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Describe a wild animal from your country. v.1

Describe a wild animal from your country. v. 1
Describe a wild animal from your country. You should say:  what the animal is  what it looks like  where it lives and explain how you feel about this animal.   Model Answer 1: Living in a country like Bangladesh, when thinking about a wild animal, the name of the mighty royal Bengal tiger unmistakably comes into my mind, simply because they are so different from any other wild animals. So, I will go ahead and describe this royal animal as best as I can. Anyway, although they are called the royal Bengal tiger (by the way, Bengal means “Bangladesh” in modern times), these wild animals are not unique to Bangladesh only because they also live in some parts of India, Nepal and Bhutan. But, as far as Bangladesh is concerned, our royal Bengal tigers live in the “Sundarban” which is widely viewed as the largest mangrove forest in the world. Being the largest (in size) members of the cat family, this majestic animal’s coat or skin is yellow to light orange with stripes ranging from dark brown to black, and the belly and the interior parts of the limbs are white while its tail (about 60-110 centimetres long) is orange with black rings. Its head-body length is 140-280 cm while it has a height of about 95-110 centimetres at its shoulder. Their sizes can vary from up to 220 kg (for male) and 140 kg for female. Being renowned for their immense power and strength, these wild animals are not only about to hunt on land but also in the water since they know how to swim also. On top of that, they are also able to climb the trees and kill their prey by using their large and retractable claws. These fearless animals use their distinctive coats as camouflage to do the hunting, and they can travel miles to find buffalo, deer, wild pigs, and other large mammals. Well, I feel that these wild animals are some of the rare natural wonders of our animal world, and as such, they should be preserved at all cost before becoming completely extinct. In fact, while their number was in hundreds of thousands before a hundred year, today they have come down to probably 2500 altogether because of illegal hunting and destruction of their natural habitat.
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Describe
a wild
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animal
from your country. You should say:
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what the
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animal
is
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what it looks like
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where it
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lives
and
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explain
how you feel about this
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animal
.
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Model Answer 1:

Living in a country like Bangladesh, when thinking about a wild
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animal
, the name of the mighty
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royal
Bengal tiger
unmistakably
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comes
into my mind,
simply
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because
they are
so
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different
from any other wild
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animals
.
So
, I will go ahead and
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describe
this
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royal
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animal
as
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best
as I can.

Anyway
, although they
are called
the
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royal
Bengal tiger (by the way, Bengal means “Bangladesh” in modern times), these wild
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animals
are not unique to Bangladesh
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only
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because
they
also
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live
in
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some
parts of India, Nepal and Bhutan.
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But
, as far as Bangladesh
is concerned
, our
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royal
Bengal tigers
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live
in the “
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Sundarban
” which is
widely
viewed as the largest mangrove forest in the world.

Being the largest (in size) members of the cat family, this majestic
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animal’s
coat or skin is yellow to light orange with stripes ranging from dark brown to black, and the belly and the interior parts of the limbs are white while its tail (about 60-110
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centimetres
long) is orange with black rings. Its head-body length is 140-280 cm while it has a height of about 95-110
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centimetres
at its shoulder. Their sizes can vary from up to 220 kg (for male) and 140 kg for female.
Being renowned
for their immense power and strength, these wild
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animals
are not
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only
about to hunt on land
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but
also
in the water since they know how to swim
also
.
On top of that
, they are
also
able to climb the trees and kill their prey by using their large and retractable claws. These fearless
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animals
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use
their distinctive coats as camouflage to do the hunting, and they can travel miles to find buffalo, deer, wild pigs, and other large mammals.

Well
, I feel that these wild
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animals
are
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some of the
rare natural wonders of our
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animal
world, and as such, they should
be preserved
at all cost
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before
becoming completely extinct. In fact, while their number was in hundreds of thousands
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before
a hundred year,
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today
they have
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come
down to
probably
2500 altogether
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because
of illegal hunting and destruction of their natural habitat.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a wild animal from your country. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
384 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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