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Describe a long journey that you enjoyed. v.1

Describe a long journey that you enjoyed. v. 1
Describe a long journey that you enjoyed. You should say: where and when you had it how you got there and how long it took who you went with and explain what you liked about this journey. Sample Answer 1: I love to travel and explore new places and that is why I would be very glad to talk about a long journey that I enjoyed. I also thank you for this great topic and time to let me talk about a journey that was long and I liked. Back in 2009, I had a really long tour in different European countries and this the journey I enjoyed thoroughly. It took us 28 days to finish this tour and I had three classmates and a cousin with me in this journey. We went to Berlin, Paris, TRansylvenia, London, Vienna, Lisbon and Munich. This was completely a road trip and we never once travelled on an aeroplane during this journey. This was a fascinating expedition and the best one I ever had. As a fresh graduate, I had been struggling to find a decent job here in my country. After I had this journey, something changed inside me. I realised that having a job in a large company is not the only ambition in life. This journey revealed so much different cultural and traditional aspects in front of us. We explored many new cities where we have never been to. Many of these cities were historically significant and we enjoyed our time there a lot.   The journey also helped me have a better relationship with my friends. I discovered some of my interests that I never bothered about before. If I never had this journey, I would not take up keeping a journal or photography as my passions. Every city we visited has historic significance and we  visited several museums  in these cities. We mostly travelled by trains and enjoyed the views of the roadsides. We met some of the foreigners and enjoyed our conversations. Visiting museums and several other historic places have enhanced my knowledge in history and broaden my thinking pattern. Being away from home for a long time also helped me realise for the first time in my life how much my family and home mean to me! I would say that I liked almost everything about this journey. The timing could not have been more perfect, my companions were great, I explored some of the most beautiful places in the world, I reinvented myself, learned history, traditions and came back revived from this journey. It would not have been any better than this! Sample Answer 2: Travelling is a hobby for me. I love to travel in different countries and have already travelled in some of the European countries. Recently I made a trip to Italy from France. I am happy to discuss the topic here and would like to thank you for the opportunity to describe it. Being a French, I have already visited almost all the notable places of the country. So, it was my time to visit the other countries in my region, Europe. So, I made the plan to visit Italy and it was a random selection. Besides, the communication between France and Italy is also convenient and fast. The train is one of the fastest ways to reach Italy from France. Accordingly, I made the plan to visit Italy on the first day of November in yesteryear. I live in Paris with my family. In fact, I was born in Paris. So, this is the familiar city for me and I started my journey from this city. Actually, I started the trip from Paris station and it ended at Ventimiglia in Italy. It was interesting for me to travel in another country and alone. As it was a long distance and took around a night to reach Italy, I booked a sleeping car with attached bathroom facility. It took around over six hours to reach in Italy from France by train. The train ran at a great speed indeed. The speed was around 180 kilometres per hour. But it was really hard for me to manage the ticket. Usually sleeper cars are a bit expensive and it is difficult to manage the ticket without any pre-booking. Fortunately, my uncle, working in the railway managed the ticket for me after enduring lots of troubles. I made the journey by myself. Though my younger brother wanted to accompany me, I did not allow him for some reasons. If he came with me, I had to look after him and this is really filled with difficulties to look another individual on such trips. I had a plan to visit the notable parts of the country and accordingly made the arrangements. I made the hotel reservation and even reserved a car as well to take at the interesting places of Italy. But the most impressive part was the train journey. I never made such a long journey in train. I passed the night sleepless and watched a movie on my laptop. I think I took the right decision that I did not bring my sibling on this journey. If he was with me, I could not have enjoyed myself so much as I did it alone. I liked the speed of the train most. It appears that this is a fast route between France and Italy. It takes about six and a half hours to reach in Ventimiglia from Paris station. Besides, the facilities in the train were excellent. I visited in different parts of the country and stayed there for about a week. In this time, I have enjoyed the natural views, golden beaches, met with a large number of people and knew about their cultures, took part in different activities and more. The most important thing in Italy that attracted me was the traditional food items. I enjoyed them greatly. After passing the week, I returned by the same train in Paris. It was a great journey for me indeed.
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Describe
a
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long
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journey
that you
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enjoyed
. You should say: where and when you had it how you
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got
there and how
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long
it
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took
who you
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went with
and
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explain
what you liked about this
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journey
. Sample Answer 1:

I
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love
to travel and explore new
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places
and
that is
why I would be
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very
glad to talk about a
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long
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journey
that I
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enjoyed
. I
also
thank you for this
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great
topic and
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time
to
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let
me talk about a
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journey
that was
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long
and I liked.

Back in 2009, I had a
really
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long
tour in
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different
European
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countries
and this the
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journey
I
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enjoyed
thoroughly
. It
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took
us 28 days to finish this tour and I had three classmates and a cousin with me in this
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journey
. We went to Berlin, Paris,
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TRansylvenia
, London, Vienna, Lisbon and Munich. This was completely a road
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trip and
we never once travelled on an
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aeroplane
during this journey.

This was a fascinating expedition and the best one I ever had. As a fresh graduate, I had been struggling to find a decent job here in my
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country
. After I had this
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journey
, something
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changed
inside me. I
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realised
that having a job in a large
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company
is not the
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only
ambition in life. This
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journey
revealed
so
much
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different
cultural and traditional aspects in front of us. We explored
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many
new
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cities
where we have never been to.
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of these
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cities
were
historically
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significant and
we
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enjoyed
our
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time
there a lot.
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The
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journey
also
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helped
me have a better relationship with my friends. I discovered
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some
of my interests that I never bothered about
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before
. If I never had this
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journey
, I would not take up keeping a journal or photography as my passions.

Every city we
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visited
has historic
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significance and
we
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visited
several museums
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in these
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cities
. We
mostly
travelled by
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trains
and
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enjoyed
the views of the roadsides. We met
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some of the
foreigners and
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enjoyed
our conversations. Visiting museums and several other historic
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places
have enhanced my knowledge in history and broaden my thinking pattern. Being away from home for a
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long
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time
also
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helped
me
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realise
for the
first
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time
in my life how much my family and home mean to me! I would say that I liked almost everything about this
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journey
. The timing could not have been more perfect, my companions were
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great
, I explored
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some
of the most
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beautiful
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places
in the world, I reinvented myself, learned history, traditions and came back revived from this
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journey
. It would not have been any better than this!

Sample Answer 2:

Travelling is a hobby for me. I
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love
to travel in
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different
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countries
and have already travelled in
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some of the
European
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countries
. Recently I made a
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trip
to Italy from France. I am happy to discuss the topic here and would like to thank you for the opportunity to
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describe
it.

Being a French, I have already
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visited
almost all the notable
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places
of the
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country
.
So
, it was my
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time
to
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visit
the other
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countries
in my region, Europe.
So
, I made the plan to
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visit
Italy and it was a random selection.
Besides
, the communication between France and Italy is
also
convenient and
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fast
. The
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train
is one of the fastest ways to
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reach
Italy from France.
Accordingly
, I made the plan to
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visit
Italy on the
first
day of November in yesteryear.

I
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live
in Paris with my family. In fact, I
was born
in Paris.
So
, this is the familiar city for me and I
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started
my
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journey
from this city.
Actually
, I
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started
the
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trip
from Paris station and it ended at
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Ventimiglia
in Italy. It was interesting for me to travel in another
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country
and alone. As it was a
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long
distance and
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took
around a night to
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reach
Italy, I booked a sleeping car with attached bathroom facility. It
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took
around over six hours to
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reach
in Italy from France by
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train
. The
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train
ran at a
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great
speed
indeed
. The speed was around 180
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kilometres
per hour.
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But
it was
really
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hard
for me to manage the ticket.
Usually
sleeper cars are a bit expensive and it is difficult to manage the ticket without any pre-booking.
Fortunately
, my uncle, working in the railway managed the ticket for me after enduring lots of troubles.

I made the
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journey
by myself. Though my younger brother wanted to accompany me, I did not
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allow
him for
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some
reasons. If he came with me, I had to look after him and this is
really
filled with difficulties to look another individual on such
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trips
. I had a plan to
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visit
the notable
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parts
of the
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country
and
accordingly
made the arrangements. I made the hotel reservation and even reserved a car as
well
to take at the interesting
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places
of Italy.
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But
the most impressive
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part
was the
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train
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journey
. I never made such a
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long
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journey
in
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train
. I passed the night sleepless and
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watched
a movie on my laptop.
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I
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think
I
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took
the
right
decision that I did not bring my sibling on this
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journey
. If he was with me, I could not have
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enjoyed
myself
so
much as I did it alone.

I liked the speed of the
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train
most. It appears that this is a
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fast
route between France and Italy. It takes about six and a half hours to
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reach
in
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Ventimiglia
from Paris station.
Besides
, the facilities in the
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train
were excellent. I
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visited
in
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different
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parts
of the
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country
and stayed there for about a week. In this
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time
, I have
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enjoyed
the natural views, golden beaches, met with
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a large number of
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people
and knew about their cultures,
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took
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part
in
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different
activities and more. The most
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important
thing in Italy that attracted me was the traditional food items. I
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enjoyed
them
greatly
. After passing the week, I returned by the same
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train
in Paris. It was a
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great
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journey
for me
indeed
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
102Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a long journey that you enjoyed. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
11 paragraphs
1007 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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