoys collecting watches because it introduces him to the “artworks” and “technological pursuits” of different countries and eras in a way which wouldn’t be possible to know otherwise. Besides, the hobby allows my friend a “bragging right” to his friends about his efforts and “accomplishments”. Finally, he enjoys collecting watches because it keeps him busy when there is nothing really important to do.
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Describe
a person
you know
who
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collects
something. You should say: what
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he/she
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collects
how
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he/she
stores/saves the collection how long
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he/she
has been
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collecting
and
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explain
why
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he/she
enjoys
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collecting
that thing. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer:
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Different
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people
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like
to
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collect
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different
things for
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different
reasons. While
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some
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people
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like
to
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collect
things to preserve memories,
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some
others
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like
to
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collect
them
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just
for the fun of it.
However
, my
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friend
,
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Ronin
Gomez,
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likes
to
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collect
things in order to “appreciate their beauty”, even if it sounds a bit unusual.

If my memory serves me
well
,
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Ronin
has been
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collecting
“
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watches
” from his childhood for about last 15 years or
so
, and during this period, I have seldom
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seen
him talking about any subject without any “footnotes” on his
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watch
collection!
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But
, I
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must
say that my
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friend
is
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really
passionate about
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collecting
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different
kinds of
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really
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beautiful
and stylish
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watches
from
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different
eras and
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different
countries even if it means travelling from one corner of the country to another with time permitting,
of course
.
Besides
, I should
also
mention that
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Ronin
’s parents have been
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really
supportive,
financially
or
otherwise
, of his “passion” for
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collecting
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watches
without which, I don’t
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think
that
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Ronin
would be able to carry on with his “hobby”.

It’s not that
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Ronin
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just
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likes
to
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collect
those
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watches
randomly
and
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leave
them here and there,
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but
he
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likes
to organize and store them inside a
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beautiful
, glass-made “showcase” in the safest part of his home, away from “light” and public access, with serial numbers and other necessary information placed
next
to them,
so
that if they are ever stolen or lost, he can
easily
file a police report on them. And, then,
of course
,
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Ronin
also
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makes
sure that his
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beautiful
collections are “polished” with distinguished and expensive “liquid cleaning materials” on a regular basis in order to preserve their shiny and unique looks.

Anyway
, my
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friend
enjoys
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collecting
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watches
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because
it introduces him to the “artworks” and “technological pursuits” of
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different
countries and eras in a way which wouldn’t be possible to know
otherwise
.
Besides
, the hobby
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allows
my
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friend
a “bragging
right
” to his
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friends
about his efforts and “accomplishments”.
Finally
, he enjoys
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collecting
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watches
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because
it
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keeps
him busy when there is nothing
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really
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important
to do.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a person you know who collects something. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
421 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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