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Describe an indoor game that you enjoyed as a child. v.2

Describe an indoor game that you enjoyed as a child. v. 2
Describe an indoor game that you enjoyed as a child. You should say: what the game was where you played it who played this game with you and explain why you enjoyed playing this game. Model Answer 1: I haven’t thought about this in years. Erm, I did play games inside quite a lot as a child, everything from board games like snakes and ladders to hide and seek, but that was when I was a bit older. However, I think probably one of my favourite games – or things to play with at least – was when I was really little. Maybe about four? Let me tell you all about it. The game involved playing with a set of simple, pale wooden bricks. I’d had these for as long as I could remember, there were maybe fifty or so differently sized rectangular (cuboid) and square (cube) blocks of wood, and they were stored in a dark green canvas duffle bag which had a white rope handle. I don’t know what the wood type was, but it was pale and they were quite light, so I could manage them even with my tiny hands. The bricks provided me with hours of creativity and fun, even though they don’t sound at all promising. From an early age, I’d toddle over to the bag, find a spot on the floor at home, and just upturn all the bricks in a messy pile on the floor. The ‘game’ was simply to build things. Sometimes I might make a tower as high as I could before it toppled over. Other times I’d create creatures or whole worlds with different bricks perhaps representing a different building or animal. I just used my imagination, the bricks could be absolutely anything I wanted. Playing with bricks sounds like it might be a solitary activity. It’s true, sometimes I did just play on my own, absorbed in my own thoughts. However, sometimes I’d play with my sister too, and together we would create our own universe which we might control, or at least interact with. If friends came around we could work together to construct more complex creations. A tower might be built even higher with two minds at work trying to fathom out how to make it stable. Or we would develop each other’s ideas in the way that only small children with boundless imaginations can do. We had no limits to our creativity, and we were so small at that age that everything we saw was new and unexpected, so it was just as easy to imagine a goat as a dinosaur – both were equally unfamiliar in my world, so why not have dragons and unicorns too? It is amazing what a little rectangle of wood can represent if you have an open mind, and believe everything is possible! Why did I enjoy it? Thinking back I just remember feeling content and absorbed with this game. I suppose when you are so small, maybe four years old or thereabouts, there isn’t much you get to control in life. However, with this game, I could do whatever I wanted and in my imagination travel wherever I pleased. It was something I could do with other playmates too – though I wonder how co-operative we really were at that age. I also can still remember the sense of satisfaction of building an enormous tower of bricks that was even taller than me… and then the seemingly endless joy of knocking it all down again and watching the many bricks scatter across in all directions! I don’t think I’ve ever felt quite so powerful since! I don’t remember exactly what age I was when I outgrew playing with such simple bricks, but I do feel a bit nostalgic when I look back at that time. Nowadays children’s construction kits are much more sophisticated, with models coming with instructions on how they should be built. I wonder if we have lost a little there, a construction kit with a picture showing how the finished model is ‘supposed’ to look, might help you build a replica of an existing building perhaps, but your imagination might use the same materials to create a whole new world!   I know which I would prefer to do… [ Written by - Lucy Marris: Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]
Describe
an indoor game that you enjoyed as a child. You should say: what the game was where you played it who played this game with you and
explain
why you enjoyed
playing
this game. Model Answer 1:

I haven’t
thought
about this in years.
Erm
, I did
play
games
inside quite a lot as a child, everything from board
games
like snakes and ladders to
hide and seek
,
but
that was when I was a bit older.
However
, I
think
probably
one of my
favourite
games
or things to
play
with at least
was when I was
really
little
. Maybe about four?
Let
me
tell
you all about it. The game involved
playing
with a set of simple, pale wooden
bricks
. I’d had these for as long as I could
remember
, there were maybe fifty or
so
differently
sized rectangular (cuboid) and square (cube) blocks of wood, and they
were stored
in a dark green canvas duffle bag which had a white rope handle. I don’t know what the wood type was,
but
it was
pale and
they were quite light,
so
I could manage them even with my tiny hands. The
bricks
provided me with hours of creativity and fun,
even though
they don’t sound at all promising. From an early
age
, I’d toddle over to the bag, find a spot on the floor at home, and
just
upturn all the
bricks
in a messy pile on the floor. The ‘game’ was
simply
to build things.
Sometimes
I
might
make
a tower as high as I could
before
it toppled over. Other times I’d create creatures or whole worlds with
different
bricks
perhaps representing a
different
building or animal. I
just
used
my
imagination
, the
bricks
could be
absolutely
anything I wanted.
Playing
with
bricks
sounds like it
might
be a solitary activity. It’s true,
sometimes
I did
just
play
on my
own
, absorbed in my
own
thoughts.
However
,
sometimes
I’d
play
with my sister too, and together we would create our
own
universe which we
might
control, or at least interact with.
If
friends came around we could work together to construct more complex creations. A tower
might
be built
even higher with two minds at work trying to fathom out how to
make
it stable. Or we would develop each other’s
ideas
in the way that
only
small
children with boundless
imaginations
can do. We had no limits to our creativity, and we were
so
small
at that
age
that everything we
saw
was new and unexpected,
so
it was
just
as easy to imagine a goat as a dinosaur
both were
equally
unfamiliar in my world,
so
why not have dragons and unicorns too? It is amazing what a
little
rectangle of wood can represent if you have an open mind, and believe everything is possible! Why did I enjoy it? Thinking back I
just
remember
feeling content and absorbed with this game. I suppose when you are
so
small
, maybe four years
old
or thereabouts, there isn’t much you
get
to control in life.
However
, with this game, I could do whatever I wanted and in my
imagination
travel wherever I
pleased
. It was something I could do with other playmates too
though I wonder how co-operative we
really
were at that
age
. I
also
can
still
remember
the sense of satisfaction of building an enormous tower of
bricks
that was even taller than me… and then the
seemingly
endless joy of knocking it all down again and watching the
many
bricks
scatter across in all directions! I don’t
think
I’ve ever felt quite
so
powerful since!
I
don’t
remember
exactly what
age
I was when I outgrew
playing
with such simple
bricks
,
but
I do feel a bit nostalgic when I look back at that time. Nowadays children’s construction kits are much more sophisticated, with models coming with instructions on how they should
be built
. I wonder if we have lost a
little
there, a construction kit with a picture showing how the finished model is ‘supposed’ to look,
might
help
you build a replica of an existing building perhaps,
but
your
imagination
might
use
the same materials to create a whole new world!
 
I know which I would prefer to do…
[
Written by
-
Lucy
Marris
: Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
]
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an indoor game that you enjoyed as a child. v. 2

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