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Describe a place that you have visited that you particularly liked. v.1

Describe a place that you have visited that you particularly liked. v. 1
Describe a place that you have visited that you particularly liked. You should say: when you visited there who you went with what was most memorable And explain what you liked most about this place. Sample Answer 1: Travelling is my passion and I love to explore new places. I even have a wish list of places I would love to go before I die. Among the places I have been to, Sanyou Cave in China is a place that I particularly liked and would love to visit again. It was 2005 when I went there with my family members. It would probably be mid-July of 2005 when I had been there. My parents are also fond of travelling new places and my father actually selected this place for a two week’s tour. I went there with my parents, my elder brother and his wife. We wanted to take my grandmother but she declined the proposal considering her health condition. Sanyou Cave is in the sheer cliff at the northern region of Xiling Gorge. This was about 6 miles away from the Yichang City of China. This is considered as one of the best cave scenery in the Asia and the whole part was something unexpected to me. Walking up the path from the cave to the Zhixin pavilion was the most memorable part of this tour. My father was with me and he said ‘is not it beautiful? ’ twice during our walk. I thought I time travelled to a distant past and was part of another time and dimension that I actually live in. When we arrived near the cave and looked around, I was awe stricken. It was quite surprising for me to witness a place that I never thought would exist. This place reminded me the movie ‘Time machine’ that I watched many years before. It was so beautiful a place that I liked every moment of our staying there. We spent the night in a hotel established in the cave and that was enthralling. The meaning of the words ‘Sanyou Cave’ is ‘Cave of the Three Travelers’ and it is said that this is a place that inspires people. The exceptional inspiration I got from this place is something I will cherish, probably for the rest of my life.   Sample Answer 2: Recently my visit to the Glacier National Park gave me immense pleasure after a very long time. This is an area where nature has bestowed her gifts generously to the mountains. The place is also good for hiking. I am really lucky that the memories are still vivid in my mind and here I got the chance to describe them. Generally, I try to take some visits at the nearby locations with my family and sometimes alone. I made this visit all by myself and enjoyed a lot. In fact, this is a rocky area filled with natural beauties. So, the best time to visit the park is in winter, I think. And the view may differ to others. The thought appeared on my mind as I have visited the area in different seasons but only found it is charming most in winter. Hence, I made the visit in the middle of December, last. I made a solo visit here in this time. But before this visit, I went there with my family members. In fact, it was the solo visit for different reasons. First of all, I wanted to have some times for myself. I was experiencing huge workloads from my office. By the way, I am a professional computer programmer and work with an international IT agency. So, I have to follow some strict rules and regulations to meet the deadlines. I need to meet targets and other issues within the allotted time. Besides, I need to manage my team of as well consisting of 10 members. As a result, I need to remain busy and even have to attend office for over 13 hours in a day. At the end of the day, I become exhausted and this was the routine for last couple of months. To remove boredom from life, I decided to take break and moved for the Park to spend an entire day, alone. To me, this is a place for natural beauty. I find a sense of serenity in this place. The wilderness amazes me. the carved peaks and valleys adjacent to the Canadian border are really adorable to look at. Moreover, the memories of hiking and riding on boat will remain for long. I walked about five kilometers on the hiking trail by over three hours. Besides, riding on the boat was a different experience for me on the lake of the Park. This was also the perfect place for camping but I was unable to camp. I did not have the preparation for camping. Cycling is another adventurous activity here and I have seen many cyclers exploring the area. I will try to bring a bicycle next time whenever I come. The bright night with millions of stars was the other attraction for me. I liked the wide glaciers and lakes of the Glacier National Park. This is located in the Montana state in the USA and visited by a large number of people. I like the mountain ranges most here. The mountain ranges are completely different from the other smaller mountains I have seen. Besides, the lakes are on the next of my preference list. I liked swimming on the lakes and fishing as well. The mountains of the Park formed around 170 million years before and still they are on the same location. However, there are slight changes in the shape and size of the mountains and lakes. Besides, the enriched animal species are loveable as well. This is really a great place to pay a visit.
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a
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that you have
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that you
particularly
liked. You should say: when you
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there who you
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with what was most memorable And
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explain
what you liked most about this
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place
. Sample Answer 1:

Travelling is my passion and I
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love
to explore new
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places
. I even have a wish list of
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places
I would
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love
to go
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before
I
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die
. Among the
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places
I have been to,
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Sanyou
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Cave
in China is a
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place
that I
particularly
liked and would
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love
to
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visit
again. It was 2005 when I
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went
there with my family members. It would
probably
be mid-July of 2005 when I had been there. My parents are
also
fond of travelling new
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places
and my father
actually
selected this
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place
for a
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two week’s tour
. I
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went
there with my parents, my elder brother and his wife. We wanted to take my grandmother
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but
she declined the proposal considering her health condition.
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Sanyou
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Cave
is in the sheer cliff at the northern region of
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Xiling
Gorge. This was about
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6 miles
away from the
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Yichang
City of China. This
is considered
as one of the best
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cave
scenery in the Asia and the whole part was something unexpected to me. Walking up the path from the
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cave
to the
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Zhixin
pavilion was the most memorable part of this tour. My father was with
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me and
he said ‘is not
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it
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beautiful
? ’ twice during our walk. I
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thought
I
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time
travelled to a distant past and was part of another
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time
and dimension that I
actually
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live
in. When we arrived near the
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cave
and looked around, I was awe stricken. It was quite surprising for me to witness a
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place
that I never
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thought
would exist. This
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place
reminded me the movie
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‘Time
machine’ that I
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watched
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many
years
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before
. It was
so
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beautiful
a
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place
that I liked every moment of our staying there. We spent the night in a hotel established in the
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cave
and that was enthralling. The meaning of the words ‘
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Sanyou
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Cave’
is
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‘Cave
of the Three Travelers’ and it
is said
that this is a
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place
that inspires
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people
. The exceptional inspiration I
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got
from this
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place
is something I will cherish,
probably
for the rest of my life.
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Sample Answer 2:

Recently my
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visit
to the Glacier National
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Park
gave me immense pleasure after a
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very
long
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time
. This is an
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area
where nature has bestowed her gifts
generously
to the
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mountains
. The
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place
is
also
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good
for hiking. I am
really
lucky that the memories are
still
vivid in my mind and here I
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got
the chance to
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describe
them.

Generally
, I try to take
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some
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visits
at the nearby locations with my family and
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sometimes
alone. I made this
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visit
all by myself and enjoyed a lot. In fact, this is a rocky
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area
filled with natural beauties.
So
, the best
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time
to
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visit
the
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park
is in winter, I
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think
. And the view may differ to others. The
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thought
appeared on my mind as I have
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visited
the
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area
in
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different
seasons
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but
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only
found it is charming most in winter.
Hence
, I made the
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visit
in the middle of December, last.

I made a solo
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visit
here in this
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time
.
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But
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before
this
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visit
, I
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went
there with my family members. In fact, it was the solo
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visit
for
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different
reasons.
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First of all
, I wanted to have
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some
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times
for myself. I was experiencing huge workloads from my office. By the way, I am a professional computer programmer and work with an international IT agency.
So
, I
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have to
follow
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some
strict
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rules
and regulations to
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meet
the deadlines. I need to
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meet
targets and
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other
issues within the allotted
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time
.
Besides
, I need to manage my team of as
well
consisting of 10 members.
As a result
, I need to remain busy and even
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have to
attend office for over 13 hours in a day. At the
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end
of the day, I become exhausted and this was the routine for last couple of months. To remove boredom from life, I decided to take break and
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moved
for the
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Park
to spend an entire day, alone.

To me, this is a
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place
for natural beauty. I find a sense of serenity in this
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place
. The wilderness amazes me. the carved peaks and valleys adjacent to the Canadian border are
really
adorable to look at.
Moreover
, the memories of hiking and riding on boat will remain for long. I walked about five kilometers on the hiking trail by over three hours.
Besides
, riding on the boat was a
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different
experience for me on the
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lake
of the
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Park
. This was
also
the perfect
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place
for camping
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but
I was unable to camp. I did not have the preparation for camping. Cycling is another adventurous activity here and I have
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seen
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many
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cyclers
exploring the
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area
. I will try to bring a bicycle
next
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time
whenever I
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come
. The bright night with millions of stars was the
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other
attraction for me.

I liked the wide glaciers and
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lakes
of the Glacier National
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Park
. This
is located
in the Montana state in the USA and
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visited
by
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a large number of
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people
. I like the
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mountain
ranges most here. The
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mountain
ranges are completely
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different
from the
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other
smaller
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mountains
I have
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seen
.
Besides
, the
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lakes
are on the
next
of my preference list. I liked swimming on the
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lakes
and fishing as
well
. The
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mountains
of the
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Park
formed around 170 million years
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before
and
still
they are on the same location.
However
, there are slight
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changes
in the shape and size of the
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mountains
and
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lakes
.
Besides
, the enriched animal species are loveable as
well
. This is
really
a great
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place
to pay a
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visit
.
22Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
85Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a place that you have visited that you particularly liked. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
976 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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