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Describe a paid job you did or someone you know did. v.1

Describe a paid job you did or someone you know did. v. 1
Describe a paid job you did or someone you know did. You should say: what the job was how you/this person found this job how long you/ this person had this job and explain how you/ this person feel(s) about this job. Sample Answer 1: Thanks for the opportunity you gave me to talk about this topic. Actually, I am doing my post graduation in a university now and I worked in a local Web design and Hosting company for about one year after I finished my graduation. I would like to talk about this job experience I have. In fact, this is the only paid job I have ever done so far. I joined this company as a junior executive and when I left the job I was working as an Executive officer. As the company business was related to website designing, hosting and networking related services and I was an executive there but not a designer or programmer, my main responsibility was to promote their services, managing existing clients and giving some technical feedbacks over phone and email. I learned about this job from an online job portal and their advertisement stated that fresh graduates could apply. I went through their other job requirements and it was a good match for me. I applied online and in a few days, I was called for the interview. After two weeks they gave me a call and asked me whether I wanted to join their company or not. I accepted their offer and joined this company in earlier January 2014. I did this job for about a year as I remember leaving this job in the early February of 2015. After I got enrolled in my MBA, I found it very difficult to manage my time both for the office and classes. I had to decide and I preferred to pay full attention to my studies and left the job. My experience in this company was very pleasant. Indeed, I learned a lot about the client communicating, handling their queries and complaints, promoting different packages this web hosting company offered and the technologies related to the designing and hosting. Besides, I was lucky to work with some great colleagues including many designers, developers and system administrators. The working environment was very friendly and I never felt stressed working there. The professional knowledge and experience I gained from my first job in this company would be very important in my career, I hope. I had to work many long hours and that’s something I often had to struggle with especially after I got enrolled in my Master's degree. I remember working till midnight sometimes when there were issues related to a server or hosting. Sometimes deadlines were very frequent for various clients and I had to work without any day-off. Apart from these negative aspects, I enjoyed my job and the salary was very satisfactory. I even got two salary increments in one year and that was very encouraging for me.
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Describe
a paid
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job
you did or someone
you know
did. You should say: what the
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job
was how you/this person found this
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job
how long you/ this person had this
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job
and
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explain
how you/ this person feel(s) about this
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job
. Sample Answer 1:

Thanks for the opportunity you gave me to talk about this topic.
Actually
, I am doing my post graduation in a university
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now
and I worked in a local Web design and
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Hosting
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company
for about one year after I finished my graduation. I would like to talk about this
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job
experience I have. In fact, this is the
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only
paid
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job
I have ever done
so
far. I
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joined
this
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company
as a junior executive and when I
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left
the
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job
I was
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working
as an Executive officer. As the
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company
business was
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related
to website designing,
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hosting
and networking
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related
services and I was an executive there
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but
not a designer or programmer, my main responsibility was to promote their services, managing existing clients and giving
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some
technical feedbacks over phone and email. I learned about this
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job
from an online
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job
portal and their advertisement stated that fresh graduates could apply. I went through their other
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job
requirements and it was a
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good
match for me.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
applied online and in a few days, I
was called
for the interview. After two weeks they gave me a call and asked me whether I wanted to
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join
their
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company
or not. I
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accepted
their offer and
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joined
this
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company
in earlier January 2014. I did this
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job
for about a year as I remember leaving this
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job
in the early
When specifying a month and year, 'of' is unnecessary: "February 2015".
February of 2015
. After I
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got
enrolled in my MBA, I found it
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very
difficult to manage my time both for the office and classes. I had to decide and I preferred to pay full attention to my studies and
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left
the
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job
. My experience in this
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company
was
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very
pleasant.
Indeed
, I learned a lot about the client communicating, handling their queries and complaints, promoting
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different
packages this web
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hosting
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company
offered and the technologies
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related
to the designing and
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hosting
.
Besides
, I was lucky to work with
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some
great colleagues including
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many
designers, developers and system administrators. The
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working
environment was
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very
friendly and I never felt
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stressed
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working
there. The professional knowledge and experience I gained from my
first
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job
in this
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company
would be
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very
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important
in my career, I hope. I had to work
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many
long hours and that’s something I
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often
had to struggle with
especially
after I
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got
enrolled in my Master's degree. I remember
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working
till midnight
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sometimes
when there were issues
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related
to a server or
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hosting
.
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Sometimes
deadlines were
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very
frequent for various clients and I had to work without any day-off. Apart from these
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negative
aspects, I enjoyed my
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job
and the salary was
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very
satisfactory. I even
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got
two salary increments in one year and that was
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very
encouraging for me.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a paid job you did or someone you know did. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
500 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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