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Describe a true story that is very popular among people in your country. v.1

Describe a true story that is very popular among people in your country. v. 1
Describe a true story that is very popular among people in your country. You should say: what the story is about why it is popular when you first heard the story and explain how you feel about this story and its popularity.   Model Answer 1: Many true stories are popular among the people in my country, but not all of them arouse the same kind of passion or interests among them as the story of the prince of “Bhawal” who was presumed to be dead a decade earlier, only to be found alive again a decade later. The story goes like this: His name was Ramendra Narayan Roy was one of the Kumars (or a "prince") of the Bhawal Estate, a large zamindari (an aristocratic landowner) in Bengal in modern-day Bangladesh.   He was one of three brothers who had inherited the estate from their father. He was popularly known to people as "mejokumar" (the second prince of the three princes). Long story short, Ramendra Narayan Roy was reported to have died on 7 May at the age of 25. The reported cause of death was biliary colic (gallstones). His body was supposedly cremated in Darjeeling (West Bengal, India) the next day in a customary funerary rite. And, that should have been the end of the story. But, it wasn’t, and that’s exactly why it became so popular in the subsequent years. In fact, the “dead prince”, was found to be alive in April of the year of 1921.   Later on, it also became apparent that the prince was actually poisoned by his own family members. But, he was eventually found and saved by a “saint” who nursed him back to life. He recovered, but suffered a memory loss and wandered India for the next 10 years before returning home to Dhaka in 1920, where he recovered his memory back again. By the way, I heard this story for the first time from my grandfather about 25 years ago. Anyway, I think that the popularity of this story lies in the fact that people always have some kind of soft corner for tragedies, involving innocent people like Prince Ramendra Narayan Roy, who became the victim of power politics and conspiracy. But, somehow, the truth always comes out sooner or later just as it did in the case of this poor prince.   Sample Answer 2: There are many true stories that people in my country know and talk about often. One such story is the success story of Mr Arther who is a living legend and is one of the top ten richest businessmen in the country. This story is about his determination, struggle, fight against adversity and finally the unmatched success he achieved. The story starts with a 15 years old teenager who came to the capital city virtually with no capital and no one to turn to and started working as a very ignorable hawker. But the dream he had, the determination he had, and the patience he showed was limitless. He had to face severe adversities and yet he never lost his faith and determination. With hard work and determination, he continued his journey. He proved the fact that the fortune favours the brave. He had never in his early life stopped from fulfilling his dream and continued his journey. Over time he has been rewarded with some success and he became a moderate business owner. He did not stop there. He continued to work even harder and envisioned a better dream. Thus he started piling up the success and from a moderate businessman, he became one of the enviable businessmen in the country. Now his one of the top ten richest and successful persons in the country and all his fortunes were hard-earned. This story is a popular story in our country and people often refer to this story to give an example of a successful man who has fought hard to achieve it. We often mention this story to inspire people and to advise them on how to be determined and hardworking to achieve their dreams. I first heard this story in my childhood from one of my school teachers and in my college level, I read an article in a magazine regarding the hard work, struggle and success Mr Arther got. I think this is a very inspiring story that advises us to have our dreams and to work hard to achieve those dreams. If your determination is hard, plannings are proper and if you work accordingly to achieve it, no matter how many obstacles come, you would overcome it and this is the lesson this true story teaches me.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a story you remember. Describe a true story that impressed you. Describe a popular story you heard in your childhood.
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. You should say: what the
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and its popularity.
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Model Answer 1:

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stories
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of the prince of “
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to
be found
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Ramendra
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Narayan
Roy was one of the
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Kumars
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prince
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) of the
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Bhawal
Estate, a large
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zamindari
(an aristocratic landowner) in Bengal in modern-day Bangladesh.
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who
had inherited the estate from their father. He was
popularly
known to
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people
as
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mejokumar
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(the second prince of the three princes). Long
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short,
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Ramendra
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Narayan
Roy
was reported
to have
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died
on 7 May at the age of 25. The reported cause of death was biliary colic (gallstones). His body was
supposedly
cremated in Darjeeling (West Bengal, India) the
next
day in a customary funerary rite. And, that should have been the
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end
of the story.

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, it wasn’t, and that’s exactly why it
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became
so
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popular
in the subsequent years. In fact, the “dead prince”,
was found
to be alive in April of the
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year
of 1921.
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Later on, it
also
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became
apparent that the prince was
actually
poisoned by his
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own
family members.
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, he was
eventually
found and saved by a “saint”
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nursed him back to life. He recovered,
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suffered a memory loss and wandered India for the
next
10 years
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before
returning home to Dhaka in 1920, where he recovered his memory back again. By the way, I heard this
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story
for the
first
time from my grandfather about 25 years ago.

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, I
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think
that the popularity of this
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story
lies in the fact that
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people
always have
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some
kind of soft corner for tragedies, involving innocent
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people
like Prince
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Ramendra
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Narayan
Roy,
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who
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became
the victim of power politics and conspiracy.
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, somehow, the truth always
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comes
out sooner or later
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just
as it did in the case of this poor prince.
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Sample Answer 2:

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know and talk about
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. One such
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story
is the
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success
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story
of Mr
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Arther
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who
is a living legend and is one of the top ten richest businessmen in the
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country
. This
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story
is about his
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determination
, struggle, fight against adversity and
finally
the unmatched
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success
he achieved. The
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starts
with a 15 years
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old
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teenager
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who
came to the capital city
virtually
with no capital and no one to turn to and
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started
working as a
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very
ignorable hawker.
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the
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dream
he had, the
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he had, and the patience he
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showed
was limitless. He had to face severe
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adversities and
yet
he never lost his faith and
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. With
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and
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, he continued his journey. He proved the fact that the fortune
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favours
the brave. He had never in his early life
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dream
and continued his journey. Over
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time he
has
been rewarded
with
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success and
he
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became
a moderate business owner. He did not
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stop
there. He continued to
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work
even harder and envisioned a better
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dream
.
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he
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started
piling up the
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success
and from a moderate businessman, he
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became
one of the enviable businessmen in the
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.
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Now
his one of the top ten richest and successful persons in the
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and all his fortunes were
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hard
-earned. This
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story
is a
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popular
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story
in our
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and
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people
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refer to this
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to give an example of a successful
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man
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who
has fought
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to
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achieve
it. We
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mention this
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story
to inspire
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people
and to advise them on how to
be determined
and hardworking to
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achieve
their
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dreams
. I
first
heard this
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in my childhood from one of my school teachers and in my college level, I read an article in a magazine regarding the
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work
, struggle and
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Mr
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this is a
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very
inspiring
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story
that advises us to have our
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dreams
and to
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work
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, plannings are proper and if you
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come
, you would overcome it and this is the lesson this
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true
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story
teaches me.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
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story
you remember.
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a
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true
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story
that impressed you.
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a
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popular
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story
you heard in your childhood.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
98Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a true story that is very popular among people in your country. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
827 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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