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Describe an important festival in your country. v.1

Describe an important festival in your country. v. 1
Describe an important festival in your country. You should say: what is it what is the significance of it how people celebrate this festival and describe why this is an important festival in your country. Follow-up Questions: What are some important festivals in your country? What special foods and activities are connected with this festival? What do you most enjoy about a festival? Why are festivals important for a culture/ country?   Model Answer 1: We, the Australian people, love life and love to celebrate, whenever there is an opportunity. We also happen to be a country of many festivals, which are enjoyed by all Australians, regardless of their race, religions and cultures, and this cue card topic offers me a great opportunity to talk about one such festival of my country. The name of this festival is called the “National Folk Festival”. It is an Australian family-oriented celebration which is attended by a significant number of people from all over Australia. Being held in Melbourne for the first time in 1967, it has been taking place at Exhibition Park in Canberra (EPIC) every Easter from Easter Thursday - Easter Monday, every year. It was inspired by the Newport Folk Festival in the United States, apparently in an effort to recognize the folk culture of Australian people, so that the people in my great country can gain valuable insight about their cultural identity through grassroots and community activities. This also seems to be a festival which is renowned among players of traditional music as a place to go and meet their friends, and to see some excellent performances, and attend some workshops or training sessions with some of the best musicians in this half of the world. Anyway, people celebrate this festival by organising concerts, a film festival, numerous impromptu street performances, workshops on making, playing and repairing musical instruments, visual art, storytelling and poetry, and many dance workshops. There are also many craft stalls in this festival site to introduce people to Australian handicraft works. Anyway, this is an important festival in my country, because it allows regular Australian folks like us to understand and appreciate our cultural identity and features so that we can bring the much-needed sense of unity and solidarity among our people – people who come from different races, religions, cultures and backgrounds from all over the world.   Besides, this festival also allows us to have some fun and good time together with our friends and family while also learning about our folk culture at the same time.
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Describe
an
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important
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festival
in your
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country
. You should say: what is it what is the significance of it how
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people
celebrate this
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festival
and
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describe
why this is an
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important
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festival
in your country.

Follow-up Questions: What are
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some
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important
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festivals
in your
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country
? What special foods and activities
are connected
with this
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festival
? What do you most enjoy about a
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festival
? Why are
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festivals
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important
for a culture/
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country
?
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Model Answer 1: We, the Australian
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people
,
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love
life and
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love
to celebrate, whenever there is an opportunity. We
also
happen to be a
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country
of
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many
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festivals
, which
are enjoyed
by all Australians, regardless of their race, religions and
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cultures
, and this cue card topic offers me a great opportunity to talk about one such
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festival
of my country.

The name of this
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festival
is called
the “National
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Folk
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Festival”
. It is an Australian family-oriented celebration which
is attended
by a significant number of
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people
from all over Australia.
Being held
in Melbourne for the
first
time in 1967, it has been taking place at Exhibition Park in Canberra (EPIC) every Easter from Easter Thursday
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-
Easter Monday, every year. It
was inspired
by the Newport
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Folk
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Festival
in the United States,
apparently
in an effort to recognize the
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folk
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culture
of Australian
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people
,
so
that the
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people
in my great
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country
can gain valuable insight about their cultural identity through grassroots and community activities.

This
also
seems to be a
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festival
which
is renowned
among players of traditional music as a place to go and
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meet
their friends, and to
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see
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some
excellent performances, and attend
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some
workshops or training sessions with
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some
of the best musicians in this half of the world.
Anyway
,
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people
celebrate this
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festival
by
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organising
concerts, a film
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festival
, numerous impromptu street performances, workshops on making, playing and repairing musical instruments, visual art, storytelling and poetry, and
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many
dance workshops. There are
also
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many
craft stalls in this
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festival
site to introduce
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people
to Australian handicraft works.

Anyway
, this is an
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important
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festival
in my
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country
,
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because
it
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allows
regular Australian folks like us to understand and appreciate our cultural identity and features
so
that we can bring the much-needed sense of unity and solidarity among our
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people
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–
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people
who
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come
from
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different
races, religions,
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cultures
and backgrounds from all over the world.
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Besides
, this
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festival
also
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allows
us to have
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some
fun and
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good
time together with our friends and family while
also
learning about our
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folk
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culture
at the same time.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an important festival in your country. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
424 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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