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Describe an exciting experience in your life. v.1

Describe an exciting experience in your life. v. 1
Describe an exciting experience in your life. You should say: what it is when and where it occurred what happened and explain what was so exciting about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: Thank you very much for this interesting topic. I, in fact, can recall several such occasions and for this cue card topic, I would like to talk about one of my recent exciting experiences. A couple of months ago I went to watch a 3D animated movie in a movie theatre for the first time in my life. I have had experience of watching a 3D movie at home but not in a really large screen in a theatre. It was an overwhelming experience and I thoroughly enjoyed it. To be more precise, I went to watch the movie with two close friends of mine and it was mid-February in 2018. The name of the movie theatre was (. . . say a movie theatre name. . . ) and the movie we enjoyed was (. . . say an animated movie name. . . ). Once there, I decided to watch a 3D movie as I thought it would be fun to watch a 3D movie on a large screen. To share my impression with you, I was enthralled and quite taken aback with the surreal stage at which I entered when I wore the 3D glasses. It was as if I was present at the scene and was witnessing the whole thing with my own eyes! Just after I put on the glasses that were designed for watching 3D movies, I was taken to a magical yet original world of animation. I can not compare it with my previous experience of watching a movie in a theatre. I felt as if I was cut off from reality and transported to a fairy world of animated characters. The sound system of the theatre added another thrilling dimension to the experience. Though 3D movies are still in its primary stages, I would say, it has advanced remarkably and offers a whole new dimension to the movie lovers. The experience I have had at that time was unique. I was so enchanted with the experience that I went to watch another 3D movie within a week. Afterwards, I have enjoyed more than five or six 3D movies so far but the excitement of experiencing it for the first time is unforgettable.
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Describe
an exciting
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experience
in your life. You should say: what it is when and where it occurred what happened and
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explain
what was
so
exciting about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer 1:

Thank you
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very
much for this interesting topic. I, in fact, can recall several such occasions and for this cue card topic, I would like to talk about one of my recent exciting experiences.

A couple of months ago I went to
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watch
a 3D animated
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movie
in a
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movie
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theatre
for the
first
time in my life. I have had
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experience
of watching a 3D
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movie
at home
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but
not in a
really
large screen in a
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theatre
. It was an overwhelming
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experience
and I
thoroughly
enjoyed it.

To be more precise, I went to
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watch
the
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movie
with two close friends of mine and it was mid-February in 2018. The name of the
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movie
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theatre
was (.
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.
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.
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say
a
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movie
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theatre
name.
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.
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.
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)
and the
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movie
we enjoyed was (.
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.
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.
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say
an animated
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movie
name.
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.
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.
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)
. Once there, I decided to
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watch
a 3D
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movie
as I
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thought
it would be fun to
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watch
a 3D
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movie
on a large screen. To share my impression with you, I
was enthralled
and quite taken aback with the surreal stage at which I entered when I wore the 3D glasses. It was as if I was present at the scene and was witnessing the whole thing with my
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own
eyes!

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Just
after I put on the glasses that
were designed
for watching 3D
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movies
, I
was taken
to a magical
yet
original world of animation. I can not compare it with my previous
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experience
of watching a
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movie
in a
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theatre
. I felt as if I was
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cut
off from reality and transported to a fairy world of animated characters. The sound system of the
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theatre
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added
another thrilling dimension to the
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experience
. Though 3D
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movies
are
still
in its primary stages, I would say, it has advanced
remarkably
and offers a whole new dimension to the
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movie
lovers.

The
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experience
I have had at that time was unique. I was
so
enchanted with the
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experience
that I went to
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watch
another 3D
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movie
within a week. Afterwards, I have enjoyed more than five or six 3D
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movies
so
far
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but
the excitement of experiencing it for the
first
time is unforgettable.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an exciting experience in your life. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
439 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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