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Describe a famous celebrity from your country who you admire. v.1

Describe a famous celebrity from your country who you admire. v. 1
Describe a famous celebrity from your country who you admire. You should say: who the celebrity is what kind of celebrity this person is how famous he /she is and explain why you admire this celebrity. Sample Answer 1: Thank you very much for this candidate task card. Honestly speaking, it was a bit tough for me to pick a celebrity to talk about  as there are many of them to choose from. Finally, I decided to talk about David Beckham, who is not only a celebrity in the UK but also in the whole world. Interestingly, he comes from the same city I live in, which is London. David Beckham was born in Leytonstone, London in 1975. He now lived in London with his wife, Victoria Beckham, who is also a superstar, and with his four children. He is most widely known as a  great English footballer but he is also a model, spokesperson and a businessman. He played football for the England National team from 1996 to 2009 and also for the famous football clubs like the Manchester United and Real Madrid. As a professional football player, he became an icon around the world and probably one of the most esteemed celebrity alive. He is a legendary footballer who had a unique style in his bending free-kicks as a right winger. In 2004, David Beckham was listed in the FIFA's 100 greatest living player in the world. He was twice the runner-up for 'FIFA World Player of the Year'. These statistics are only a few to signify how famous he really is. He was one of the highest earners as a footballer in his time and in 2013, he was the highest paid player in the world. As a fan of the UK football team, I have  always liked David Beckham. He is quite an extraordinary player and a fashion figure. In my early college days, he was the footballer I wanted to be! Besides, he is a fashion icon and young generation loves his unique style very much. My respect for him increased, even more, when he announced the "7: The David Beckham UNICEF Fund" to help protect children around the world. He has been a UNICEF ambassador and his recent philanthropic works are quite exceptional and for that, I admire him greatly. He is a great person, legendary footballer, a successful husband, a doting father, a fashion icon and finally one of the most revered celebrities not only in the UK but also in the whole world. I guess anyone knows  him would admire him.   Sample Answer 2: I love to collect celebrity autographs and this is a hobby for me. I have visited in different parts of the world and have gathered autographs of the celebrities I have met. Now, I will discuss the celebrity from my country, Australia, I admire the most. Nicole Mary Kidman, better known as Nicole Kidman is an Australian celebrity. She is also a movie producer and been working with this arena since the 1980s. She got the breakthrough in a 1989 movie but she got global fame for her role in the movie – Days of Thunder. It was made and released in 1990. After the movie, she started moving ahead and had not to look back. Her struggles to become a celebrity was over and she became so. She has been awarded numerous prestigious awards and positive criticisms for her outstanding performance in the movies. Most of the cases, she won the awards for the Best Actress or the Best Leading Role. Nicole Kidman is a movie star and filmmaker. She has participated in a wide number of movies and also worked behind the screen as well. She started her career in 1983 and gained the world fame in 1995. She had to struggle in this time to create a platform for her own. She has performed in almost all types of movie genres but she is a better match for romantic and drama movies than the thriller, I think, as I found her performance in those genres far better attractive than her other movie genres. She is also playing some other social roles as well. Now she is involved with the UNICEF as a Goodwill Ambassador. Since her reputation soared, once she turned into the highest paid actress in the country. Besides, she also owns dual citizenship status, one for Australia while the other one is in the USA. And it happens as she was born from the Australian parents in Hawaii. After the initiation of her career, her road to success was not smooth. She had to be patient and continue her performance. With the gradual development, she became the leading actress in the country. Besides, she also has a passion for songs and she sings solo. However, some of her movies were under the scanner and some gave birth to controversy. She kissed a 10-year old boy on the movie Birth which was made in 2004. Later she resolved the issue and described that it was done to represent love, not for other purposes. She achieved Golden Globe Awards, Grammy Awards, Primetime Emmy Awards, nominations for Academy Awards among others. Further, she has a star on the Hollywood Walk of Fame. She was on the top of her success till 2009 and after that year she became more attentive on her career than before. She is now passing hefty moments with some drama movies and biopics. There a good number of reasons to admire this celebrity. In fact, she is not a celebrity to me, she is a very amiable lady with her kindness and love to her audiences. She rose to the peak of success but she never forgets her audiences. I had a chance to meet her in person at a social occasion. I have taken a couple of pictures with her and also collected her autograph. In the meeting, I observed that she is really a wonderful lady in all terms. She is able to make people feel comfortable in her company. Besides, she never hesitates to meet requests from her admirers which is not present among the other celebrities. She is a lovely celebrity leading a decent life. For all such reasons, I admire her most.
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Describe
a
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famous
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celebrity
from your
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country
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who
you
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admire
. You should say:
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who
the
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celebrity
is what kind of
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celebrity
this person is how
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famous
he /she is and
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explain
why you
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admire
this
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celebrity
. Sample Answer 1:

Thank you
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very
much for this candidate task card.
Honestly
speaking, it was a bit tough for me to pick a
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celebrity
to talk about
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as there are
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many
of them to choose from.
Finally
, I decided to talk about David Beckham,
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who
is not
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only
a
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celebrity
in the UK
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but
also
in the whole
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world
.
Interestingly
, he
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comes
from the same city I
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live
in, which is London.

David Beckham
was born
in
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Leytonstone
, London in 1975. He
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now
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lived
in London with his wife, Victoria Beckham,
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who
is
also
a superstar, and with his four children. He is most
widely
known as a
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great English footballer
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but
he is
also
a model, spokesperson and a businessman.
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He
played
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football
for the England National team from 1996 to 2009 and
also
for the
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famous
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football
clubs like the Manchester United and Real Madrid. As a professional
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football
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player
, he
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became
an icon around the
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world
and
probably
one of the most esteemed
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celebrity
alive. He is a legendary footballer
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who
had a unique style in his bending free-kicks as a
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right winger
. In 2004, David Beckham
was listed
in the FIFA's 100 greatest living
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player
in the
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world
. He was twice the runner-up for 'FIFA
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World
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Player
of the Year'. These statistics are
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only
a few to signify how
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famous
he
really
is. He was one of the highest earners as a footballer in his time and in 2013, he was the highest paid
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player
in the world.

As a fan of the UK
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football
team, I have
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always liked David Beckham. He is quite an extraordinary
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player
and a fashion figure. In my early college days, he was the footballer I wanted to be!
Besides
, he is a fashion icon and young generation
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loves
his unique style
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very
much.

My respect for him increased, even more, when he announced the
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"
7: The David Beckham UNICEF Fund
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"
to
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help
protect children around the
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world
. He has been a UNICEF ambassador and his recent philanthropic works are quite exceptional and for that, I
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admire
him
greatly
.

He is a great person, legendary footballer, a successful husband, a doting father, a fashion icon and
finally
one of the most revered
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celebrities
not
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only
in the UK
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but
also
in the whole
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world
.
I guess
anyone knows
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him would
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admire
him.
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Sample Answer 2:

I
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love
to collect
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celebrity
autographs and this is a hobby for me. I have visited in
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different
parts of the
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world
and have gathered autographs of the
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celebrities
I have met.
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Now
, I will discuss the
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celebrity
from my
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country
, Australia, I
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admire
the most.

Nicole Mary
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Kidman
, better known as Nicole
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Kidman
is an Australian
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celebrity
. She is
also
a
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movie
producer and been working with this arena since the 1980s. She
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got
the breakthrough in a 1989
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movie
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but
she
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got
global fame for her role in the
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movie
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
Days of Thunder. It
was made
and released in 1990. After the
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movie
, she
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started
moving ahead and had not to look back. Her struggles to become a
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celebrity
was
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over and
she
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became
so
. She has
been awarded
numerous prestigious
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awards
and
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positive
criticisms for her outstanding performance in the
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movies
. Most of the cases, she won the
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awards
for the Best Actress or the Best Leading Role.

Nicole
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Kidman
is a
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movie
star and filmmaker. She has participated in a wide number of
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movies
and
also
worked behind the screen as
well
. She
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started
her career in 1983 and gained the
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world
fame in 1995.
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She
had to struggle in this time to create a platform for her
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own
.
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She
has performed in almost all types of
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movie
genres
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but
she is a better match for romantic and drama
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movies
than the thriller, I
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think
, as I found her performance in those genres far better
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attractive
than her
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other
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movie
genres.
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She
is
also
playing
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some
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other
social roles as
well
.
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Now
she
is involved
with the UNICEF as a Goodwill Ambassador. Since her reputation soared, once she turned into the highest paid actress in the
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country
.
Besides
, she
also
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owns
dual citizenship status, one for Australia while the
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other
one is in the USA. And it happens as she
was born
from the Australian parents in Hawaii.

After the initiation of her career, her road to success was not smooth. She had to be patient and continue her performance. With the gradual development, she
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
became
the leading actress in the
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country
.
Besides
, she
also
has a passion for
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songs and
she sings solo.
However
,
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some
of her
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movies
were under the scanner and
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some
gave birth to controversy. She kissed a 10-year
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old
boy on the
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movie
Birth which
was made
in 2004. Later she resolved the issue and
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described
that it
was done
to represent
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love
, not for
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other
purposes. She achieved Golden Globe
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Awards
, Grammy
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Awards
,
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Primetime
Emmy
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Awards
, nominations for Academy
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Awards
among others.
Further
, she has a star on the Hollywood Walk of Fame. She was on the top of her success till 2009 and after that year she
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became
more attentive on her career than
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before
. She is
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now
passing hefty moments with
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some
drama
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movies
and biopics.

There a
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good
number of reasons to
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admire
this
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celebrity
. In fact, she is not a
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celebrity
to me, she is a
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very
amiable lady with her kindness and
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love
to her audiences. She rose to the peak of success
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but
she never forgets her audiences. I had a chance to
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meet
her in person at a social occasion. I have taken a couple of pictures with her and
also
collected her autograph. In the meeting, I observed that she is
really
a wonderful lady in all terms. She is able to
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make
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people
feel comfortable in her
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company
.
Besides
, she never hesitates to
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meet
requests from her admirers which is not present among the
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other
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celebrities
. She is a lovely
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celebrity
leading a decent life. For all such reasons, I
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admire
her most.
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27Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a famous celebrity from your country who you admire. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
11 paragraphs
1046 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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