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Describe a successful businessman you know. v.1

Describe a successful businessman you know. v. 1
Describe a successful businessman you know. You should say: who is the person how you know this person how s/he became successful and explain why you consider him/her as a successful business person. Sample Answer: Mr. Alex Smith (…or say a name you prefer…) is a successful businessman I know about. He is from my hometown and he now owns two groups of industries and the products line of his companies are famous in our country. Since he is from the same town where I spent my childhood and teenage time, I have heard a lot about him and few times I met him as well. He was a son of a successful local businessman and he inherited his father’s electronic industry many years back. That was just the starting and over time he has worked really hard and built his empire in the local business market. In few years, he took some giant leapt in his business and lately has been awarded as one of the bet business entrepreneurs in the country. From the local electronic business he had inherited from his father, he gradually and successfully amassed the fortune and business success and thus has become one of the enviable businessmen in the country. Taking great decisions and gradually enhancing the business was his success mantra. Everyone in our locality agrees that he was an honest, hardworking and wise person who knew when to take risks and when not to. His timely decision, investment in promising sectors and hard work have rewarded him well and his industries have made the opportunity for others to earn their daily bread. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a successful person you know about.   Describe a person who has become successful.   Describe a family business you know about.   Describe successful business or company in your hometown.
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Describe
a
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successful
businessman you
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know
. You should say: who is the
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person
how you
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know
this
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person
how s/he became
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successful
and
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explain
why you consider him/her as a
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successful
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business
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person
. Sample Answer:

Mr. Alex Smith (…or say a name you prefer…) is a
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successful
businessman I
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know
about. He is from my
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hometown and
he
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now
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owns
two groups of industries and the products line of his
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companies
are
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famous
in our country.

Since he is from the same town where I spent my childhood and teenage time, I have heard a lot about him and few times I met him as
well
.

He was a son of a
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successful
local
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businessman and
he inherited his father’s electronic industry
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many
years back. That was
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just
the starting and over time he has worked
really
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hard
and built his empire in the local
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business
market. In few years, he took
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some
giant leapt in his
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business
and lately has
been awarded
as one of the bet
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business
entrepreneurs in the country. From the local electronic
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business
he had inherited from his father, he
gradually
and
successfully
amassed the fortune and
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business
success and
thus
has become one of the enviable businessmen in the country.

Taking great decisions and
gradually
enhancing the
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business
was his success mantra. Everyone in our locality
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agrees
that he was an honest, hardworking and wise
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person
who knew when to take
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risks
and when not to. His timely decision, investment in promising sectors and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work have rewarded him
well
and his industries have made the opportunity for others to earn their daily bread.

Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a
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successful
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person
you
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know
about.
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Describe
a
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person
who has become
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successful
.
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Describe
a family
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business
you
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know
about.
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Describe
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successful
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business
or
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company
in your hometown.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a successful businessman you know. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
326 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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