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Describe an outdoor activity that you did for the first time. v.1

Describe an outdoor activity that you did for the first time. v. 1
Describe an outdoor activity that you did for the first time. You should say: what you did where and when you did it how you felt about it later and say if you would recommend this outdoor activity to your friends.   Model Answer 1: In my childhood, I had tried a number of outdoor activities. Of course, it is not like that I had enjoyed all of those outdoor activities, whether I was doing them for the first time or continuously. However, today, I would like to talk about an outdoor activity which I had started to like from the very first time. The name of this activity is “fishing”. But, to be honest, about 20 years ago, I didn’t really like the idea of sitting on the bank of a lake or river in an anticipation of some fish to be kind to take my bait. In fact, I used to think of this outdoor activity as some kind of “hide-and-seek-game” except it was much harder than that because I could see my “prey” only after catching it. However, all that changed when I was finally convinced by one of my cousins to accompany him in order to do some fishing practice with him. In fact, he even assured me that the fishes would eat my baits. So I agreed and went to a nearby lake to catch some fish. By the way, before throwing my fishing wire into the water, my cousin did some tricks with attaching the. . . . on my fishing rod. Anyway, I started to wait, but I was growing little impatient with the waiting as I could see no sign of fish near my fishing rod. Suddenly, I saw that my float was moving and informed it to my cousin. My cousin immediately asked me to pull the rod out of the water and I had caught my first fish! And when we finally left the lake, I had caught 3 fishes! Needless to say, I felt so happy later about that outdoor activity. Anyway, I would recommend this outdoor activity to my friends because the excitement of catching a fish is simply outstanding! Besides, this outdoor activity would also help learn how to become patient because it takes a lot of patience to catch a fish. After all, the fruit of patience is always sweet.   Sample Answer 2: I usually go out for walking in the evening every day and play some outdoor games sometimes, but the outdoor activity that I did for the first time was something different. It was in the middle of last year when I noticed that some of the people have gathered in a field and they had bicycles with them. They were dressed like professional cyclists and were discussing something. That day I was with one of my friends and we went out with our bicycles as part of our evening exercise. My friend and I went closer to the group and heard that they are some members of a bicycling group who do the gathering and cycling as part of their outdoor activity and exercise. After a few minutes, we found that they were planning to round the city in 3 hours with their bicycle and they would start that in the next 30 minutes. The team leader asked us to join them just when we were planning to leave. They made us members of the group and it was free. We started cycling with them starting from this place and went through the major parts of the whole city. Cycling for the whole 3-4 hours was not an easy task and yet we enjoyed it and we were close to the group whole time. After a few hours, we came back to the place where we started and I found that I was totally absorbed and exhausted. The team leader congratulated us because it was our first day and we did well. I looked at my friend and he was looked exhausted and tired. The team gave us a membership card and told that they do it twice in a month. Though we had plans for joining them again, we could not do so. I found the whole idea of cycling very interesting and a good chance to meet new people. I felt well that we actually did it and the feeling of travelling the whole city riding a bicycle was thrilling. I would definitely recommend this activity to anyone capable as it would be a good exercise as well as a chance to know different people who have some common interests.   Tips for answering this Cue Card Topic: This cue card does not ask for any outdoor activity you often do but an outdoor activity that you did for the first time. So, describe something you rarely do and talk about the experience you have when you did it for the first time. Following are some of the idea that you can follow to answer this cue card: 1. Swim in the river for the first time. 2. Attending a political/ social rally. 3. Delivering a speech to the public for the first time. 4. Doing a picnic near a forest. 5. Playing an outdoor game that you usually do not play. 6. Participating in a rally. 7. Participating in a social welfare program. 8. Collecting donation for the flood/ cyclone victim. 9. Participating in a cycle/ motor race. 10. Playing ice hockey. 11. Mountain hiking. 12. Camping. Keep in mind that, you must mention that you did this outside activity for the first time. You should also state that you did it recently. The first three questions should be covered while you describe the activity and mention what you did. Also, mention that you felt very excited and happy after doing it. If this activity is related to sports, mention that you never knew this sport was that much exciting and amusing.   If it is related to a picnic or social gathering, mention that that was a brand new experience and you would love to do it again. Finally, if this was related to public welfare (like collecting donation for flood victims or participating in a rally) you should mention that you felt very much happy and overwhelmed after doing it. For the final question “and say if you would recommend this activity to your friends” mention that you were very glad to have done this and you have already recommended some of your friends so that they enjoy that activity as well. Mention your happiness and excitement of this activity and then you should say that you would love to mention that to your friends so that they can have the same feeling and exhilaration.
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Describe
an
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outdoor
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activity
that you did for the
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first
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time
. You should say: what you did where and when you did it how you
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felt
about it later and say if you would
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recommend
this
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outdoor
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activity
to your
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friends
.
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Model Answer 1: In my childhood, I had tried a number of
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outdoor
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activities
.
Of course
, it is not like that I had enjoyed all of those
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outdoor
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activities
, whether I was
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doing
them for the
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first
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time
or
continuously
.
However
,
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today
, I would like to talk about an
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outdoor
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activity
which I had
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started
to like from the
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very
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first
time.

The name of this
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activity
is
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“fishing”
.
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But
, to be honest, about 20 years ago, I didn’t
really
like the
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idea
of sitting on the bank of a lake or river in an anticipation of
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some
fish to be kind to take my bait. In fact, I
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used
to
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think
of this
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outdoor
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activity
as
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some
kind of “
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hide
-and-seek-game” except it was much harder than that
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because
I could
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see
my “prey”
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only
after catching it.

However
, all that
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changed
when I was
finally
convinced by one of my
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cousins
to accompany him in order to do
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some
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fishing
practice with him. In fact, he even assured me that the fishes would eat my baits.
So
I
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agreed
and
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went
to a nearby lake to catch
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some
fish. By the way,
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before
throwing my
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fishing
wire into the water, my
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cousin
did
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some
tricks with attaching
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the.
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.
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.
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.
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on
my
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fishing
rod.

Anyway
, I
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started
to wait,
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but
I was growing
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little
impatient with the waiting as I could
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see
no
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sign
of fish near my
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fishing
rod.
Suddenly
, I
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saw
that my float was moving and informed it to my
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cousin
. My
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cousin
immediately asked me to pull the rod out of the water and I had caught my
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first
fish! And when we
finally
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left
the lake, I had caught 3 fishes!
Needless to say
, I
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felt
so
happy later about that
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outdoor
activity.

Anyway
, I would
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recommend
this
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outdoor
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activity
to my
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friends
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because
the excitement of catching a fish is
simply
outstanding!
Besides
, this
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outdoor
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activity
would
also
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help
learn how to become patient
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because
it takes
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a lot of
patience to catch a fish.
After all
, the fruit of patience is always sweet.
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Sample Answer 2:

I
usually
go out for walking in the evening every day and play
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some
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outdoor
games
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sometimes
,
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but
the
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outdoor
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activity
that I did for the
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first
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time
was something
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different
. It was in the middle of last year when I noticed that
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some of the
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people
have gathered in a
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field and
they had
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bicycles
with them. They
were dressed
like professional cyclists and were discussing something. That day I was with one of my
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friends and
we
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went
out with our
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bicycles
as part of our evening exercise. My
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friend
and I
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went
closer to the
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group
and heard that they are
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some
members of a bicycling
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group
who do the gathering and
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cycling
as part of their
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outdoor
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activity
and exercise.

After a few minutes, we found that they were planning to round the city in 3 hours with their
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bicycle and
they would
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start
that in the
next
30 minutes. The team leader asked us to
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join
them
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just
when we were planning to
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leave
. They made us members of the
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group
and it was free. We
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started
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cycling
with them starting from this place and
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went
through the major parts of the
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whole
city.
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Cycling
for the
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whole
3-4 hours was not an easy
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task and
yet
we enjoyed
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it and
we were close to the
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group
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whole
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time
. After a few hours, we came back to the place where we
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started
and I found that I was
totally
absorbed and exhausted.

The team leader congratulated us
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because
it was our
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first
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day and
we did
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well
. I looked at my
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friend and
he
was looked
exhausted and tired. The team gave us a membership
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card
and
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told
that they do it twice in a month. Though we had plans for joining them again, we could not do
so
. I found the
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whole
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idea
of
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cycling
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very
interesting and a
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good
chance to
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meet
new
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people
. I
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felt
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well
that we
actually
did it and the feeling of travelling the
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whole
city riding a
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bicycle
was thrilling.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would definitely
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recommend
this
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activity
to anyone capable as it would be a
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good
exercise as
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well
as a chance to know
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different
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people
who have
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some
common interests.
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Tips for answering this Cue
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Card
Topic: This cue
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card
does not
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ask for
any
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outdoor
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activity
you
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often
do
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but
an
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outdoor
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activity
that you did for the
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first
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time
.
So
,
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describe
something you rarely do and talk about the experience you have when you did it for the
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first
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time
. Following are
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some of the
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idea
that you can follow to answer this cue
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card: 1
. Swim in the river for the
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first
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time. 2
. Attending a political/ social rally.

3. Delivering a speech to the public for the
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first
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time. 4
.
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Doing
a picnic near a forest.

5. Playing an
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outdoor
game that you
usually
do not play.

6.
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Participating
in a rally.

7.
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Participating
in a social welfare program.

8. Collecting donation for the flood/ cyclone victim.

9.
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Participating
in a cycle/ motor race.

10. Playing ice hockey.

11. Mountain hiking.

12. Camping.

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Keep
in mind that, you
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must
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mention
that you did this outside
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activity
for the
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first
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time
. You should
also
state that you did it recently. The
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first
three questions should
be covered
while you
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describe
the
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activity
and
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mention
what you did.
Also
,
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mention
that you
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felt
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very
excited and happy after
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doing
it. If this
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activity
is related
to sports,
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mention
that you never knew this sport was that much exciting and amusing.
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If it
is related
to a picnic or social gathering,
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mention
that that was a
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brand new
experience and you would
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love
to do it again.
Finally
, if this
was related
to public welfare (like collecting donation for flood victims or
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participating
in a rally) you should
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mention
that you
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felt
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very
much happy and overwhelmed after
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doing
it.

For the final question “and say if you would
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recommend
this
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activity
to your
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friends”
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mention
that you were
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very
glad to have done this and you have already recommended
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some
of your
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friends
so
that they enjoy that
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activity
as
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well
.
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Mention
your happiness and excitement of this
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activity
and then you should say that you would
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love
to
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mention
that to your
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friends
so
that they can have the same feeling and exhilaration.
29Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
132Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an outdoor activity that you did for the first time. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
23 paragraphs
1128 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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