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Describe a problem that affects the environment in the area where you live. v.1

Describe a problem that affects the environment in the area where you live. v. 1
Describe a problem that affects the environment in the area where you live. You should say: what the problem is what causes it what people feel about the problem and explain what you think could be done to solve it.   Model Answer 1: Environmental problem is a very big issue in today’s world these days. In fact, there is hardly any country or city in this world which hasn’t had to deal with this problem in these modern times. So, naturally, the place, in which I live, is not immune from it either, even though, the environmental problem, my place is facing, can be little different from other places. Anyway, the environmental problem, that my area is facing today, is deforestation. But, I bet that the majority of the people, where I live, didn’t even know before 10 years that such a problem could actually exist. But, they came to a rude awakening when they found out to their utmost shock that more than 50 per cent of the trees, which once provided them shed and clean air on a hot summer day, had just vanished. Of course, the culprit to blame for such deforestation can squarely fall upon the urbanization efforts of our local city government, which is trying to construct more and more new buildings for commercial purposes. Some new buildings are also being erected in order to accommodate the rising population who are moving into our city for a better life and better employment opportunities. Then also, the trees on both sides of the roads, which were planted a long time ago as a part of “city beautification” effort, are also gone to make the roads even wider.   So, in essence, people like me feel that it is an all-out attack on our city eco system, which was saving it for a long time, in the name of some so-called urbanization and modernization. Anyway, in order to stop this environmental problem or deforestation, the local city government must take a comprehensive plan to plant more trees in a ring that surrounds our entire city. Besides, city dwellers should also be encouraged or even be given incentives to plant any kind of trees on whatever empty space they have in their front yard or back yard. Finally, people can also plant different kinds of trees on their roof tops to increase the number of living trees in their city.
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Describe
a
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problem
that affects the environment in the area where you
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live
. You should say: what the
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problem
is what causes it what
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people
feel about the
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problem
and
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explain
what you
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think
could
be done
to solve it.
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Model Answer
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1: Environmental
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problem
is a
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very
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big
issue in
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today
’s world these days. In fact, there is hardly any country or city in this world which hasn’t had to deal with this
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problem
in these modern times.
So
,
naturally
, the place, in which I
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live
, is not immune from it either,
even though
, the
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environmental
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problem
, my place is facing, can be
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little
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different
from other places.

Anyway
, the
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environmental
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problem
, that my area is facing
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today
, is deforestation.
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But
, I bet that the majority of the
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people
, where I
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live
, didn’t even know
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before
10 years that such a
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problem
could
actually
exist.
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But
, they came to a rude awakening when they found out to their utmost shock that more than 50 per cent of the
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trees
, which once provided them shed and clean air on a hot summer day, had
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just
vanished.

Of course
, the culprit to blame for such deforestation can
squarely
fall upon the urbanization efforts of our local city
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government
, which is trying to construct more and more new buildings for commercial purposes.
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Some
new buildings are
also
being erected
in order to accommodate the rising population who are moving into our city for a better life and better employment opportunities. Then
also
, the
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trees
on both sides of the roads, which
were planted
a long time ago as a part of “city beautification” effort, are
also
gone to
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make
the roads even wider.
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So
, in essence,
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people
like me feel that it is an all-out attack on our city
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eco system
, which was saving it for a long time, in the name of
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some
so
-called urbanization and modernization.

Anyway
, in order to
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stop
this
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environmental
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problem
or deforestation, the local city
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government
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must
take a comprehensive plan to plant more
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trees
in a ring that surrounds our entire city.
Besides
, city dwellers should
also
be encouraged
or even be
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given
incentives to plant any kind of
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trees
on whatever empty space they have in their front yard or back yard.
Finally
,
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people
can
also
plant
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different
kinds of
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trees
on their roof tops to increase the number of living
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trees
in their city.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a problem that affects the environment in the area where you live. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
403 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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