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Describe a popular place in your country. v.1

Describe a popular place in your country. v. 1
Describe a popular place in your country. You should say: where it is why people go to this place what people can do there and explain why this place is so popular. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: Being the capital city of German for more than 800 years, Berlin in Germany is long recognized as a gigantic world city of culture, politics, media and science where people flock in from all over the world in order to enjoy its very diverse mix of sights. There are just so many things to see and do in Berlin and it is not easy to decide where to start. But, I would say that people go to this place probably because it is a city full of flamboyant and interesting people, buzzing with the bohemian culture, and it is without a doubt, the coolest place in Europe. But, if it's not for the exuberant atmosphere of Berlin, people go for, it's probably the extensive history of over two thousand years, and if not for that, it's probably for the mouth-watering foods and beer. Whether one wants to take a boat tour, hang out at the beach or enjoy the amazing nightlife, Berlin has it all.   Whatever the reasons may be, Berlin is a very popular place among the visitors because of its plethora of green spaces, swimming lakes and more than 2, 500 public parks and gardens that offer locals and visitors a sight of mesmerizing natural beauty to enjoy. But if someone is into learning a bit of history,   he or she can certainly see Berlin Wall at East Side Gallery (left standing as a sign of German reunification in 1990), chilling Holocaust Memorial, the Stasi Museum, the German Historical Museum and the Book Burning Square. The city is also known for its art scene and modern landmarks like the gold-coloured, swoop-roofed Berliner Philharmonie, which was built in 1963.   Attracting about 5 million tourists every year, Berlin is popular not just because it reminds the turbulent 20th-century history of Germany up to the Cold War time, but it also remains as one of the most popular and safe tourist destinations in the world.     Model Answer 2: Teluk Kemang - a beautiful beach located in the south of Port Dickson is a very popular beach area in our country which is visited by a large number of people every day. White sands washed by the seawater, harmonic sound of the waves, and a lavish scenic beauty make this place in Negeri Sembilan a favourite destination to many local and foreign tourists. I would like to thank you for the opportunity to allow me to talk about a popular place in my country. Holidaymakers love the clear sea water - which is deep blue, soft white sands, fine sand beach and the annual Port Dickson Festival very much. Young and old alike come here to enjoy the natural beauty of the beach. Moreover, great hotels, holiday resorts and other amenities attract many tourists. In fact, the visitor facilities and amenities are abundant in this area and tourists love to rush in to enjoy their time here. I had been to this place twice and I was really surprised by the blissful surroundings. Interestingly, the sea remains fairly constant regardless of high or low tide, and I believe this tranquillity of the sea allows the visitors not to wade far out to get a decent depth while bathing and it gives them a sense of safety. People can enjoy a very calm and blue sea and refresh their mind once they are at Teluk Kemang. My personal experience of the sunset eve was exceptional. Adventure seekers, mostly young people, hire water scooters or boats and have fun while others can settle for giant inner tubes to float around in the water. Right next to the beach, a visitor can find many stalls that sell a vast variety of goods and souvenirs. I believe this place is usually packed with tourists because it is beautiful and offers great hotels and resorts to stay in with the whole family. I would like to attribute this beach's popularity to the soft white sand and the clear blue water surrounded by a vast blue sky. The beach offers activities to young and old alike and people like to drop by at this popular beach and enjoy their time.
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Describe
a
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popular
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place
in your country. You should say: where it is why
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people
go to this
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place
what
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people
can do there and
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explain
why this
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place
is
so
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popular
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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you if you wish.
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Model Answer 1: Being the capital city of German for more than 800 years, Berlin in Germany is long recognized as a gigantic world city of culture, politics, media and science where
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people
flock in from all over the world in order to
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enjoy
its
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very
diverse mix of sights. There are
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just
so
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many
things to
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see
and do in Berlin and it is not easy to decide where to
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start
.
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But
, I would say that
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people
go to this
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place
probably
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because
it is a city full of flamboyant and interesting
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people
, buzzing with the
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bohemian
culture, and it is without a doubt, the coolest
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place
in Europe.
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But
, if it's not for the exuberant atmosphere of Berlin,
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people
go for, it's
probably
the extensive history of over two thousand years, and if not for that, it's
probably
for the mouth-watering foods and beer. Whether one wants to take a boat tour, hang out at the
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beach
or
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enjoy
the amazing nightlife, Berlin has it all.
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Whatever the reasons may be, Berlin is a
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very
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popular
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place
among the
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visitors
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because
of its plethora of green spaces, swimming lakes and more than 2, 500 public parks and gardens that offer locals and
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visitors
a sight of mesmerizing natural beauty to
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enjoy
.
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But
if someone is into learning a bit of history,
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he or she can
certainly
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see
Berlin Wall at East Side Gallery (
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left
standing as a
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sign
of German reunification in 1990), chilling Holocaust Memorial, the
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Stasi
Museum, the German Historical Museum and the Book Burning Square. The city is
also
known for its art scene and modern landmarks like the
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gold-coloured
, swoop-roofed Berliner
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Philharmonie
, which
was built
in 1963.
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Attracting about 5 million
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tourists
every year, Berlin is
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popular
not
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just
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because
it reminds the turbulent 20th-century history of Germany up to the
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Cold
War time,
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but
it
also
remains as one of the most
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popular
and safe
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tourist
destinations in the world.
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Model Answer 2:
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Teluk
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Kemang
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-
a
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beautiful
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beach
located in the south of Port Dickson is a
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very
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popular
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beach
area in our country which
is visited
by
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a large number of
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people
every day. White
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sands
washed by the seawater, harmonic sound of the waves, and a lavish scenic beauty
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make
this
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place
in
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Negeri
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Sembilan
a
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favourite
destination to
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many
local and foreign
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tourists
. I would like to thank you for the opportunity to
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allow
me to talk about a
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popular
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place
in my country. Holidaymakers
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love
the
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clear
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sea
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water
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-
which is deep
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blue
, soft white
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sands
, fine
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sand
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beach
and the annual Port Dickson Festival
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very
much. Young and
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old
alike
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come
here to
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enjoy
the natural beauty of the
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beach
.
Moreover
, great hotels, holiday resorts and other amenities attract
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many
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tourists
. In fact, the
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visitor
facilities and amenities are abundant in this area and
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tourists
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love
to rush in to
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enjoy
their time here. I had been to this
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place
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
twice and
I was
really
surprised by the blissful surroundings.
Interestingly
, the
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sea
remains
fairly
constant regardless of high or low tide, and I believe this
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tranquillity
of the
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sea
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allows
the
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visitors
not to wade far out to
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get
a decent depth while bathing and it gives them a sense of safety.
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People
can
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enjoy
a
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very
calm and
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blue
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sea
and refresh their mind once they are at
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Teluk
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Kemang
. My personal experience of the sunset eve was exceptional. Adventure seekers,
mostly
young
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people
, hire
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water
scooters or boats and have fun while others can settle for giant inner tubes to float around in the
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water
.
Right
next
to the
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beach
, a
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visitor
can find
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many
stalls that sell a vast variety of
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goods
and souvenirs. I believe this
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place
is
usually
packed with
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tourists
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because
it is
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beautiful
and offers great hotels and resorts to stay in with the whole family. I would like to attribute this beach's popularity to the soft white
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sand
and the
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clear
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blue
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water
surrounded by a vast
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blue
sky. The
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beach
offers activities to young and
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old
alike and
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people
like to drop by at this
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popular
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beach
and
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enjoy
their time.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
70Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a popular place in your country. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
1 paragraphs
770 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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