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Describe an exciting news that you heard (either through the phone or e-mail). v.1

Describe an exciting news that you heard (either through the phone or e-mail). v. 1
Describe an exciting news that you heard (either through the phone or e-mail). You should say: What is was about Who gave this news When you got this news and explain why this was an exciting news to you. Model Answer: The exciting news that I heard over the phone was the birth news of my nephew. My mother called me on my cell phone when I was away from my hometown and that’s one of the most exciting news I have ever got in my life. I was in the second year in my university and because of that I was away from home. One day my mother called and gave me this happy news. I had exam ahead of me and after getting the news I was so happy and thrilled that I forgot everything and came to my hometown at that very night to see the newborn baby. I have two sisters and I am the youngest son of my parents. My sisters got married and first when I was in my A level. I heard that my sister was pregnant and would have a baby soon. Having a baby at our home was a much-desired dream of ours and I often fantasised to have a beautiful baby at our home. So we were counting days for the baby to come to this world and for enlighten our house. At the last moment of my sister’s pregnancy, she became very ill and some complexities appeared as the doctors reported. Naturally, we were very anxious for the mother and the baby who is yet to come. When I got the call from my mum that my sister has become the mother of a beautiful baby and both are fine, I was in one hand very animated and on the other hand relieved from the tension that I was going through for the last few days.     Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a good news you received recently. Describe a memorable event of your life. Describe a phone conversation you remember well. Describe happy news you received via mail or phone. Describe an important event of your life.
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Describe
an
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exciting
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news
that you heard (either through the
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phone
or e-mail). You should say: What
Did you mean "it"?
is
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was
about Who gave this
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news
When you
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got
this
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news
and
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explain
why this was an
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exciting
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news
to you. Model Answer:

The
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exciting
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news
that I heard over the
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phone
was the birth
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news
of my nephew. My
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mother
called me on my cell
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phone
when I was away from my hometown and that’s one of the most
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exciting
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news
I have ever
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got
in my life. I was in the second year in my university and
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because
of that I was away from home. One day my
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mother
called and gave me this happy
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news
. I had exam ahead of me and after getting the
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news
I was
so
happy and thrilled that I forgot everything and came to my hometown at that
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very
night to
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see
the newborn baby. I have two
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
sisters and
I am the youngest son of my parents. My
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sisters
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got
married and
first
when I was in my A level. I heard that my
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sister
was pregnant and would have a baby
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soon
. Having a baby at our home was a much-desired dream of ours and I
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often
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fantasised
to have a
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beautiful
baby at our home.
So
we were counting days for the baby to
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come
to this world and for enlighten our
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house
. At the last moment of my
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sister’s
pregnancy, she became
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very
ill and
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some
complexities appeared as the doctors reported.
Naturally
, we were
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very
anxious for the
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mother
and the baby who is
yet
to
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come
. When I
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got
the call from my mum that my
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sister
has become the
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mother
of a
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beautiful
baby and both are fine, I was in one hand
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very
animated and
on the other hand
relieved from the tension that I was going through for the last few days.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a
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good
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news
you received recently.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
of your life.
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Describe
a
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phone
conversation you remember
well
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
happy
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news
you received via mail or
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phone
.
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Describe
an
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important
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
of your life.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an exciting news that you heard (either through the phone or e-mail). v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
379 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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