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Describe a time when you helped someone. v.2

Describe a time when you helped someone. v. 2
Describe a time when you helped someone. You should say: who you helped and why how you helped this person what the result was and explain how you felt about helping this person. Model Answer 1: Thank you for giving me the chance to talk about this topic. Actually, I can remember quite a few occasions when I tried to lend a helping hand to others. The particular event that I would like to talk about was the time when I helped a poor family in our hometown during my college years. I can’t recall the exact name of the person but I remember that he had a family of 5 members and he was a technician. He had very little education and he mostly relied on the small shop he had to repair electronic goods. After a devastating cyclone, his small shop was demolished and he had no other income source or ability to rebuild it. One day I noticed him trying to console his small kids who were demanding for foods. This happened near our college campus and I had been there to meet a friend. I was so touched by the beautiful yet gloomy faced kids that I went ahead and talk to this person. He explained what happened and was talking in a trembling voice. He also told me he assured her wife that he would feed the kids and would bring foods to home. I bought them some snacks and fruits and asked them to stay nearby for a while. I watched the small kids were eating the foods voraciously and they had smiles on their face. I went to my class and told the whole story to my three close friends. Finally, we went to our class teacher and wrote an application regarding the suffering of the person and his family. The teacher permitted us to spend an hour to raise some money for the suffering family from other classes and we were so glad to have the permission. We had been able to convey the sufferings of this person and his family to the students and teachers and we raised a significant amount of money which was beyond my expectation. With this money we bought some foods and clothes for this family and they were so grateful that the husband and wife started crying and praying for us. We gave the man the remaining amount and he had been able to start his work again. About my feelings, I was very satisfied and contended. This is the first time I realised how enthralling and satisfying it is to help someone. I felt like blessed and the person and his wife revered me as if I was their dear one. In fact being able to help someone in need is something we can only feel and words can’t actually describe it.   Model Answer 2: Helping others is really a very good habit. But sometimes, you will need to be careful about providing the support. In my life, I have helped many people and at the same time, I was punished for helping them. In fact, almost all the events were bitter for me, and now I will describe the latest event that took place with me. Being a student and part-time worker in Malaysia, life is difficult to me. I have been struggling with my challenges but try to help others in all possible forms. A university friend of mine, Christopher (I am not citing his real name) wanted some monetary supports for me to deposit his tuition fees for the new semester. In fact, he did not work and studies with the expense of his own, rather he depends on his family. He belongs to a wealthy family from Kenya and it was for the first time that he sought financial help to me. But the situation was difficult for me to handle. In fact, Christopher and I were in the same department and lived in the same dormitory. When he asked for the support, I was perplexed. I also had to deposit my tuition fees. So, I had only the portion of mine and was unable to provide any support to him. Later, I had an idea that why should not I share my amount with him. It will help to meet the crises. So I shared my tuition fees with him and gave him the half of the amount. We had the option to pay the fees by three instalments. Usually, I used to pay the entire amount at the beginning of the semester but now I took the option to use the instalment facilities. Accordingly, I lend him from my money to pay the first instalment of the semester with me. Christopher successfully deposited the first instalment and then he also deposited the due amount when he received his required fund from his family. Both of us completed the semester successfully and now we are waiting for the next semester to begin. But it was hard for me to adjust the amount in the later instalments. Though my family is solvent enough to bear my educational expense, I do not take any support from them for this purpose. Rather, I am trying to uphold myself with my own efforts. Hence, I am trying to be self-reliant from my student life. However, I had a splendid performance in that semester despite the trouble of arranging the remaining tuition fee amount and some other unwanted hazards. Finally, I felt pity for Christopher as he did not pay me back the amount I shared with him. In fact, he cheated on me with the money. He refused about the issue and clearly forbid me not to disturb him about the issue anymore. I do not know why he behaved so badly about the monetary issue. If he did not want to pay me the money, he could have told me in person. But he did not do so and created for some scenes in conjunction of some of his friends. I deeply felt sorry for helping a boy like him. Later, I came to know that he became a drug addict and spent the money on buying drug which he was supposed to return me. It was an unwanted experience indeed.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe something good you did for other. Describe a situation when you helped someone. Describe something that you felt good about.
Describe
a
time
when you
helped
someone
. You should say: who you
helped
and why how you
helped
this
person
what the result was and
explain
how you
felt
about helping this
person
. Model Answer 1:

Thank you for giving me the chance to
talk
about this topic.
Actually
, I can remember quite a few occasions when I tried to lend a helping hand to others. The particular
event
that I would like to
talk
about was the
time
when I
helped
a poor
family
in our hometown during my college years. I can’t recall the exact name of the
person
but
I remember that he had a
family
of 5
members and
he was a technician. He had
very
little
education and
he
mostly
relied on the
small
shop he had to repair electronic
goods
. After a devastating cyclone, his
small
shop was
demolished and
he had no
other
income source or ability to rebuild it. One day I noticed him trying to console his
small
kids
who were demanding for
foods
. This happened near our college campus and I had been there to
meet
a
friend
. I was
so
touched by the
beautiful
yet
gloomy faced
kids
that I went ahead and
talk
to this
person
. He
explained
what happened and was talking in a trembling voice. He
also
told
me he assured her wife that he would feed the
kids
and would bring
foods
to home. I
bought
them
some
snacks and fruits and asked them to stay nearby for a while. I
watched
the
small
kids
were eating the
foods
voraciously and
they had smiles on their face.
I
went to my
class
and
told
the whole story to my three close
friends
.
Finally
, we went to our
class
teacher and wrote an application regarding the suffering of the
person
and his
family
. The teacher permitted us to spend an hour to raise
some
money
for the suffering
family
from
other
classes and
we were
so
glad to have the permission.

We had been able to convey the sufferings of this
person
and his
family
to the students and
teachers and
we raised a significant
amount
of
money
which was beyond my expectation. With this
money
we
bought
some
foods
and clothes for this
family and
they were
so
grateful that the husband and wife
started
crying and praying for us. We gave the
man
the remaining
amount and
he had been able to
start
his work again. About my feelings, I was
very
satisfied and contended. This is the
first
time
I
realised
how enthralling and satisfying it is to
help
someone
. I
felt
like blessed and the
person
and his wife revered me as if I was their dear one. In
fact
being able to
help
someone
in need is something we can
only
feel and words can’t
actually
describe
it.
 
Model Answer 2:

Helping others is
really
a
very
good
habit.
But
sometimes
, you will need to be careful about providing the
support
. In my life, I have
helped
many
people
and at the same
time
, I
was punished
for helping them. In
fact
, almost all the
events
were bitter for me, and
now
I will
describe
the latest
event
that took place with me.

Being a student and part-time worker in Malaysia, life is
difficult to me
. I have been struggling with my challenges
but
try to
help
others in all possible forms. A university
friend
of mine, Christopher (I am not citing his real name) wanted
some
monetary
supports
for me to deposit his tuition
fees
for the new semester. In
fact
, he did not work and studies with the expense of his
own
,
rather
he depends on his
family
. He belongs to a wealthy
family
from Kenya and it was for the
first
time
that he sought financial
help
to me.

But
the situation was difficult for me to handle. In
fact
, Christopher and I were in the same department and
lived
in the same dormitory. When he
asked for
the
support
, I
was perplexed
. I
also
had to deposit my tuition
fees
.
So
, I had
only
the portion of mine and was unable to provide any
support
to him. Later, I had an
idea
that why should not I share my
amount
with him. It will
help
to
meet
the crises.
So
I shared my tuition
fees
with him and gave him the half of the
amount
. We had the option to
pay
the
fees
by three
instalments
.
Usually
, I
used
to
pay
the entire
amount
at the beginning of the semester
but
now
I took the option to
use
the
instalment
facilities.
Accordingly
, I lend him from my
money
to
pay
the
first
instalment
of the semester with me.

Christopher
successfully
deposited the
first
instalment and
then he
also
deposited the due
amount
when he received his required fund from his
family
. Both of us completed the semester
successfully
and
now
we are waiting for the
next
semester to
begin
.
But
it was
hard
for me to adjust the
amount
in the later
instalments
. Though my
family
is solvent
enough
to bear my educational expense, I do not take any
support
from them for this purpose.
Rather
, I am trying to uphold myself with my
own
efforts.
Hence
, I am trying to be self-reliant from my student life.
However
, I had a splendid performance in that semester despite the trouble of arranging the remaining tuition
fee
amount
and
some
other
unwanted hazards.

Finally
, I
felt
pity for Christopher as he did not
pay
me back the
amount
I shared with him. In
fact
, he cheated on me with the
money
. He refused about the issue and
clearly
forbid me not to disturb him about the issue anymore. I do not know why he behaved
so
badly
about the monetary issue. If he did not want to
pay
me the
money
, he could have
told
me in
person
.
But
he did not do
so
and created for
some
scenes in conjunction of
some
of his
friends
. I
deeply
felt
sorry for helping a boy like him. Later, I came to know that he became a drug addict and spent the
money
on buying drug which he
was supposed
to return me. It was an unwanted experience
indeed
.
 
Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to
talk
about this Cue Card would enable you to
talk
about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
Describe
something
good
you did for
other
.
Describe
a situation when you
helped
someone
.
Describe
something that you
felt
good
about.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
112Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you helped someone. v. 2

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8 paragraphs
1095 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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