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Describe a special toy you had in your childhood. v.1

Describe a special toy you had in your childhood. v. 1
Describe a special toy you had in your childhood. You should say: what it was who gave it to you what it looked like and explain why it was a special toy for you.   Model Answer 1: If I remember correctly, in my early days as a child, I wasn’t exactly that much interested in playing with toys. Rather, I was interested more in running outside of the home or jumping with other kids. In fact, I would enjoy outdoors more than staying at home. But, my parents thought that I would rather spend more time at home, hence the idea of buying many toys for me. Anyway, a special toy that my parents bought for me was a toy car, made of quality plastic, and it was battery-operated. However, when the toy car was initially handed to me, I didn’t really find much use of it nor was I that much interested to learn about how it worked. In fact, if I remember it correctly, I left that toy alone for the first few days. By the way, when I was a young child, I seldom remember my parents ever pushing me to do something or imposing anything on me. But, when they found that I wasn’t playing with my toy, they started to show me how to play with it. They even taught me some tricks about getting the car to make some funny sounds. And, it was at that I felt little interested in that plastic toy car. In fact, I really liked the funny sounds it was making. After that, I started to play with. And it was a multicoloured car, and it was about 6 inch in length. The toy had a little windshield and a driver seat also.   It was a fast toy, and the longer I was playing with that car, the more I liked it. Anyway, it was a special toy for me because I felt like it gave me the speed inside me that I was looking for. Besides, it was a very strong toy also because even though, I played very rough with it, it didn’t stop working or running. Finally, I consider the toy to be special also because it offered me an opportunity to spend some more quality time with my parents, which I cherish each and every day of my life.   Sample Answer 2: I remember having many toys in my childhood and in different stages of my childhood I preferred different toys. But among them, the digital artboard was a very special one to me and I played with this special toy for more than 3-4 years as I recall. This was a gift from my father on the occasion of my 5th or 6th birthday. It looked like a whiteboard which was approximately 14x10 inch in dimension. The screen was white and there were 5-6 buttons to operate the digital artboard. A digital pen or stylus type pen was attached to it for painting. This stylus could be placed on the right side of the board. The board was similar to a middle size notebook and was lightweight. I had a fascination with the toy when I first saw it at a superstore. I asked the salesman what the price was and how this can be used. He described that I can draw pictures on this board, edit them, save them and reopen the saved pictures anytime I like. There was a built-in memory and the user can store up to 10 thousand drawings. The colour and pen tool makes the painting easy. He also told that there are some premade design and template that would help the user to draw a picture. He then added 'though this would cost a bit high, it is the digital version of the painting brush, canvas and colours'. At that time I was around 5-6 years old and the toy really mesmerised me. I had a hidden desire to own it one day. I dreamed of art and save so many arts and painting and save them for long. Since I had a passion for painting, I thought the toy would be a perfect one for me. I told my father about my fascination with this toy and a few days later he gave this toy as my birthday gift. I was so happy to have it. This toy was important to me because I have longed for it and that was a special gift from my father. I remember playing with it till I was 10-11 years old and I have painted lots of things on it. As a kid that was a fascinating and exciting toy for me.
Describe
a
special
toy
you had in your childhood. You should say: what it was who gave it to you what it looked like and
explain
why it was a
special
toy
for you.
 
Model Answer 1:

If I
remember
correctly
, in my early days as a child, I wasn’t exactly that much
interested
in
playing
with
toys
.
Rather
, I was
interested
more in running
outside of
the home or jumping with other kids. In fact, I would enjoy outdoors more than staying at home.
But
, my
parents
thought
that I would
rather
spend more time at home,
hence
the
idea
of buying
many
toys
for me.

Anyway
, a
special
toy
that my
parents
bought
for me was a
toy
car
, made of quality plastic, and it was battery-operated.
However
, when the
toy
car
was
initially
handed to me, I didn’t
really
find much
use
of it nor was I that much
interested
to learn about how it worked. In fact, if I
remember
it
correctly
, I
left
that
toy
alone for the
first
few days.

By the way, when I was a young child, I seldom
remember
my
parents
ever pushing me to do something or imposing anything on me.
But
, when they found that I wasn’t
playing
with my
toy
, they
started
to
show
me how to play with it. They even taught me
some
tricks about getting the
car
to
make
some
funny
sounds. And, it was at that I felt
little
interested
in that plastic
toy
car
. In fact, I
really
liked the
funny
sounds it was making. After that, I
started
to play with. And it was a
multicoloured
car
, and it was about
6 inch
in length. The
toy
had a
little
windshield and a driver seat
also
.
 
It was a
fast
toy
, and the longer I was
playing
with that
car
, the more I liked it.

Anyway
, it was a
special
toy
for me
because
I felt like it gave me the speed inside me that I was looking for.
Besides
, it was a
very
strong
toy
also
because
even though
, I played
very
rough with it, it didn’t
stop
working or running.
Finally
, I consider the
toy
to be
special
also
because
it offered me an opportunity to spend
some
more quality time with my
parents
, which I cherish each and every day of my life.
 
Sample Answer 2:

I
remember
having
many
toys
in my childhood and in
different
stages of my childhood I preferred
different
toys
.
But
among them, the digital
artboard
was a
very
special
one to me and I played with this
special
toy
for more than 3-4 years as I recall.

This was a gift from my father on the occasion of my 5th or 6th birthday. It looked like a whiteboard which was approximately
14x10
inch in dimension. The screen was white and there were 5-6 buttons to operate the digital
artboard
. A digital pen or stylus type pen
was attached
to it for
painting
. This stylus could
be placed
on the
right
side of the board. The board was similar to a middle size notebook and was lightweight.

I had a fascination with the
toy
when I
first
saw
it at a superstore. I asked the salesman what the price was and how this can be
used
. He
described
that I can draw pictures on this board, edit them, save them and reopen the saved pictures anytime I like. There was a built-in memory and the user can store up to 10 thousand drawings. The
colour
and pen tool
makes
the
painting
easy. He
also
told
that there are
some
premade
design and
template
that would
help
the user to draw a picture. He then
added
'though this would cost a bit high, it is the digital version of the
painting
brush, canvas and
colours
'. At that time I was around 5-6 years
old
and the
toy
really
mesmerised
me. I had a hidden desire to
own
it one day. I dreamed of art and save
so
many
arts and
painting
and save them for long. Since I had a passion for
painting
, I
thought
the
toy
would be a perfect one for me. I
told
my father about my fascination with this
toy
and a few days later he gave this
toy
as my birthday gift. I was
so
happy to have it.

This
toy
was
important
to me
because
I have longed for it and that was a
special
gift from my father. I
remember
playing
with it till I was 10-11 years
old
and I have painted lots of things on it. As a kid that was a fascinating and exciting
toy
for me.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
61Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a special toy you had in your childhood. v. 1

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