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Describe your experience of teaching a friend or family member. v.1

Describe your experience of teaching a friend or family member. v. 1
Describe your experience of teaching a friend or family member. You should say: whom you taught when it was what subject you taught and explain how you felt about teaching this friend or family member. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: Since my childhood, I had developed a tremendous admiration for teaching as I have always felt that the teaching profession to be really rewarding and challenging at the same time. But, I got a first-hand experience of how rewarding or challenging it really was only after I was forced to embark on a mission of formally teaching my little niece. It was about 5 years ago, and I just started my new job as a Jr. Software Engineer at a small software firm in my country. Of course, I was lucky that my job had given me a nice, personal laptop so that I could work on it at home from time to time except, of course, the problem was my little 8 years old niece (whom I loved so much, by the way) also liked that laptop, and she also wanted to learn to work on a computer. I tried to dissuade her from using my laptop mainly because I never thought of myself as a “good teacher”. But, she was just too stubborn, and I was left with no other choices than teaching her. So, the computer lesson began, and to my pleasant surprise, I found out that my niece was rather smart in learning basic things like turning on and off a computer, opening a particular software and composing documents. She even learned things like rearranging application windows, drawing pictures, playing games after teaching her only about a few times. I also taught her how to protect folders, do some basic maths, send emails and search for anything on the internet apart from giving her some ideas on what a computer is really capable of accomplishing. Anyway, I felt really good and a bit proud of myself also as I managed to teach my little niece about some complex (supposed to be complex for a child, I thought) computer lessons without much efforts and hassle. In fact, up until those computer lessons, I never thought that I could teach someone with such ease. Besides, it was after these computer lessons that I realized that we should never underestimate the abilities of children which I did previously.
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your experience of
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teaching
a friend or family member. You should say: whom you taught when it was what subject you taught and
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explain
how you felt about
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teaching
this friend or family member. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer 1: Since my childhood, I had developed a tremendous admiration for
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teaching
as I have always felt that the
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teaching
profession to be
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really
rewarding and challenging at the same
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time
.
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But
, I
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got
a
first
-hand experience of how rewarding or challenging it
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really
was
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only
after I
was forced
to embark on a mission of
formally
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teaching
my
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little
niece.

It was about 5 years ago, and I
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just
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started
my new job as a Jr. Software Engineer at a
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small
software firm in my country.
Of course
, I was lucky that my job had
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given
me a nice, personal laptop
so
that I could work on it at home from
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time
to
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time
except,
of course
, the problem was my
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little
8 years
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old
niece (whom I
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loved
so
much, by the way)
also
liked that laptop, and she
also
wanted to learn to work on a computer. I tried to dissuade her from using my laptop
mainly
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because
I never
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thought
of myself as a “
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good
teacher”.
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But
, she was
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just
too stubborn, and I was
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left
with no other choices than
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teaching
her.

So
, the computer
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lesson
began, and to my pleasant surprise, I found out that my niece was
rather
smart in learning basic things like turning on and off a computer, opening a particular software and composing documents. She even learned things like rearranging application windows, drawing pictures, playing games after
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teaching
her
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only
about a few
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times
. I
also
taught her how to protect folders, do
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some
basic
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maths
,
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send
emails and search for anything on the internet apart from giving her
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some
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ideas
on what a computer is
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really
capable of accomplishing.

Anyway
, I felt
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really
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good
and a bit proud of myself
also
as I managed to teach my
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little
niece about
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some
complex (supposed to be complex for a child, I
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thought
) computer
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lessons
without
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much
efforts and hassle. In fact, up until those computer
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lessons
, I never
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thought
that I could teach someone with such
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ease
.
Besides
, it was after these computer
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lessons
that I realized that we should never underestimate the abilities of children which I did previously.
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5Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe your experience of teaching a friend or family member. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
436 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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