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Describe a party that you enjoyed. v.1

Describe a party that you enjoyed. v. 1
Describe a party that you enjoyed. You should say: what it was about where the party was held what people did during the party and explain what you enjoyed about this party. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you're going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Sample Answer 1: Ooh, parties!   That conjures up so many different possibilities.   Children’s parties with jelly and ice cream and silly games like ‘pin the tail on the donkey’ when I was little, or more ‘serious’ celebratory reception parties after a wedding.   However, the most recent party I went to was neither of those things, and it was great! I’m going to tell you what it was about; where it was held; what people did during the party (which might be a bit unexpected) and explain what it was that I enjoyed about this party in particular. So, the occasion was a birthday, but not for a person, for an event.   In the UK – and indeed in many other countries worldwide now, there is an organisation called 'parkrun'.   This umbrella group sets up free, inclusive running events all over the country.    I think at last count there were 406 of these runs taking place every Saturday at 9. 00 a. m. at different locations throughout the UK.   Parkrun organise free, weekly, 5km timed runs. They are open to everyone, free, and are safe and easy to take part in.   The initiative first started about 10 years ago, with just one run, now it has expanded and new runs start up all the time.   It has become something of a tradition that every community run celebrates their ‘birthday’ on the anniversary of the date on which they were first established.   It is a good excuse for an annual prize giving, conversation and lots of cake!   This particular party was at a parkrun that is reasonably local to me, although not my ‘home’ parkrun, I made a special trip to their event to join in their celebrations. The ‘party’ was held at a place called Graves Park in Sheffield.   It is a lovely public open space, which also has a small animal park, so part of the 5km run takes you past an eclectic mix of animals including highland cows; alpaca; donkeys; pigs and a couple of curious goats.   Everyone assembled in time for the usual Saturday 9. 00 a. m. start to take part in the run, but because it was the Graves parkrun’s fourth birthday everything was a bit different from normal. . . So in terms of what people did at the party?   Well, we all ran 5 km for a start.   That’s not what usually happens at a birthday party, but it is what always happens at a parkrun.   In other ways though, the event was a bit more unexpected.   The main change was that the course was run in reverse.   This was quite comical, as it is confusing running in the ‘wrong’ direction, and meant some of the steep uphill climbs on the usual route were replaces with death-defying downhill scrambles!   It’s a bit like trying to cross your arms the wrong way round, you’d think it would be easy or at least ‘no different’ from how you usually do it - until you actually try.   Go on, have a go, you’ll soon see what I mean!   The next difference was that lots of us were in fancy dress!   I’ll wear fancy dress at any excuse.   I have a child’s toy wrap-around pony costume.   It looks great, like I’m riding a miniature pony, but is in fact incredibly light and easy to run in.   Other people wore onesies (all in one jumpsuit made to look like animals).   A few men wore drag (dressed in women’s clothes) some more imaginative runners came dressed up as Roman soldiers (complete with helmets and large circular shields) or various cloaked superheroes (Batman and Robin and Wonder Woman just for starters).   It was great fun, we must have been quite a sight, some 250 runners or so storming round in ridiculous outfits.   At the end of the run, lots of people had brought sweets or cake with them to share as part of the birthday celebrations.   We all adjourned to a convenient café within the park for a good-humoured prize giving.   Lots of awards were handed out, not just for running fast but for humorous things too.   Champion volunteer; fastest canine (there is a whippet that regularly takes park, and sometimes its owner’s even auctions the opportunity to run with the dog as it will drag the runners round and give them a chance of getting a really fast time! )  I clapped in recognition as the prizes were awarded, but, most exciting of all, there was one extra prize.   For ‘Best Fancy Dress Costume', I won!   My pony is called Roger, and we collected our prize of a big box of sweets together.   I am not very athletic, so I’d never win any sports prize for actually running, but I was so delighted to win a prize within the parkrun community I thought I’d burst!   After the prizes had been given out, we all stayed in the café, chatting, admiring each other’s costumes and most importantly of all drinking tea and eating cake.   Someone had even made a special parkrun cake with the parkrun logo on it.   It was a great party indeed! Why did I particularly enjoy it?   Well, I think it must be obvious surely.   I got to spend my Saturday morning doing my favourite thing, which is taking part in parkrun, with a fantastic group of people, followed by tea and cake. What’s more, I got an excuse to wear a party dress, have a good old giggle with friends AND I won a prize. What’s not to like.   Parkrun is great and parkrun event birthday parties?   Well, they are better still! [ Written by - Lucy Marris (2016):   Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]
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Describe
a
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party
that you enjoyed. You should say: what it was about where the
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party
was held
what
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people
did during the
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party
and
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explain
what you enjoyed about this
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party
. [You will
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talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you're going to say. You can
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some
notes to
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you if you wish.
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Sample Answer 1:

Ooh,
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parties
!
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That conjures up
so
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many
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different
possibilities.
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Children’s
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parties
with jelly and ice cream and silly games like ‘pin the tail on the donkey’ when I was
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little
, or more ‘serious’ celebratory reception
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parties
after a wedding.
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However
, the most recent
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party
I went to was neither of those things, and it was great!

I’m going to
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tell
you what it was about; where it
was held
; what
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people
did during the
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party
(which might be a
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bit
unexpected) and
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explain
what it was that I enjoyed about this
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party
in particular
.

So
, the occasion was a birthday,
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but
not for a person, for an
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event
.
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In the UK
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–
and
indeed
in
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many
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other
countries worldwide
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now
, there is an
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organisation
called '
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parkrun
'.
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This umbrella group sets up free, inclusive
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running
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events
all over the country.
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I
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think
at last count there were 406 of these
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runs
taking place every Saturday at 9. 00 a. m. at
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different
locations throughout the UK.
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Parkrun
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organise
free, weekly,
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5km
timed
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runs
. They are open to everyone, free, and are safe and easy to take
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part
in.
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The initiative
first
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started
about 10 years ago, with
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just
one
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run
,
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now
it has expanded and new
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runs
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start
up all the time.
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It has become something of a tradition that every community
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run
celebrates their ‘birthday’ on the anniversary of the date on which they were
first
established.
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It is a
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good
excuse for an annual
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prize
giving, conversation and
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lots
of
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cake
!
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This particular
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party
was at a
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parkrun
that is
reasonably
local to me, although not my ‘home’
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parkrun
, I made a special trip to their
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event
to
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join
in their celebrations.

The
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‘party’
was held
at a place called Graves
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Park
in Sheffield.
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It is a lovely public open space, which
also
has a
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small
animal
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park
,
so
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part
of the
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5km
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run
takes you past an eclectic mix of animals including highland cows; alpaca; donkeys; pigs and a couple of curious goats.
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Everyone assembled in time for the usual Saturday 9. 00 a. m.
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start
to take
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part
in the
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run
,
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but
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because
it was the Graves
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parkrun
’s fourth birthday everything was a
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bit
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different
from normal.
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.
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.


So
in terms of what
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people
did at the
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party
?
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Well
, we all ran 5 km for a
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start
.
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That’s not what
usually
happens at a birthday
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party
,
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but
it is what always happens at a
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parkrun
.
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In
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other
ways though, the
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event
was a
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bit
more unexpected.
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The main
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change
was that the course was
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run
in reverse.
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This was quite comical, as it is confusing
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running
in the ‘
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wrong
’ direction, and meant
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some of the
steep uphill climbs on the usual route were replaces with death-defying downhill scrambles!
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It’s a
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bit
like trying to cross your arms the
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wrong
way round, you’d
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think
it would be easy or at least ‘no
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different’
from how you
usually
do it
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-
until you
actually
try.
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Go on, have a go, you’ll
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soon
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see
what
I mean
!
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The
next
difference was that
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lots
of us were in fancy
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dress
!
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I’ll wear fancy
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dress
at any excuse.
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I have a child’s toy wrap-around pony costume.
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It looks
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great
, like I’m riding a miniature pony,
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but
is in fact
incredibly
light and easy to
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run
in.
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Other
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people
wore
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onesies
(all in one jumpsuit made to look like animals).
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A few
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men
wore drag (dressed in women’s clothes)
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some
more imaginative runners came dressed up as Roman soldiers (complete with helmets and large circular shields) or various cloaked superheroes (Batman and Robin and Wonder Woman
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just
for starters).
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It was
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great
fun, we
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must
have been quite a sight,
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some
250 runners or
so
storming round in ridiculous outfits.
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At the
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end
of the
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run
,
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lots
of
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people
had brought sweets or
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cake
with them to share as
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part
of the birthday celebrations.
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We all adjourned to a convenient café within the
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park
for a
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good-humoured
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prize
giving.
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Lots
of awards
were handed
out, not
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just
for
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running
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fast
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but
for humorous things too.
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Champion volunteer; fastest canine (there is a whippet that
regularly
takes
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park
, and
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sometimes
its owner’s even auctions the opportunity to
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run
with the dog as it will drag the runners round and give them a chance of getting a
really
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fast
time!
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)
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I clapped in recognition as the
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prizes
were awarded
,
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but
, most exciting of all, there was one extra
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prize
.
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For ‘Best Fancy
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Dress
Costume', I won!
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My pony
is called
Roger, and we collected our
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prize
of a
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big
box of sweets together.
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I am not
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very
athletic,
so
I’d never win any sports
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prize
for
actually
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running
,
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but
I was
so
delighted to win a
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prize
within the
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parkrun
community I
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thought
I’d burst!
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After the
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prizes
had been
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given
out, we all stayed in the café, chatting, admiring each
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other’s
costumes and most
importantly
of all drinking tea and eating
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cake
.
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Someone had even made a special
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parkrun
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cake
with the
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parkrun
logo on it.
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It was a
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great
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party
indeed
!

Why did I
particularly
enjoy it?
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Well
, I
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think
it
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must
be obvious
surely
.
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I
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got
to spend my Saturday morning doing my
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favourite
thing, which is taking
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part
in
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parkrun
, with a fantastic group of
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people
, followed by tea and
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cake
. What’s more, I
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got
an excuse to wear a
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party
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dress
, have a
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good
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old
giggle with friends AND I won a
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prize
. What’s not to like.
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Parkrun
is
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great
and
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parkrun
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event
birthday
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parties
?
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Well
, they are better
still
!

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[
Written by
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-
Lucy
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(2016):
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Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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74Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a party that you enjoyed. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
1059 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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