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Describe an ambitious person you know. v.1

Describe an ambitious person you know. v. 1
Describe an ambitious person you know. You should say: who the person is how you know this person what his/her ambition is and explain how important his/her ambition is. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: People have ambitions, big or small, in their lives, and they all try to materialize them as best as possible in order to gain personally mostly. But, having ambitions for a noble purpose in order to make a difference in society is not something we always get to see unless we meet a young entrepreneur like “Rabbi Chaudhury”. I have known Rabbi, a great friend of mine, from my early high school days as a hard-working and brilliant person who has always preferred to think “out of the box” when trying to provide solutions to any problem, be it personal or professional. Being the child of a rich man in his small town, Rabbi has always had pretty much all the means at his disposal to enjoy a great life in a big city among many riches and luxuries after finishing his tertiary education and getting a steady job, and that’s exactly what his parents expected also. But, Rabbi didn’t exactly want to go that route, as he always hid an ambition in his mind to set up a small “garments” factory there. So, anyway, once my school friend finished his university education, he started to convince his parents to go along with his “ambitious plan”, but unfortunately, his parents kept protesting that idea vehemently as they didn’t want the talents of their child to a “complete waste”. However, Rabbi’s parents eventually gave in to the constant request of their beloved child. Rabbi’s plan to set a garments factory in his little town was an important step to deal with the demographic changes effectively by encouraging young people to remain there, as the town was losing on its young population so that they don’t have to move out of the area to find steady jobs. Besides, it would create a great opportunity for the community members to interact with each other on a more personal level in a town which has remained rather divided for long along an “invisible” cultural and religious line. Finally, the plan would provide a general boost to the economy of the town.
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an ambitious
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person
you know
. You should say: who the
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person
is how
you know
this
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person
what his/her
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ambition
is and
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explain
how
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important
his/her
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ambition
is. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:
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People
have
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ambitions
,
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big
or
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small
, in their
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lives
, and they all try to materialize them as
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best
as possible in order to gain
personally
mostly
.
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But
, having
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ambitions
for a noble purpose in order to
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make
a difference in society is not something we always
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get
to
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see
unless we
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meet
a young entrepreneur like
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“Rabbi
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Chaudhury
”.

I have known
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Rabbi
, a great friend of mine, from my early high school days as a
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hard
-working and brilliant
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person
who has always preferred to
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think
“out of the box” when trying to provide solutions to any problem, be it personal or professional. Being the child of a rich
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man
in his
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small
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town
,
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Rabbi
has always had pretty much all the means at his disposal to enjoy a great life in a
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big
city among
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many
riches and luxuries after finishing his tertiary education and getting a steady job, and that’s exactly what his
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parents
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expected
also
.
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But
,
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Rabbi
didn’t exactly want to go that route, as he always hid an
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ambition
in his mind to set up a
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small
“garments” factory there.
So
,
anyway
, once my school friend finished his university education, he
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started
to convince his
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parents
to go along with his “ambitious plan”,
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but
unfortunately, his
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parents
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kept
protesting that
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idea
vehemently
as they didn’t want the talents of their child to a “complete waste”.
However
,
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Rabbi’s
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parents
eventually
gave in to the constant request of their beloved child.

Rabbi’s plan to set a
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garments
factory in his
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little
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town
was an
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important
step to deal with the demographic
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changes
effectively
by encouraging young
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people
to remain there, as the
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town
was losing on its young population
so
that they don’t
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have to
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move
out of the area to find steady jobs.
Besides
, it would create a great opportunity for the community members to interact with each other on a more personal level in a
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town
which has remained
rather
divided for long along an “invisible” cultural and religious line.
Finally
, the plan would provide a general boost to the economy of the
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town
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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Frank Smith

IELTS speaking Describe an ambitious person you know. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
416 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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